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Wow, it sure is faster to read than to write! Here's the next part. We are getting there!

Artemis

A great part. I particularly liked how you worked in the classic "More powerful than a locomotive...able to leap tall buildings at a single bound!"

Clark discovering the spin was genius. And hilarious

Liked the added depth of the War Room. I know from the times I've done it, talking the show's dialog and giving a glimpse of what's going on in their minds is always an interesting experience

Nice how you re-purposed the billboard incident. I do wonder, though, if Clark waited until the last moment so he wouldn't intrude more than necessary or if he tried to allow a crowd to gather in the hopes of attracting a Daily Planet reporter.

Ellen's reaction to Lois' gentleman caller was worthy. Always making sure he treats her daughter with all the respect a lady deserves. Of course, the lady doesn't want *that* much respect, as we have seen in the parking lot

Well, he could always hover, err lie through his teeth

Looking forward to 7

Michael

Thanks, Iolanthe. Yes, we must have the traditional descriptions.
Thanks Michael.
No, that wasn't my intention or Clark's either
Writing the text made it seem to take longer. Clark was just watching at first because he knew it was dangerous. If little Susie hadn't run back, he still would have had to do something with the billboard before it crashed to the ground and maybe flattened some bystanders. After all, the shadow was when the board was still pretty much vertical. When it lay on the ground it would have had a bigger footprint.
Thanks for the feedback.

Artemis

I was a little surprised at this: I didn't see that coming. With Nightfall approaching this was the last thing I expected. In many ways this felt more like canon Clark with all his insecurities intact.

I also wondered about Lois's reaction to Superman. From this: This feels like canon Lois that is about to fall for the guy in the suit. But this Lois is already involved with Clark. If I were Clark I think Lois's reaction to Superman would push my insecurities into high gear.

Just trying to figure out what's going on.

Bob

You have a good point, Bob. I just added a paragraph to explain Clark's thinking:
As for this:
Yep. It can't be all a bed of roses, can it?
I hope you all noticed that General Jason Trask is the head of NORAD. That's important in things to come.
Thanks for the feedback.

Artemis