What do you think?

That was just great!

You write Lois's pain so overwhelmingly true and heartbreaking. I so admire how you bring out her self-loathing and her disintegrating confidence in herself as a woman. And with the possible loss of her job looming on the horizon, Lois actually stands to lose everything. Her loneliness is as bad as Clark's. And no wonder, since these two soulmates were meant for each other, and now they can find no others.

Poor Clark. Mayson's death seems even more horrible than usual in this fic. I could sympathize with Lois's panic at the thought that Clark had failed to save Mayson because he had been busy arguing with her.

Dan Scardino's entrance into this fic is interesting. I guess Mayson was originally introduced into the show because it was generally agreed that Lois needed to become jealous in order to appreciate Clark. Maybe Clark is the one who needs to become jealous here. Maybe that is the only thing that will make him want to have Lois back.

This is a fantastic fic.

Ann

Oh no! The moment I read about Mayson's murder, I dreaded Scardino's entrance.. and that too, after Clark just broke up, er broke off their agreement

Lois is on the rebound in addition to having an extremely low opinion of herself, bordering on depression. Dan Scardino (and some green-eyed monsters) might just do the trick... However, if he sticks to character (the one in canon) and is not open with her about his work, etc... he might hurt more than help her.

Wow... so much happened in one chapter... I can't wait to see where you go from here... though I mist say I hope for an LnC ending... I'm not counting on it.

am not liking this turn of events.....well, the angst is what's getting too much for me, and i hate Dan, really, he's almost worse than having lana in a fic, but this story is great, really interesting and addictive!

This story is fantastic. The gut wrenching emotion is so real. The whole argument scene got to the crux of the matter.

He stepped back from me, trying to use distance to soothe our heated fury. “I didn’t want this argument. I wanted us to put the past behind us and get on with our lives. Neither of us have been happy, admit it. The first step to getting past all this was always going to be me forgiving you. I have, OK. Now you just need to forgive yourself.” And with that he flew away, without waiting for a response from me.

This story is about Clark forgiving Lois and Lois forgiving herself. How often have we seen relationships (friendships, marriages, etc) fail because someone can't forgive the other person or they can't forgive themselves. When we can't or won't forgive it eats at us.

I am looking forward to more. I have faith in Lois and Clark that their love and rightness for each other will help them each to learn true forgiveness. Because unless they do neither will ever be happy and at peace with themselves and each other.

p.s. I hate that Dan has entered the picture

The forgiveness will be the toughest yet. I don't know what Clark has gone through to forgive Lois - the fic isn't from his POV or third-person. But you've painted a fine picture of Lois. Her life is crumbling. Will she be able to forgive herself? She's always held herself up to high standards. Of course, her parents never gave her unconditional love, either. She doesn't know how to forgive.

I look forward to more of this great story.

Lois needs a friend and should talk to some one. Scardino might prove a good listner.

Oh h.e....... no! He's needs to be bump off. I need my beat a Clark Stick

Wait... just thought of something.... Individual Responsibility and Red K..... That could be interesting.

Alisha...superb! This is an awesome story and I am just hoping that you'll feel sorry for us and post more of what you have already written. I wasn't sure if that was a freudian slip or not. I never thought I'd see the day when I welcomed Dan, but this time, I'm glad that he has appeared. Lois need this--needs him right now, to reinforce the fact that she is still a desirable woman and in spite of what she did to Clark in the past, she deserves to be loved for the woman that she is and not be treated like some cheap "booty call". I hope Dan gets Clark jealous and make him come to terms with what has transpired between he and Lois. I don't want Dan to get hurt, but please work this out! I am, however, glad that Mason is out of the picture. I think things will be much clearer for Clark now.

~Sheila

I think you wrote this part much better than the ABC writers did. That's what I think.

Thank you for all your comments. And I send my apologies to all the Dan-haters out there for including him!

That was a great part. And I can't help but think that Clark had been brooding on the Northpole and therefor missed Mayson's death.

Lois was paying him back in kind so he would get over his hurt and forgive her? And Clark so loves her. Still.

Michael