Gerry,
I love this! It is adorable and so very WAFFy.
I love your cinnamon bun and Tin Woodsman metaphors--very nicely used.
This just brought a smile to my face! Thanks for sharing!!
-Wanda
PS: I sometimes share a cinnamon raisin bagel with a co-worker. She eats the raisins and I eat the bagel!! LOL

Cute and WAFFY

Jose

Hi,

Beautiful story.

MAF

Aw Gerry this is so cute very nice. Laura

Adorable, gerry. The conversation between Lois and Clark was nicely underscored by Lois picking out her raisins and giving them to Clark and by how she prepared his coffee for him.

Lovely!

Irene

Gerry, I agree with Irene: lovely job of illustrating Lois's closeness to Clark - and all the reasons he sticks around and waits for her - while she's arguing the opposite.

(And, as someone who loathes raisins and picks them out of lots of things, I approve of the device! )

Thanks for posting this.


Wendy

Great story, Gerry! Congratulations!

LOL on the ending line

Write more!!

AnnaBtG. (who likes raisins a lot)

Awwwww. Very clever, very cute, very waffy.

But I think they're both wrong. Plain raisins -- blech. Raisins in things -- yum!

Nice job Gerry!

Very sweet!

~Liz

Other people used my adjective already! Gerry, this story is just plain adorable.

I loved how Clark just automatically ate her raisins as she picked them out -- the thing is, Perry or Jimmy wouldn't eat them, even if raisins were their favorite food. They just don't have that same kind of intimacy with Lois that Clark does, even before they are dating, and I think this was a really neat way of showing that.

As for their debate over the original letter, I thought it was really well done. I found it especially fascinating because I would have taken the same side as Lois did -- Cynthia is clearly fooling herself -- yet Clark makes some really good points about how there is probably more to the story. The most telling thing, though, is the fact that he's willing to go to such lengths to fill in those blanks. His tenacity should tell Lois something, so I was very pleased when she did in fact put the pieces together.

Very nicely done.

Oh, and I do understand about pulling scenes from other stories and reworking them. I've done that with a couple of my archived stories, too. I think this is great as a stand alone, but if you decide to put it back and build a longer story around it, I think it would be very sweet as well.

Kathy

Darn it, a third purely WAFFy story that I like! You people are insidious.

Truly lovely, Gerry. As Kathy said, I loved the casual intimacy implied by Clark eating Lois' raisins - and the casual way they both did it so automatically. It's sweet to watch them doing "couple" things without Lois even realizing they're a couple in the first place!

Thanks for sharing this one, Gerry.

Hazel

Gerry

This is wonderful.

Thanks for sharing this lovely story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Tricia

Gerry,

So clever and so well done.

The unspoken parts are my favorite. I know that's been mentioned, but I really enjoyed the intimacy of the two of them sitting down to eat together, and how unconscious and unforced it was. Like an old married couple underneath all the words.

Really nice.

CC

Gerry, this was so sweet! Thanks for pulling it out of your HD and sharing it with us.

I love the casual way Lois picks out her raisins and Clark eating them. LOL! My younger sister Jennifer used to pick out her raisins too, saying they looked liked fried flies. That put me off raisins for a while, too!



Ursie

Gerry,

I always make it a point to read anything that you have written. You have a way of seeing things that is just so fresh and this story was no exception. I greatly enjoyed it and think that you never have to make it part of a longer story, it sits perfectly just as it is as a short story.

Gerry,
I agree with the others
sweet and waffy
merry