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This Comment section is for both parts of "It's a Wrong Christmas".

If you've only read Part One, here's Part 2 .

Here's the link, in case you're interested in reading more of Wrong Place, Wrong Time, Wrong Clark . I know this is a long on-going epic (still a WIP), so I've broken the story down the shorter stories (arcs) on the TOC page in case you only want to tackle it a section at a time.

I would like to thank IolantheAlias and Mrs. Luthor for being my wonderful, hilarious, and inspiring Betas on Wrong Clark.

Comments?

See I knew readin this was worthwhile.

You have this passage really early on "“The Luthor House?” Clark repeated with terseness, before surprise hit him. What was Lois doing reporting on homeless children? Lois had hated everything about the Beckworth School article. Why was this first he had heard of it?"

I am pretty sure it should be "Why was this the first he had". I don't think first can stand alone.

Then there is "“Lex Luthor graciously invited Lois spend the day at his charity to report on how the children are spending their Christmas Eve. She took Jimmy with her,” Perry explained." I am pretty sure it should be "Lois to spend".

she deppened the kiss. I really did not notice this on my first read.

I think this should say "He knew he had hurt". Sorry to point out so many problems.

Thanks for all your help, John. Hope you had a good holiday.

EDIT: All fixed. And all within that first scene too. <<crawls under a rock to hide until the embarrassment wears off or it's time to post the next installment of Wrong Clark, whichever comes first>>