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Not many changes in this section, just the fact that it's earlier in the story. It's probably my favorite part of the story, since it's all based on the time I spent as an intern in DC. It's all pretty accurate, so anyone who's never been to DC has now been there virtually. <G> Also, the random trivia is all true. I played on one of the softball teams that played on the Mall and Clark's story about getting lost in the tunnels happened to a friend of mine who was interning for Dennis Hastert at the time. Anyway, I hope you had half as much fun reading this part as I had writing it.  Annie
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A blast from the past... I was remembering my own moonlight tour of the monuments. Not, unfortunately, with such a hot tour guide  He nuzzled his cheek against her hair and his breath felt warm against her
skin. “If you turn right again … you’re back where you came from.”
“But we don’t want to go back...do we?” she asked quietly.
Clark grip around her waist tightened, and she felt him take a deep breath. “No. We don’t want to go back.”
“So show me what’s next,” she said softly. I *love* this sequence. Lots of unspoken stuff going on there. Clark’s eyes dropped automatically to her legs, then returned swiftly to her face. He looked away, starting to blush, and Lois could help but grin. The eternal boyscout. If she caught anyone else checking out her legs she probably use them to give them a swift kick, but Clark.... Well, for some ridiculous reason, she found herself wishing she was wearing a skirt. A short skirt. lol!  PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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Hi, Great part!  Yes!!! “I don’t know,” Clark said, obviously torn. “You’re right, I don’t really want to room with him, but I feel like I should tell him to go somewhere else, rather than inconveniencing you.”
“Yeah,” she sighed. “But is it really worth it to create a scene? I mean, do you really want to confront Paul and throw him out of the room?”
For a second it looked like Clark was sorely tempted to do just that. “Clark?”
“You’re right. I know. Okay, I’ll go over there and change, and when I come back, I’ll bring my stuff. I doubt Paul will even know I’m gone.” 
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I really liked this part Annie, I could actually see all the memorials as Clark described them. Very sweet, can't wait for part 5!  ~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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I loved it the forst time and the second time was even better. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
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Annie, Oh, Clark is so cute here! I can sense how much he wants to rip Paul apart (heck, I want to rip Paul apart)! I love how attentive Clark is to whenever Lois seems cold - so, well, Clark
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“And if I turn right again?” she asked quietly.
He nuzzled his cheek against her hair and his breath felt warm against her
skin. “If you turn right again … you’re back where you came from.”
“But we don’t want to go back...do we?” she asked quietly.
Clark grip around her waist tightened, and she felt him take a deep breath. “No. We don’t want to go back.” I love this part! The double meaning is soooo sweet (assuming that you really did intend that extra layer of...unspokeness [I probably just made up a new word there lol]) Keep it coming! 
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I'm really enjoying this, even if I don't post feedback for every part. Please hurry with the next one!
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Yes, you're right--it flows beautifully this way. I don't suppose anyone has an inkling of what's right in front of them, now? (I mean besides Lincoln.) They've got to get a clue before part 8!!! More and soon, Sherry
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Annie I love this part. Im really looking forward to the next part. Tricia 
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Yeh, now that I think about it - vaguely remember visiting DC back in, oh, about grade 9 (?) with my parents and sister. But we didn't see half the stuff LnC just did, although we did see the Washington Cathedral, because I remember begging and pleading for them to take me - but it was closed for some reason so all we did was drive past. Now you make me wanna go again, and see all the stuff we missed...
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 I totally agree with what everyone else said. This is probably my favorite part too. The tour at dusk makes the whole thing more intimate and they can't seem to keep their hands off one another! Truly love the double meaning in this part: “But we don’t want to go back...do we?” she asked quietly.
Clark grip around her waist tightened, and she felt him take a deep breath. “No. We don’t want to go back.” Post soon! ~sunkist
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Thanks so much for all the wonderful feedback. This is definitely one of my favorite parts of this story. I had so much fun writing it. I'm glad you all felt like you could envision the tour, whether you've been there or not. DC is one of my all-time favorite cities, and the year I spent there was one of the best of my life. A blast from the past... I was remembering my own moonlight tour of the monuments. Not, unfortunately, with such a hot tour guide LOL! Yeah, Clark doensn't come with the standard tour. Hey, I don't have a problem with kick him out of the room or the hotel. LOL!! I love this part! The double meaning is soooo sweet (assuming that you really did intend that extra layer of...unspokeness Yes, definitely intentional. I'm glad everyone loved this part. It's definitely a line that just popped out at me. I was envisioning what they would see if they were standing there rotating in a circle. (Something I've done many times) and I realized that when you keep going, you end up right at the beginning. And I knew I had to use that. Thanks again, Annie
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