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Posted By: carolm FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 12:31 PM
Boy, Flark is still a lunkhead, isn't he?

She's not mortified! She's intruiged!

I do understand Flark's reluctance to go any further than that kiss with her - in part because he doesn't think that's what she wants and in part because she's not Flois. I'm not entirely certain Flois will have the same reservations with Plark if it comes down to it but Plark is in a different place with their relationship than Plois is.

Boy - is that confusing?

I'm making more cookies today [Mom died 23 years ago today - she made the world's best cookies. Now I do, even though I can't find her recipe to compare - we make cookies today in her memory.] so I'll gladly send you some if it'll get 7 here any sooner. I'll send some in exchange for MoD 17 too...

Carol
Posted By: cp33 Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 01:39 PM
My heart breaks for all four of them, but this Clark is really struggling.
Posted By: sjp Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 02:57 PM
You can't leave it there! I'm hooked!! hyper

I loved this part, I can't help but feel really sorry for Clark...and how on Earth did Lois resist him when he was wearing only a towel? wink
Posted By: IolantheAlias Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 05:22 PM
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He should have known better than to leave Lois alone when she had access to the Planet's database and three years of unanswered questions.
Yes, he should have. But at least things are coming out in the open.

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Oh, she was in big trouble. There was no possible way to fool Perry, especially since he obviously knew something was amiss.
I love Perry.

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Lois laughed. "So that's my future? Superman fulfilling my every domestic whim?"
Ah, a girl can dream!

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Just looking at him made her heart beat faster and her stomach tighten unhappily that he hadn't wanted her to hold him.
And the angst comes in rivers!

Oh, Sue, this is great. Romance, complications, time travel, mention of clones (I really hope that your fic makes it so that whole clone arc doesn't happen), and Clark in a towel!

I join your group of imploring fans - yes, you posted today, but we want more ASAP!
Posted By: Female Hawk Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 05:33 PM
It was easier when there was a certain distance between them!

But this is much more fun.

Poor Clark, being married to, and living with, his still-single wife.

Poor Lois, a glimpse of a tantalising future, but it's Clark Kent, so there's no way he'll take advantage.

Could we have the next part real soon, please?
Posted By: Laurach Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 08:25 PM
I sure do hope this goes where I think it is going. Whew the temperature in NY is warming up. Now I know why. And lol on the Flark reference above I guess that makes past Clark Plark? Can't wait for more from my favorite writer! Laura
Posted By: Artemis Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 08:27 PM
A really great part as usual. Frustration builds as you so ably write it. What if they never go back?
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Artemis
Posted By: bellarase Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 10:56 PM
*sighs dreamily* Want to know how happy I was to see not one but TWO chaps of this fic posted?

Oh I was VERY happy!

Love LOVE this fic! Poor confused Lois' and Clarks.
Posted By: TOC Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/08/09 11:16 PM
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She logged into the Planet's database and brought up the front page for February 12, 1995 - the day after she had been brought forward in time.

"LUTHOR ALIVE AND BEHIND BARS".
Isn't this what didn't happen because of Flois' arrival in the past? And isn't this going to be part of the reason why Plois can't go back?

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"So do I ever cook?" she asked.

"Sometimes. Mostly you just, uh, supervise while I cook." Clark added the veggies to a saucepan and adjusted the burner's setting.

"Do I supervise while you clean up afterwards, too?" she asked, only half-kidding.

"Our deal is that I cook and you clean up." He opened the oven and pulled out a baking dish - without using hot pads. "But I always help you clean up."

Lois laughed. "So that's my future? Superman fulfilling my every domestic whim?"

Clark grinned at her. "Not so bad, is it?"
Oh, it's so not bad!!! mecry sloppy

And that kiss! Wowzers!! And Lois' realization of where it might have been going! And her loneliness in bed afterwards...

And then the next day, when Lois sees Clark in just a towel, is so full of unrelieved sexual tension that you could probably plug in a wire and give all the houses in the neighbourhood all the electricity they need! Poor Plois and poor Flark!

Looking forward to next part!

Ann
Posted By: grinch525 Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 06:31 AM
Great installment Sue! This universe is so sad, you have to come back and fix it!

We have Plark who gets to see what it's like to have a Lois in his life who actually loves him. Then, we have Flark who's struggling because he's lost his Lois, the one person who grounds him and completes him.

We have Plois who's actually getting a chance to see what a great guy her best friend and partner actually is. That kiss was definitely a wow. We need to work on getting Plois to "correctly" react to seeing any version of Clark in a towel. wink

One question I've always had with time travel fics, is it adultery to cheat with your spouse in a different time than they are your spouse? I would think yes, cause they aren't your spouse, well at least not at that moment...

You've shown that each couple is incomplete the way things are right now. Now, come back, and put everything back together again! smile
Posted By: Sue S. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 08:42 AM
Ah ha - the feedback fairy visited me and left gifts! thumbsup

cp33 - If your heart is already breaking, we're both in big trouble. laugh

sjp - How did Lois resist him in nothing but a towel? I think it's because she's still trying to get used to the fact that, someday, he's going to be her husband and there's still the residual shock of knowing that he's Superman. Once she gets used to hanging around him, maybe she won't be as shy…

Iolan - Good to see you again! I loathe the clone arc, so Flark was quoting me directly when he said, "Look, Lois, it was a mess. The whole thing was a mess from start to finish. ...if I could change anything about the past, I would change that." wink

Laura - Be assured that this is going where you hope it's going. Or, at least, there are alternate parts that go there. After I got done considering all the possibilities there were a couple that were just too much fun not to try.

Artemis - Heh, you're right. What if they never go back? Then again, what if they do?

Bellarata - Thanks! I think they're all four adorable when they're confused. wink

Ann - Ah ha, someone did notice that the past hasn't changed for Flark. Would you believe I actually have a reason for that? Ask me again later. <g> I'm glad you're enjoying the UST, because there's plenty more where that came from.

Grinch - You're absolutely right - all versions of L/C are incomplete right now. And you've touched a little on why some of them are that way. Are you hacking my hard drive? :p

Huge, HUGE thanks to everyone for sticking with me. I appreciate the comments and nudges more than you could possibly realize. It's going to take me a day or two to rework the parts since I split this one, but once it's cohesive again, I'll post part 7.
Posted By: amberlea Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 09:04 AM
I'm fairly certain this part was not too long...but that's just me!

The trouble with reading WIPs is that you get left hanging during those middle parts. If I had enough willpower to wait until a story was finished, these would be the parts that provide incentive to put the housework off a little bit longer!

The saddest part is that they're all 4 together (as in with someone), but not really.

Every part I read makes me wonder more how you're going to fix this...

Amber
Posted By: Sue S. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 09:15 AM
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Every part I read makes me wonder more how you're going to fix this...
Yeah, you and me both. Oh wait, that's right, I'm supposed to know what happens. Darn this short-term memory loss. Once I'm off the pain meds, maybe I'll remember... :p

Don't you worry, Amber, that housework will still be there later. It's one of life's great consistencies.
Posted By: Vicki Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 10:05 AM
Sue,

I just found this story and read through all 6 parts in one sitting. I am in awe! hail A major requirement for me when reading fanfic is that the protagonists be in character, which is one of the reasons I always jump at a Sue S. fic. And this current fic does not disappoint. Not only does Plark act and sound as I would expect Clark to, he acts and sounds as I would expect second season Clark to. Ditto for Plois, Flark, and Flois - all in character for the season they represent. Which is pretty cool when you think about it, and certainly makes the story that much more enjoyable.

While I was reading, it never once occurred to me that it might be a form of adultery to be with your past/future spouse. I asked my husband his thoughts on this. ("Honey, if time travel existed, and the you of 1995 came to the present, and I slept with you, would the current you be jealous?" "Wh..what?") Anyway, he agreed with me. That said, I do understand the part about their past selves not being married yet, so I guess you could argue either way on this one.

Looking forward to part 7.
Posted By: Mister Data Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 01:37 PM
ok, we have seen the future and know nothing seems to have changed. So, does that mean alternate Universes are being played with?


Flark has had his Lois for nearly 3 years and has, to him, an imperfect copy of his Lois. One that doesn't know how to be with him. Same goes for Flois.

Post more soon!

James
Posted By: Elisabeth Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 02:43 PM
I'm convinced that an AU was created by this whole debacle. That's why their pasts don't jive.

As for how Lois responds to Clark in a towel, the last time she just stammered and blushed so she's handling it just the way I would expect her to. Of course, the last time she was caught off-guard and wasn't tempting fate.


Elisabeth
Posted By: Darth Michael Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 02:46 PM
Oo, very nice fluff. Poor Flark, the issues he has to deal with :p

Michael
Posted By: Sue S. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 08:33 PM
Vicki!!!! - I was delighted to see your name pop up! thumbsup

Michael - Hee! There are worse issues to deal with, but I think you're on to something. Out of the four of them, Flark is getting the worst deal (at least he is right now).

Thank you all for your comments and support - I really do appreciate it. sloppy
Posted By: carolm Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/09/09 08:36 PM
So I have cookies made now. I'll even trade fic.

But when is part 7 coming?!?!

Carol
Posted By: BJ Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/10/09 07:09 AM
Hi Sue! Sorry I'm so late with feedback, but as predicted, RL is crowding my fandom time. grumble

I really enjoyed this chapter (although to get the Flois/Plark teaser, I could have waited a bit :p ). I agree wholeheartedly with those that have said all the Loises and Clarks are behaving in-character - and you do it with so few words. Take this for instance:
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"How are you?" Perry asked solicitously as he shut the door.

"Fine," Lois answered with a big, bright grin.

Perry's eyes narrowed and he gave her an assessing look. "Uh, huh," he said, clearly not believing her.
So we get in-character S2 Lois with the "big, bright grin" and Perry (who is pretty much the same no matter which season). Fabulous!

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That couldn't be right. Clark had been specific, to the day, about when they got married and now here was proof that he had shaved off at least half a year. Why was he lying about that? Where had she been for over two months?
I loved that Plois is piecing together their history by looking at the publication date of her past articles. I'm a little surprised that she didn't check out the period after October 6th. If she had, she would have seen the 2-week gap when neither of them had quite made it to Hawaii. laugh

It's been quoted already, but the conversation in the kitchen while Clark is making dinner is wonderful. What Lois wouldn't fall in love with Clark when she can see his true self; honest, open, confident ... and Superman! She is a gonner.

And, OH! that kiss... /fans self. Too bad Clark ran off so soon. It had serious potential...

I feel bad for Plois - she's trying so hard to fit into the life of her future self. I was going to say she was playing a part, but I don't think that's the case. She's attempting to *be* Flois and that detail has managed to slip by Flark. Once a lunkhead, always a lunkhead, eh? *He* thinks she's playing and doesn't understand that she really, really wants her future life (even if she's still a little freaked out by it).

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"Great," he answered. She glanced at him, then away, her cheeks coloring. Again, he mentally kicked himself for freaking her out by over-sharing.
This ending made me feel so sad. Flark really needs to let Plois know how much he wants her and appreciates her attempts to comfort him. Has he forgotten that this is S2 Lois? There's only so much rejection she can take.

I would like to point out that I've posted since you have and it's been more than 24-hours. Where's part 7? /insert Lois icon here - arms folded and foot tapping impatiently.

BJ
Posted By: Ank. K. S. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/10/09 07:54 AM
Loved it as always. So the change in the past hasn't been reflected in '98.. yet? After rereading some parts, I am again wondering who Wells' companion was right when the story started. And from their talk, it seemed as if things weren't exactly resolved... uhoh

Looking fwd to the next part, with all its torturous longing.

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Posted By: Vicki Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/10/09 08:49 AM
OK, so I had originally posted here some of my musings on time travel and how far the respective mixed-up couples should feel free to go. But now I'm thinking maybe it would be best not to engage in speculations, and just allow you to take this where you want it to go, and see what you do with it. So, I've deleted what I wrote, and I will wait (not so patiently) for you to put up the next installment.

- Vicki

PS - thank you for the warm 'welcome back' blush
Posted By: Sue S. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/10/09 05:57 PM
Carol - Oh, I'd feel guilty taking those cookies. Especially when I can see that you've posted the next part of Shaken. <slinks away to go read>

Brenda - I just hope RL doesn't interfere with your writing. I'm thrilled you took some time out to write me - it certainly made my day. smile I'm glad the characters seem true to you (and that compliment means the world when it's coming from a writer I admire).
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What Lois wouldn't fall in love with Clark when she can see his true self; honest, open, confident ... and Superman! She is a gonner.
Heh. Good. wink
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Flark really needs to let Plois know how much he wants her and appreciates her attempts to comfort him. Has he forgotten that this is S2 Lois? There's only so much rejection she can take.
Here's the thing about Flark - he's not being obtuse. He's making a deliberate choice to try and be the Clark she knew three years earlier - the guy who adores her but isn't going to push her into anything (and I elaborate on this a little more below when answering Vicki).

AnKS - Hey! Another reader I've missed! I'm glad that you're paying attention and wondering who Wells was talking to at the beginning. I left it vague on purpose. <evil cackle>

Oh Vicki! You deleted before I could reply! I did read your comments earlier today and I greatly appreciated your musings. You touched on one thing that does factor into the next part - which is that Flois has fewer reservations about getting close with Plark. The main reasoning I had for going in that direction was that Flois knows that Plark has loved her all along and is ready (and even longing) for her to feel and return the love and trust he has to give. Flark, on the other hand, knows that Plois has to be able to trust him and be comfortable with him before he can advance their relationship.
Posted By: carolm Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/10/09 06:26 PM
Okay - so 7 is coming... when exactly?

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Posted By: Vicki Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/10/09 07:17 PM
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The main reasoning I had for going in that direction was that Flois knows that Plark has loved her all along and is ready (and even longing) for her to feel and return the love and trust he has to give. Flark, on the other hand, knows that Plois has to be able to trust him and be comfortable with him before he can advance their relationship.
That, too. goofy

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You touched on one thing that does factor into the next part - which is that Flois has fewer reservations about getting close with Plark.
Oooooo... are you saying what I think you're saying? hyper To paraphrase Clark, just how close will they get, exactly?

Part 7! Part 7! Tonight! wildguy
Posted By: Rona V. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 11:22 AM
Well, I was going to leave FDK for this section, but...

I don't have cookies or another part of a WIP to tempt you with. However, I can withhold FDK until you post part 7. I hope that gives you an idea of what I think about this whole story, because you're not getting any more out of me until you post the next part. laugh
Posted By: Sue S. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 11:53 AM
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Here's the thing about part 7. Remember how I explained that I only had betas for the first few parts of this story? The snippets that became parts 6-8 have only been read by one other person and they were grossly unformed at the time. The more I read the beginning of part 7 (on which, I think, a lot of the Flois/Plark plot hangs), the sketchier it felt to me. So I pulled it from part 6 because that would give me a day or two to think about it. But after a couple of days of thinking about it (and maybe this is the medication talking), I started second-guessing myself. So now I have two versions, the original and the one I rewrote. So, long explanation short, once I can decide (to paraphrase Vicki paraphrasing Clark) just how close they get, I'll post. I'm hoping for this afternoon, but I don't want to promise anything.

So, Rona, is it a staring contest? Because I'm pretty good at those. Especially in my current, slightly drugged, state. :p

(and maybe it's worth noting that feedback always spurs me to write faster and the lack of it... not so much)
Posted By: carolm Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 11:57 AM
/waves hand wildly then makes self lower it and looks around to see if anyone else noticed/

If you want someone else to look it over before you post it...

I'd, um... I could find the time to do so for you wink .

/whistles innocently/
Posted By: sjp Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 12:21 PM
Why not just post both parts?? I certainly wouldn't mind, in fact, I'd find it quite interesting! laugh
Posted By: Rona V. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 12:52 PM
But, the promise of FDK won't make you write faster? ...No? Darn.

Okay, no staring contest. You win.

I completely get why Flark is withdrawing from Plois. It's lunkheaded, of course, but I get it. What I find really interesting is that Plois seems to be quickly falling for Flark in a way that I don't think she's necessarily ready for yet. Is it the realization that she -will- get to this point in her life that is allowing her to drop a couple of her barriers a little more quickly? Because once upon a time, Lois slammed the door in Clark's face. Now Plois isn't even thinking about door-slamming. Of course, the poor girl has had to adjust to a lot of shock over the past couple of days.

Either way, this is an intriguing tale you are weaving! I am very anxious for another part. I kind of devour your fics, so I'm trying really, really hard to be patient for the next segment, but failing miserably.

And I'll second Carol - if you need another set of eyes, I can volunteer my services. wink
Posted By: Vicki Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 03:43 PM
Sjp,

You beat me to it! I was just going to suggest the same thing. Seriously. I absolutely adore Sue's writing style, I gobble up everything she writes, and I am frankly fascinated by the idea of the two different paths our time-crossed couple might take. I really would be curious to see how each option plays out.

Come on, Sue, what do you say?

- Vicki
Posted By: BJ Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 09:10 PM
A motion has been proposed and seconded. I say we take a vote now. All in favor of Sue posting both versions of Ricochet part 7, say aye.

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Aye!
Posted By: carolm Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 09:11 PM
Aye!
Posted By: IolantheAlias Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/11/09 09:32 PM
Aye, and aye again!

(But I'll settle for any Sue S. post)
Posted By: grinch525 Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/12/09 06:13 AM
Add me to the list too.

grinch
Posted By: Mister Data Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/12/09 08:30 AM
AYE!!

Post both!
Posted By: Artemis Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/12/09 08:55 AM
Aye! No more second guessing, Sue! Whatever you write is great. I'm envious of your trash bin. Post both parts and we can vote! It will be the first episode of Fanfic Idol!!!!!
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Artemis
Posted By: Sue S. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/13/09 09:56 AM
Rona said:
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Because once upon a time, Lois slammed the door in Clark's face. Now Plois isn't even thinking about door-slamming.
Lois slammed the door in Clark's face on the show because she panicked about what was going to happen if things worked out. It was Clark's steady devotion that convinced her to give him another shot (and, of course, the threat of imminent nuclear destruction).

In this story she knows exactly what the future holds. She's got proof that Clark's kisses leave her weak in the knees and that they're both still very much in love (courtesy of Clark's own words and Perry's corroborating interview). Knowing that flusters her at the same time that it intrigues her. She likes the idea of being there for Superman, and couldn't stop staring at Clark in a tight t-shirt, but immediately poured the pot of water down the sink rather than risk feeding him pasta. It's not exactly a door slam, but it was a way to put on the brakes and gave her a chance to retreat upstairs and reconsider her reconsiderations.

My thanks to Carol, sjp, Rona, Vicki, Brenda, Iolan, grinch, James and Artemis (whew - just typing all those names gave me warm fuzzies laugh ) for nudging me along. I promise to include the first version at the bottom of the story (be gentle!). I'm hoping to have some time this afternoon to polish the rough edges and post.
Posted By: Artemis Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/13/09 08:17 PM
clap clap Looks for Ricochet 7. Hits refresh. Looks for Ricochet 7. Hits refresh.....
Artemis notworthy notworthy
Posted By: carolm Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/13/09 08:23 PM
Um... it's no longer afternoon. Anywhere in the continental US at least and it's tomorrow once you hit the mid Atlantic or so...

Sue?! Sue?! Where are you?!
Posted By: sjp Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/13/09 11:53 PM
It's "tomorrow" in England.

Ooh, does the delay mean we get both versions of part 7 and also 8 to read? hyper
Posted By: Sue S. Re: FDK: Ricochet 6 - 03/14/09 11:06 AM
Oh, the guilt. One last read through and I'll post. Seriously. I've got it open in a "preview post" window right now. <insert "terrified" icon here>
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