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Originally posted by Darth Michael:
/recommends getting them someplace where there won't be an audience. At least in the second half of the fic.

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She dumped her briefcase and overnight-bag onto the full bed with monotone comforter cover. She could just picture telling Perry, Cat, and Jimmy… wait, that guy wasn’t Jimmy. Her brow furrowed. He was too short, and his hair has was too long and too, she shook her head, blond?
I think you just wanted to say "his hair was too long". At least just removing the has is the simplest way to fix the line.


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Originally posted by John Lambert:
I think you just wanted to say "his hair was too long". At least just removing the has is the simplest way to fix the line.
Thanks. Fixed.


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