Feedback is much appreciated.

Bob

short, tortured.

Lois is on a mission! I'm wondering if, when she opens her bedroom door, Clark will still be there in her living room. Or, did he really fly away? I hope he stayed.

Looking forward to their conversation. Although, the fact that this is part 2/5 and not 2/3 doesn't bode well, does it?

Very nice introspection from Lois. And her reasoning, while still clouded by her great loss, is clear and rational. I wonder - if she offers to comfort Superman for his loss, and points out to him that he would also be comforting her in her loss, will Clark be hesitant to tell her the truth? Will he allow her to tell him about Clark while he wears the suit and also allow her to believe that Clark is really dead?

Intriguing possibilities here. Post again soon!

So close.

Bob, I have no idea which way you're talking this. Of course, you did mention once that you don't do angst well, so I'm leaning towards the happy version

Michael

I'm intrigued. Lois realizing that Superman is also grieving is indeed extremely close to the mark. I didn't see that coming. I'm curious to see where this goes next.

Laurach:
Yes. There was a huge amount of negative momentum build up by the end of 100 Meters. That, as well as the general TOGOM situation can’t be ignored. (Believe me, I tried.)


Vicki:
Per your FDK to part 1, I had hoped for a more pleasant journey. However, some trips through the shadows are necessary.

As for the 2/3 vs 2/5, the funny part is that it was my intent that this be a 3-part story. However, as if often the case, I didn’t control this story so much as it controlled itself. That negative momentum has to be handled properly. (or at the very least, I have to try my best to do justice to the situation)

Terry:
Thank you. The questions you raise are spot-on. These are the questions that I always wanted to see dealt with. With Lois in pain, and Clark right there, what does he do?

Michael:
So close… One of my favorite sayings when I’m cautioning young engineers about making assumptions is: Lois has constructed a very plausible argument based on the information she has. Unfortunately, since she was missing key information, her logically arrived-at conclusion, was wrong.

As for where we end up… I hope you’ll stay with me to find out.

HappyGirl:
Lois had to think it was important to disturb her at this time. Her conclusion is perfectly reasonable given what she knows.

Bob

Agree with the above posters. Lois is hurting. Clark is hurting. Can they communicate? Operas are written on such topics!

This reminds me of Clark in his parents' kitchen talking about how he had lost his friendship with Lois because she treated him so differently as Superman.

:p

Another great switch - Lois is basically saying "I want Clark, but I can't have him, so Superman will have to do."

Great story, Bob.