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I decided to post a day early. I felt kinda bad making you wait an extra day when I a) had the time to post it now and b) ended the last chapter the way that I did. Although I am *not* sorry for ending the last chapter on such a cliff hanger.  As always, feedback is welcome and makes me love you!
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Funny! This update popped up the second I decided to log back on...  Great chapter! I'm so glad Xena was able to pop in and save the day... except for a few horrifying parts (Clark! Shot! Why?!?!) was really great (and even that was well done)! Even the graphic fight scenes I found really good- and I usually don't go for that kind of stuff. I knew somebody was screwing with Clark's food... I hope that things will be resolved  soon please?  But then the more I ask for, the sooner this story comes to an end, so I don't know what to ask for... Anyways, brilliant as always! Looking forward to more!
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</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by Mouserocks: <strong> Funny! This update popped up the second I decided to log back on... Great chapter! I'm so glad Xena was able to pop in and save the day... except for a few horrifying parts (Clark! Shot! Why?!?!) was really great (and even that was well done)! Even the graphic fight scenes I found really good- and I usually don't go for that kind of stuff. I knew somebody was screwing with Clark's food... I hope that things will be resolved soon please? on being torn between having the story end and prolonging the drama!
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That was like the fastest feedback I've ever received! Thank you! Faster than a speeding bullet!
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Originally posted by Mouserocks: That was like the fastest feedback I've ever received! Thank you! Able to read long story posts in a single glance!
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Nice action here, though I was sorry to see Clark so weak. I thought he was being poisoned.  Despite all that, I should think he would do much better now that he and Lois are back together. I did wonder a bit if he was weakening because he wasn't meant to be without his powers or to live in this universe, but I don't know if that's true or if it all comes from the poison, bad food, beatings, and strenuous weeks. I don't know how they're going to get back to their world, but I assume the thief will show up soon. I hope we've seen the last of Tempus!
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Originally posted by AntiKryptonite: Nice action here, though I was sorry to see Clark so weak. I thought he was being poisoned.
Despite all that, I should think he would do much better now that he and Lois are back together. I did wonder a bit if he was weakening because he wasn't meant to be without his powers or to live in this universe, but I don't know if that's true or if it all comes from the poison, bad food, beatings, and strenuous weeks.
I don't know how they're going to get back to their world, but I assume the thief will show up soon. I hope we've seen the last of Tempus!  Hiya Anti-K! You are actually right with the second half of your thoughts. Clark is weak mostly because of the poison, but also because of not enough food, and the beatings he received. But mostly the poison. Have we seen the last of Tempus?  Maybe. How will they get home? Um, you'll see. Although I had SO much fun writing this, I'm tempted to try and figure out another foray with the characters. Now if only I could grow an idea out of the desire to write another crossover. Thanks for stopping by and reading!
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Xena to the rescue! Wonderful. Your depiction of the treatment of the arrow wound, to the best of my knowledge (I have studied ancient medicine to a certain extent) is 100% accurate. One alternate method would have been to cut off the back of the shaft (no fletching and no splinters) and push it completely through. Excellently done, congrats.
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Originally posted by KenJ:
Xena to the rescue! Wonderful. Your depiction of the treatment of the arrow wound, to the best of my knowledge (I have studied ancient medicine to a certain extent) is 100% accurate. One alternate method would have been to cut off the back of the shaft (no fletching and no splinters) and push it completely through. Excellently done, congrats. Thanks Ken! I can't claim too much credit - I just followed the depictions that they gave us on the show for arrow wounds.
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The blow he was expecting never came. Duh? "I want them both dead!" Caesar roared at his warriors, his voice shaking with rage. "Ten thousand dinars to the centurion who brings me their heads!" Michael
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Yeah, well, they didn't exactly have treadmills and weights back then and centurion bashing is the next best thing to aerobic training. Too bad gyms don't offer this option now. It might make my workouts more enjoyable. /sigh/ Clark won't ever learn it. Say, that's perfectly symmetrical to the k-bullet wound from Madame Ex, isn't it? Huh. I guess it is. I swear, sometimes my muse makes me write things and I don't even realize the parallels. Oh, are you going all medieval on Clark? Um. Yes.  whispers/ You've got a wrong link in the TOC for part 9 FDK Weird. Thanks for the heads up. Thanks for reading!
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It might make my workouts more enjoyable.  But imagine the poor cleaning-staff having to mop up all the blood and teeth. Michael
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Originally posted by Darth Michael: It might make my workouts more enjoyable.
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