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This was a very action packed section. Hopefully Lois can lead them to the Martian.


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LLF,

Having been a Silver Age contemporary I have some problems with your story.

I will PM you.


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This was a very action packed section. Hopefully Lois can lead them to the Martian.


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Loved this segment! Glad to see you back!


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Originally posted by John Lambert:
This was a very action packed section. Hopefully Lois can lead them to the Martian.
I'm glad you liked it. There will be some more action in the next two chapters.

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Originally posted by KenJ:
LLF,

Having been a Silver Age contemporary I have some problems with your story.

I will PM you.
Thanks again for pointing out those few details. I'll make some edits.

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Originally posted by VirginiaR:
I loved all the action.
I'm glad you appreciated the action.

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How did Lex Luthor discover the Martian's spaceship? That would be an interesting story.
Could be an interesting prequel idea... You never know.

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I don't understand why Lex having his spaceship would bother him so much, as to make him go against his nature.
Mostly, Lex was trying to blackmail him by threatening to expose him as a Martian to the entire world if he didn't do as Lex asked. Luckily, he's done taking orders from Lex.

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You mentioned that the Martian rounded up many of them and put them back into prison, except Bane and Scarecrow? So, the Giganta, the Mr. Freeze, the Cold One, and Sinestro were captured? Go Martian! clap
Actually, to be clear, he didn't round up the non-Gotham villains, so Giganta, Captain Cold, and Sinestro also escaped. Also, Mr. Freeze should have escaped. That part was a typo. blush

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Clark should have offered to warm up his new friends with his heat vision after being frozen. I figure the Flash could warm himself up by running around the Earth a couple of times, but WW dresses so skimply anyway. Of course, it would be perfect for Lois to walk in while Superman is warming WW. Hee-hee. There's a fight worth watching!
Hmmm... Wonder Woman vs. Lois? That might be a fun fight.

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Loved this segment! Glad to see you back!
I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Thanks for all of the comments. A new chapter should be posted tonight.

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On WW verses Lois Lane, WW would loose.


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