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It's way past time when I should again thank my wonderful BRs - Iolanthe, Deja Vu and Lynn. Thanks to Deja Vu particularly for this part - it was her suggestion to significantly expand the scene with Ron and Barb.

Also, thanks to Ann for the suggestion of the Hawthorn flower!

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He wanted to be with Lois. He needed her.

Less than a minute later, he landed, unlocked her door, and entered her unit at a speed undetectable to the human eye.

From her bedroom, he heard the music of her heartbeat. "Lois?" he said.

There was a delighted squeal as she rushed through the doorway and charged into his arms.

His eager mouth found hers, and he kissed her with the hunger that had built up during the long hours apart.

"I missed you ... so much," he said when their first rush of kisses finally abated enough to make speech possible.

"I missed you," she said between kisses.

"I landed half an hour ago ... couldn't stay away."

"How long ... until you have to be at work?"

"It won't matter if I'm late ... long flight."

"We have ... some time," she said.

"Uh huh."

Thanks!

Corrina.

I've read a few chapters here and there.... I never really venture over to the fanfic forum..lol.

So I do hope to see this at the Archive when it is complete! I'm really loving this...

a nfic chapter wouldn't hurt either

Absolutely loved their visit with Ron and Barb, and Clark's idea to see her every evening (her time) is terrific!

Just one comment on if you would want to modify the following,

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Clark slid his fingers down her throat, revelling in the exquisite smoothness of her skin.

as in my sphere, this sounds like he is shoving his hand "down her throat" literally inside. But maybe that's just my own local take and not anyone else's.

Thanks for the great ride with this story!!!

They're apart! Argh! Thanks for writing in the little old lady that likes Superman having a girlfriend.

Don't let Linda King blackmail them into a Super wedding!
Great part. Keep it coming.
Waiting for the green opal to rear it's head.
I love opal. I have a few pieces.

Artemis

Good point, Evelyn. Thanks.

I'll fix it.

(That's what comes of changing things *after* the BRs have looked at it.)

That was superb! Especially this part...

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Clark clung to Lois as the final call for his flight rang in his ears. The *final* final call.

He held her, empathising with her inner battle to keep her tears contained as he looked into her glistening eyes. "I'll be back as soon as I can," he promised.

Moving away, he ran his hand down her outstretched arm. Their hands met, arms extending to the furthest point, and soon, only their fingertips were touching. "I love you, Lois," Clark said.

He took the step that severed their connection.

Her first tear broke free and skittered down her cheek. "I love you," she whispered.

Then he turned and walked into the jet bridge.

You could really feel the emotion in that scene. So beautifully and tenderly written.

And as for pavlova... all I can say there is a resounding yummmmm!

Great chapter!

Cheers
Elizabeth

Another great chapter. I loved the description of Lois's dress. I felt like I could see it.

This was a beautiful separation chapter. It was both intense and very real. Nicely done.

I'm glad the Ultra Woman is getting a positive reaction. It could easily have been negative and right now, given their separation, that is the last thing Clark would need.

And finally:

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SUPER WEDDING!

Bob

Loved the Ron and Barb scene, the decription of Lois' dress, the little lady with the Ultra Woman comment and the farewell scene - as well as the preview for the next instalment

Now, what was that about a Super Wedding? Seems like fun actually

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"Take it," he encouraged.

Lois took the box and gently lifted the lid, revealing a necklace - its fine white gold chain looping through a petite pendant featuring pink-tinged diamonds clustered into a floral design. She looked up to Clark, her face illuminated with pleasure. "Aw, Clark."

"Do you like it?" he asked - needlessly.

"I love it."

"I know that when you think of Hawthorn, you don't think of flowers," Clark said. "But this was the closest I could get to a hawthorn flower."

She laughed. "This is a hawthorn?"

"I couldn't find anything in brown and gold," he said. "So I hoped this would suffice."

That's so sweet! I love it!

(And imagine that Lois doesn't know what a hawthorn flower is...)

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Also, thanks to Ann for the suggestion of the Hawthorn flower!

Awwww...

As for Seb, I wonder what he is up to with that opal - if, indeed, it is an opal.

I'm not happy about Lois and Clark being separated, but, ah well...

Ann

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Clark knocked on Lois's door. When she opened it, he reeled as the vision before him stormed his senses. She was smiling demurely ... her hair had been gathered up, fully accentuating the sleekness of her neck ... and she was wearing a satiny red dress that boldly proclaimed her curvy femininity.

So, she planning on seducing him tonight instead of him seducing her Wednesday night?

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"We also can't risk Esmeralda seeing Clark outside my unit."

Yeah, she might think Lois is now also in the business of secretly entertaining men.

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And the headline read - 'SUPER WEDDING!'

Michael

2A2TV Thanks for popping in. This will probably get to the archive, but it's at the end of a long list.

Evelyn The scene with Barb and Ron - at first I had that a lot shorter, then DJV suggested it should be expanded so I put in some stuff I was going to cover later and I think it improved the scene a lot.

Thanks, Evelyn.

Artemis Yes, they're apart, but I think a change of pace was needed. Thanks!

Elizabeth Thanks. They always knew the separation was coming, but they thought they still had weeks to prepare for it.

Bob

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I'm glad the Ultra Woman is getting a positive reaction.

I think most people react well to seeing a couple in love. Thanks, Bob.

DW

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Now, what was that about a Super Wedding? Seems like fun actually

That's what I thought!

Ann You kept mentioning Hawthorn flowers - and even provided lovely pictures - so I used them as inspiration. Thanks!

Michael

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Yeah, she might think Lois is now also in the business of secretly entertaining men.

Would Esmeralda think that?

Thanks, Michael.

Corrina.