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Here we have it, FoLCs, the conclusion to this weird little tale. As always, thoughts and comments are very much appreciated.
Battle On,
Deadly Chakram
"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
"One little spark of inspiration is at the heart of all creation." ~ Figment the Dragon
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What a great ending!  Clark overcoming all adversity! Tempus looked again at the statue with such anger it almost could have melted the stone. Then he sighed. It was ironic, he thought. All of his actions in this world had only worked to ensure Superman's victory. God, how he despised irony sometimes.  This was the perfect ending to this story. I can't find fault anywhere. Excellient. I could hear each and every character's voice when they spoke (especially Clark and Tempus). Hugs! Well done. Very well done, indeed.
VirginiaR.
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I really liked the debut of Superman, Lois naming him, the marriage and especially Tempus learning that not only had his plan failed, but it backfired.
John Pack Lambert
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Hi, Virginia!  What a great ending! You tie everything together so well. We get Superman, a terrific introduction, the perfect wedding, and Tempus taken down by irony! I love it! Surpurb! Awww, shucks! Thanks.  Excellient! This is why no one else could be Superman but Clark. He rises above all adversity to become the better man. Thanks. I was worried it was a little too preachy, but I'm glad you liked it.  I wasn't expecting Clark's first public rescue with that header.   This was the perfect ending to this story. I can't find fault anywhere. Excellient. I could hear each and every character's voice when they spoke (especially Clark and Tempus). Hugs! Well done. Very well done, indeed. Wow, that's quite the compliment! Thanks so much for coming with me on this strange, twisted ride.
Battle On,
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Originally posted by John Lambert:
I really liked the debut of Superman, Lois naming him, the marriage and especially Tempus learning that not only had his plan failed, but it backfired. Thanks, John! So glad you joined me on this journey, and that you liked all the little tie-ups here at the end of it all. Tempus will never learn, will he? 
Battle On,
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"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
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A great ending and a wonderful story!
Sydney
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Originally posted by Sydney: A great ending and a wonderful story! Thank *you*, for reading and reviewing! Glad you enjoyed it. I had fun writing it.
Battle On,
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I have not posted comments as much as I should have on this story, yet that does not mean it wasn't awesome! Very nicely done. Having Tempus show up every few years without interacting with Lois or Clark was a different tactic which really worked. Thanks for the story! Oh, by the way, great picture of you and Dean! 
Morgana
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Originally posted by Morgana: I have not posted comments as much as I should have on this story, yet that does not mean it wasn't awesome! Very nicely done. Having Tempus show up every few years without interacting with Lois or Clark was a different tactic which really worked.
Thanks for the story!
Oh, by the way, great picture of you and Dean! Thanks on all accounts, Morgana! I thought it could be fun if Tempus took more of a "man in the shadows" role, instead of his usual, very hands-on approach. Glad to know that it worked for you. Thanks for the compliments on the pic. Dean is *such* a sweet guy. My write up is in the Off Topic forum, along with a topic I made for youtubs vids of Dean's Q&A.
Battle On,
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OH MY GOSH!!!!! Wow. This story was just so fantastic. I caught up the other day, and I practically held my breath from start to finish. It was phenomenal. So much emotions and plot twists throughout this all! I wish I had the time to tell you more, because I could really go on a long time, but unfortunately for me, finals are this week and I'm WAY behind on projects after missing class and doing so much makeup work. (Fingers crossed that I'll pass everything...) Suffice it to say, I found this tale an excellent method of procrastination.
Nothing spoils a good story like the arrival of an eye witness.
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Originally posted by Mouserocks: OH MY GOSH!!!!!
Wow. This story was just so fantastic. I caught up the other day, and I practically held my breath from start to finish. It was phenomenal. So much emotions and plot twists throughout this all! I wish I had the time to tell you more, because I could really go on a long time, but unfortunately for me, finals are this week and I'm WAY behind on projects after missing class and doing so much makeup work. (Fingers crossed that I'll pass everything...) Suffice it to say, I found this tale an excellent method of procrastination. Mouse! Thanks so much for the kind words. I love that you were practically holding your breath. Exactly what I had hoped for (because I am evil). Thanks for stopping in to read! Good luck on all of your finals. I claim no responsibility for your procrastination though. 
Battle On,
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"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
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Aww what a lovely ending! I thoroughly enjoyed the ride. Superman makes his debut, Lois & Clark get married and Tempus loses once again. Gotta love it!
Superman: I hear you've been looking for me.
Lois: All my life.
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Originally posted by jackiek:
Aww what a lovely ending! I thoroughly enjoyed the ride. Superman makes his debut, Lois & Clark get married and Tempus loses once again. Gotta love it! All those things you mentioned - that's a happy day for everyone involved. Except, of course, for Tempus. Glad you enjoyed the ride. I certainly had fun crafting it!
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Hi Vicki! I just managed to catch up with at least one story /points at part 17’s FDK way down there and this one/ "I'm not sure yet. This whole idea seems really...silly...to me," Clark answered, sounding uncomfortable and resigned. /imagines Clark being dressed up as Super Goof/ He emerged from the bathroom, wearing the latest of his mother's creations. Lois' eyes grew wide. Her mouth opened slightly, but she did not speak. She stood, leaving her spot on the bed next to Clark's mom. Chippendale’s work uniform? "No," Lois said breathlessly and shaking her head. "You look incredible." She ran her finger over the well-defined bulge of his bicep. Sounds like Martha will have to mop the floor again before someone slips and hurts himself on the puddle of drool. "Some sort of...I don't know. Emblem? Symbol? Something to announce to the world just who you are." Maybe if he wore his driver’s license around his neck? I've owned quieter Hawaiian shirts." Michael
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Hi Vicki!
I just managed to catch up with at least one story /points at part 17’s FDK way down there and this one/ Hi, Darth! No worries, I've been running around like a chicken without a hand myself. Finally catching up on feedbacking the feedback. Chippendale’s work uniform? <writer imagines, chokes on own drool, requires rescuing by Clark> Sounds like Martha will have to mop the floor again before someone slips and hurts himself on the puddle of drool. Maybe if he wore his driver’s license around his neck? <imagines instead a dog collar with shiny tags> Clark: Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! And that’s not even talking about the male protective sports equipment his mother included. And yes, in Renaissance times, the clothing of pretentious men did intentionally emphasize things. Clark:  So, he could have gotten away wearing a Casper’s uniform? ![[Linked Image]](http://cosgan.de/images/smilie/figuren/g025.gif) Either that or a big fat bull’s eye. Clark: That's what I keep saying, but no one is listening to me. Actually, that would hamper things. He *has* to take it off from time to time. Lois: That's true. Okay, he's allowed to take it off to service me and to shower. [Kent kids' outfits]  Fur, horn-helmet, big hammer strapped to his back? Thor: I'll sue!!!! Clark: Great, a billionaire and a god are both sueing me now.  Hence the reason he should just snipe-shoot Lois and put a couple of Kryptonite bullets into a grieving Clark. Tempus!!! Stop taking notes! That was a fun ride, Vicki! Thanks, Michael! Thanks for taking this ride with me!
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Hi, Darth! No worries, I've been running around like a chicken without a hand myself. Finally catching up on feedbacking the feedback. <writer imagines, chokes on own drool, requires rescuing by Clark> /ER senses a pattern/ <imagines instead a dog collar with shiny tags> So he won’t get lost when he hits a meteor the next time. quote: So, he could have gotten away wearing a Casper’s uniform?
<Superman-colored Casper> Michael
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So what if I want an excuse for him to rescue me? Er...I mean...I have no idea what you're talking about. <Some ne’er-do-well readies little knife to cut strap> MXY! Get back here! Clark: <flies like a bat out of hell> Can’t get worse. /Lex returns from the dead/ Clark: Always! And a Merry Christmas to you and your hubby! Thank you and back atcha! Hope it was lovely for you!
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Better off microchipping him. ![[Linked Image]](http://cosgan.de/images/midi/verschiedene/b075.gif) quote: Clark really mucked up all the romantic options for that day, didn’t he? Did he at least get her chocolates? Clark: <produces box from Switzerland> I guess he’s golden then. LOIS: *munch munch munch* Uh-huh. *munch munch munch* quote: <Some ne’er-do-well readies little knife to cut strap>
MXY! Get back here! Michael
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Originally posted by Darth Michael: Better off microchipping him.
quote: Clark really mucked up all the romantic options for that day, didn’t he? Did he at least get her chocolates? Clark: <produces box from Switzerland>
LOIS: *munch munch munch* Uh-huh. *munch munch munch*
quote: <Some ne’er-do-well readies little knife to cut strap>
MXY! Get back here! Awww, Mxy's soooo cute and such a little scamp! Hoping things are nice and quiet for you now and stress-free!
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Hoping things are nice and quiet for you now and stress-free! Err… I’ve decided to cut my vacation short and head back to work starting today. Much less stress that way. Michael
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