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I have been chided to begin the feedback thread so that FOLCs will have a place to put their enthusiastic and insightful comments. So - here it is.

I hope this chapter doesn't disappoint too much.

I don't think I can do insightful, but I can do enthusiastic!


I loved this part:
“Yes,” he agreed. “We – mmm – we complete each other.”

“Like bacon and eggs.”

“Cheese and crackers.”

“Bread and butter.”

“Chocolate and peanut butter.”

“Laurel and Hardy.”

He laughed softly against her lips and muttered, “That’s it exactly.”


I'm glad they finally got something started. And my vote is that Clark is the biggest fool since Adam took the apple from Eve.

ditto for clark the fool.

so, um, is there a sequel planned, or will there be happily ever after? i need some good things soon...

Their dancing around each other and flirting was marvelously delivered and then when the gravitational pull of the black hole became too great, they plummeted. Only to miss the event horizon and instead be slingshot out again, hurtling towards deep space and loneliness.

*sigh*

Poor, stupid kids. And at the same time they're doing the right thing. *argh*

Fix this mess, Terry. Soon!

Michael

Wonderful part, great banter. You wrote it so was there and part of the conversation.

Now get back here and fix it! They are both lunkheads

Thanks for the feedback, y'all!

Fix it? What's wrong with it? Oh, you mean you want Clark and Lois to be together! I see. Well, I can't promise anything except the next chapter, which is coming up very soon.

Happy's assigment for Terry:

1. Print out this part in its entirety.

2. Fold it up and put it in your wallet.

3. The next time you even think the words "I can't write Waffy well," take it out and read it. Then say, out loud if feasible, "The hell I can't!"

4. Repeat step 3 as necessary until your self-image begins to line up with reality.

Woah, Terry! The tension was palpable. Smoking scene here. And the ending line was perfect. Off to read part 20.

That was a lovely part, Terry.

Clark may have made the dumb choice now, but he still has four parts to get it right.

Corrina.