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Nice. I like that we're hearing about the scene where Clark lost control and told her he was Superman rather than us experiencing it first hand.

I liked this a lot too:

Joan

Bakasi, what a great first line! I am really happy you found time to write again.

This is so heartbreaking. I can picture Clark telling Lois in her apartment about how he feels. He is so sure that she is going to deceive him, poor man.

I like it that you had Lois enter the apartment without Clark opening the door for her...

Hope to see more from you soon

As usual you reached into the depths of our souls and wrenched them a bit for this scene. Poor Clark, feeling so depressed about having revealed himself bare (emotionally) to Lois and feeling like she was going to tear him to shreds publicly, that he doesn't even want to heal from the Kryptonite poisoning or save his parents from the onslaught of reporters that will descend upon Smallville.

I'm a little confused about the timeline though. Did Clark tell Lois he loved her on the park bench as he did in canon before she accepted Lex's proposal or did he do it the day before her wedding? Or did he confess as Superman to being Clark at her apartment the night before her wedding or another time altogether? It all sounds like it happened within twenty-four hours, instead of weeks or days.

It would be strange for Clark to still be moping about Lois telling the world about him being Superman, or ganging up with Luthor about it, if it happened weeks before. And I cannot believe that he'd wait weeks before telling his folks that his secret was out, with someone he doesn't trust, as he clearly isn't doing with Lois at the moment.

I also don't understand how Clark telling Lois his secret wouldn't change how Lois acted. She *still* accepted Lex's proposal? She *still* walked down the aisle to Lex? Or did Clark not tell Lois until the night before her wedding and then went to meet Luthor and got himself locked in the cage?

I liked the bit of humor at the end, showing us that they would be all right:

I liked how it showed that even though Clark bared his emotional soul to her, that he wasn't going to let her push him around. And she rebutted, well, 'just because you're Superman doesn't mean you'll end up on top'.

I'm glad you liked this despite the inconsitencies. He tells her as Superman when they meet in her flat. I had never really thought about how much time passed until the wedding. I figured that Luthor had it all planned.

I liked the story but was confused about the time passage. Especially since the way it was working Clark told Lois before she got engaged.

The title seemed so hopeless... and yet not all hope was lost. Good job.

Nice story. I kinda liked how Clark was punishing himself for what he perceived as doing wrong - telling her and then preventing the sun from healing him. How can he allow his body to heal when he thinks his heart never will?

Oops?

Wow, he managed to avoid her for what, a month? Didn’t someone just call him a lunkhead?

Clark! How could you. Lois knows. He suspects Lex knows from Lois. He knows Lex is kind of a bit of a crook. And yet, he’s only now starting to think about evacuating his parents?

Well, he can’t pick the lock while banging against the door, no can she?

Well… he *had* abandoned her.

Michael