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Oh, how wonderful. I suspected that Alice wasn't all that she seemed when she didn't know what luggage was. This was a good family match for her as well.

At first, I thought she might be the daughter of Zara and Ching, but then they would probably have to bring Ben-El back to New Krypton with them as the new rulers of NK, and Clark and Lois probably wouldn't be okay with that.

I would have loved to see Lois's POV of having a NK as a guest in her house. (Maybe, if you're busy, post it as a challenge.)

What you had the Foundation do to Lex's old holdings was very interesting. The concept of making his bunker from ASU into a mall, genuis! If only Lex had thought of that, narrow minded fool!

I was a little confused by the dates. How exactly is January 2089 a few months earlier than the picnic which was in 2039?

So, you said something about two more stories (this one and one more) or were you including Ali-Ce in that total? Because the "THE END" at the end of this one seemed kind of final. (BTW: I missed your link to the comments that you usually include at the end of your stories).

Since all of these stories include (mostly) the same beginning, I think you should set them up as one story for the Archives and have each child's "love match" be a separate chapter. If I remember correctly Jon's love match was described in Vol. 2, which has already posted on the Archives, right? So, you wouldn't be able to include it as a subsection of that volume. It would probably get more readers than people having to click on each link and trying to remember to get them in order, etc. (i.e. idiot proof it for them -- not that LnC readers are idiots, not at all <<trying to get foot out of mouth>> but sometimes, we can't think straight in the middle of the night and we want to read a story. )

Anyway, I loved the series. How fun! Thanks for letting us get to know the next generation.

Hi Virginia,

It would appear that I need to correct a typo. That was supposed to be January of the same year.

There will be one and possibly two more so that 'The End' is not so final.

I'm going to leave you guessing as to just who they will be.

I still have twenty some days to get them in.

I had contacted Labby and she said the preference for the archive would be a single story.

Hmm…Nah…



Sounds like matchmaking to me…

Sounds like she looks like Lois.

The stuff your servants carry around in your wake when you travel.

Right. I’m guessing someone had to inherit the Lane Eye Impairment.





So she doesn’t try to escape?

Yes.

Since I was just pointed to research by Virginia, I’ll just say Michael

Hi Michael,

I'm a little disappointed in myself. I didn't think that I was being that transparent with Alice's origin but you figured it out right away.

I'll need to be more circumspect next time.

Hi Michael,

FDK2 -

One of the reasons she was staying with Lois and Clark was so that UW could teach her how to handle her powers. She was newly arrived from NK and needed to learn.

The gown - originally it was selected due to a similarity of design to NK fashion. It was for that reason that it was deened suitable to wear for the bonding ceremony.

And yes, we aren't done just yet.

Don’t worry, Ken. I drive authors nuts with this on a way too frequent basis. I once spotted a pregnancy about a 100 words in or so. I’ve maybe channeled Lois too much in recent years? Aaaanyhow, more circumspection is always welcome in my book Revealing the surprise really is the biggest challenge depending on the story. You want the reader to guess and suspect, but not too soon, preferably making it obvious just before the official reveal.

Aaaah… Council approved wardrobe

Michael