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Starting the thread. Hope y'all like this one.

oh this is fantastic!! I love the grieving Lois, it will make the Clark/Lois romance even better! Can't wait for more!

so....excited you're writing something new, and this is definitely new and interesting, but claude?!!! all i can say is - oy.
can't wait for more!

Your writing, even when it's not about musicians, has a music to it.

I think I am going to love this story, as long as Claude stays gone.

Delightful start. Nice spin on Claude.

Based on Claude and some of your prior tales can we assume Lex Luthor will also be a nice guy?

Interesting beginning. There are few (if any) stories that show Claude in a positive light, so this'll be interesting to watch.

I loved the scripted by-play between Lois and Perry after he'd told Clark he didn't have anything for him. It's funny to think that they'd dangle a story in front of potential reporters to see which ones had the initiative and talent to out-write the Planet's star reporter.

I feel bad for Lois, but it was also nice to see how one less "federal disaster" had changed her outlook and social behaviors. Oh, she's still Mad-Dog Lane, but she's soft enough to have made friends with Cat and is not threatened by Perry's protective show.

It jolted me and made me feel quite confused when you switched to Clark's perspective and changed to a first-person narrative. It'll be interesting to see if I can navigate that without feeling

BJ

Great new premise!

Looking forward to seeing more and especially how the Lois/Clark romance will evolve

Very interesting start, Terry!

I sort of expected Claude to be Lois dead husband, but I was genuinely surprised at the way you pulled this off. Can you say wow? Btw, I halfway expected Claude betraying Lois by going to Africa and getting killed over there without Lois ever knowing the truth. Guess, that's not been it, then.

And Lois is best pals with Cat! And what' up with Clark? And what's the posting schedule going to be?

Michael

Promising start. Like the twists on canon history. Looking forward to a quick posting schedule.

Tank (who thinks that Terry could find some way to stick a musician or two into this)

Ooh, cool feedback! Thanks, y'all!

Bellarata, glad you're looking forward to a Clark/Lois romance. We'll see what happens to our favorite couple.

Sarahg, sorry about Claude. But he was the only one I could come up with from canon who might have been Lois' husband - if he weren't such a louse. So, here he's not such a louse.

Framework4, I don't advise making any assumptions about Lex Luthor until he actually appears. Remember, this is a rewrite of the pilot, and I can't stray too far from canon or I'll lose the narrative thread altogether. Suffice to say that the Lois/Lex relationship develops in a slightly different path this time around.

BJ, thanks for the kind words. I don't recall Claude being a not-so-bad guy in any fic either, at least not at this time in Lois' life. And I'm sorry about jarring you. I have a harder time getting into Clark's head than I do Lois' head, and the first person POV helped me a lot. Besides, this way you'll know quickly whose mind we're in at any time.

DW, thanks for the nice words. I hope this tale is satisfying to you. I think the direction the main relationship goes will be surprising but not horrifying.

Michael, thanks for the "wow." Originally, I'd planned for Claude to be a bad guy after all and betray Lois in Africa, but I couldn't make it work. Anything I did just felt contrived or forced, but when I let Claude be sincere and (sort of) honest the backstory came together.

Posting schedule? Every few days is all I can promise, except that this story will not be abandoned in mid-stream.

Thanks, Tank. Wish I could shoehorn in some musicians, but they weren't in the pilot and anything more than what I've already added would break the narrative flow. Maybe next time?

Next part up very soon! Thanks to all who've read, and extra thanks to those who've posted responses!

Terry, I'm sorry I'm late to your story.

Well, I'm always a little nervous about angst. I guess it will depend on what the source of the angst is and how Clark handles it.

Well, if your angst warning has me nervous , this really spooks me.

Nice to see HG Wells' comment as the title of your fic, though.

hmm, Lois as a grieving widow. And it's Claude!

So Alice left him sooner in this universe than we saw. Maybe they'll get back together by the end.

Which has got me thinking - is Claude really dead or just missing, although people believe he's dead? Did they get his body back? (ghoulish question I know - been watching to many news programmes)

Now Claude's behaviour in Lois's memory stuck me as a tad theatrical - maybe he can't really be trusted after all? Maybe this Claude knows Lois will be more beneficial to his career long term? (you can telll I don't trust him )

I like how Lois and Cat are friends

a quibble: I was a bit thrown by the use of first person for Clark's story.

Clark's pretty confident about his sense of humour isn't he? Now i wonder where you're going with that?

So Clark was more involved with Rachel than he was in the series.

Interesting beginning, Terry. As always, I do admire your wrting ability - the easy flow of narrative and dialogue, both canon and original

carol

Okay, now I've read the other comments and yours too Terry. Should have done that first.

Now about Claude being a good guy - are you absolutely, beyond a shadow of a doubt, drop dead certain? I mean, Terry, look at how you've written him - his behaviour - nope I think this character is telling you he's up to something. Like the shape in the stone, his true (ie evil!) character is waiting to get out

Using first person is a useful technique for solving that problem - but why not change it to 3rd person once you've got the scene written? I think the reader wouldn't have too much trouble with shifting POV - you're a good enough writer to pull that off.

c.