FDK - Fic-a-thon: Love is in the Err Part 2/4 - Lois & Clark Fanfic Message Boards

Lovely to see this back, James. I really enjoy how you write Tempus - he's such an easy villian to hate.

The character of Lady Jela-Nor is very interesting.

at her lack of super-breath. It's not one of the gifts that people normally think of when they think of Superman, but *this* is what keeps her out of the elite ranks?

I have to admit that she creeps me out a little (not entirely sure why) and I can't help but wonder if her lineage and her jealousy of the elite world protectors won't lead her into temptation.

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Never before had time experienced a Blue level ripple. Blue was reserved for near-disastrous level changes, like threats to the House of El. Lady Jela-Nor calmly reached over and activated her PTS (Personal Temporal Stabilizer).

You have some great technobabble in this chapter. Also, I was thinking that it's a good thing that FoLCs don't have PTSes, otherwise there's a lot of good fiction out there that would be rendered obsolete...

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Wells' was crushed. He had destroyed Utopia!

Poor Herb.

This is an interesting conflict you've set up.

I, too, am a little worried about someone from the House of Nor being in charge of this.

And what's with Tempus having a "Lane" in his real name?

Looking forward to more!
Amber

Bravo! i do confess to confusion over the Nor in the house and Lane as Templar's last name.

Lane? LANE!?! Oh, crap, that was supposed to be his middle name, not last name...

I will edit...

James, who wanted Templar to be decended from Lucy's side of the family.

Isn't it more ironic that a decendent of Lois Lane's sister is trying to kill Superman?

And, Jela-Nor has a lot of family history to live down, as you will see in the next part.

I'm glad you posted. I enjoy it when you throw around little words like "somewhen."

Elisabeth

Ooh, I totally missed this when I was on the boards last week. Glad you posted!

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Jela-Nor opened her eyes, turned to Wells, and nodded. One error fixed--Mazik wouldn't get his hands on the diary.

Whoa-huh? NOT get his hands on the diary?!

I can't decide whether that's a good thing, or a bad thing--after all, the diary is the catalyst for Lois figuring out the secret.

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I enjoy it when you throw around little words like "somewhen."

I agree with Elisabeth--"somewhen" is a rather nifty word.

For now, I like Jela-Nor. The debate is still on about whether or not I think she's actually going to "live down" her family's history though. On the one hand, you've painted her somewhat sympathetically here.

But on the other, she does seem to brag a lot about being more powerful than Superman (except for the breath thing), and she's actually working to prevent the diary from coming to Jason Mazik--and thereby to Clark, who destroys it.

It looks like the Nor family just can't beat out those pesky Els. :p