Hey, Kathryn ... I've already said most of this to you, but thought I'd say again.

I *still* think you took on an amazingly difficult task - to write a story addressed to a dead man (who pops up again later in the story ) in first person, through two time zones, with a memory that floats in and out ... phew!

To be honest, when I read your first draft I wasn't sure you could make it work.

But you did - it works really well.

This is a great story, Kathryn - well done.

Lois! Nooooo! Come baaaaaack!



Terrific!

Oy, now we're the only ones remembering that Clark is Superman and about to find an untimely end.

Good, strong part!
Michael

Female Hawk Thank you for your FDK! I couldn't have done it without you! You also put so much work in it reread every bit made great suggestions! Thanks again!

Happy Girl Thank you!

Darth Michael Yes, Lois memory is gone.
Thank you for leaving FDK!

is right!

It took me three tries to read this part as my angst-o-meter kept popping off. It is so frustrating watching Lois struggle to fix things and ultimately fail.

Bob