FDK: Bridge to the Past 7/12 - 12/15/08 11:57 AM
I loved this chapter. The interactions between Bernie and Lara, between Lara and Lois and the Kents acceptance and sharing of their pictures of Clark with Lara. Very heart-warming.
LOL! Never one to beat around the bush, Lois goes straight to the heart of the issue.
And Lara's response:Very nice imagery here. I could practically see Clark getting embarrassed in a similar situation. Must be genetic. Cute.
Lois is awesome. I loved it that Lois set up this little dinner party so that Lara and Clark can finally talk. Can't wait to see what happens next.
One suggestion for the archive - the <> around the dialogue in this chapter made reading a little ...not harder, but less smooth for me. Maybe swap it around to only show Kryptonian speech in brackets instead would flow better.
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Lois dropped her purse onto the floor and folded her arms, shooting daggers at the woman with her eyes. "I'm here," she said, her blood boiling over, "because my husband won't make love to me anymore!"
And Lara's response:
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Lara snapped forward again, gaping at Lois with eyes that widened until they seemed to bulge out of her face. Her cheeks turned a flaming red that would have rivaled one of Superman's capes. Lois would have laughed at her expression if she hadn't been so angry. Or so desperate.
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His wife scrambled down from his arms, straightened her skirt, and said, "<Exactly what I told you, Clark---dinner with your parents.>"
One suggestion for the archive - the <> around the dialogue in this chapter made reading a little ...not harder, but less smooth for me. Maybe swap it around to only show Kryptonian speech in brackets instead would flow better.