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FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61472 03/07/09 06:48 PM
Joined: Dec 2008 Posts: 2,131 Likes: 1 SW Vic, Australia Female Hawk OP Kerth
OP Female Hawk Kerth Joined: Dec 2008 Posts: 2,131 Likes: 1 SW Vic, Australia	Feedback here! Thanks.

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61473 03/07/09 08:38 PM
Joined: Dec 2005 Posts: 2,018 Portland, Oregon, USA F Framework4 Kerth
Framework4 Kerth F Joined: Dec 2005 Posts: 2,018 Portland, Oregon, USA	Nice parts. I love that your Clark is building proof from the start. Framework4

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61474 03/08/09 06:02 AM
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carolm Pulitzer C Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 3,764 Southwest MO	Very nice! More soon please! Carol My articles Debt Free Blog: Normal is BROKE! Be Weird! - Under Construction

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61475 03/08/09 10:46 AM
Joined: Dec 2008 Posts: 76 Marske-by-the-Sea, North East ... G GamesAway Freelance Reporter
GamesAway Freelance Reporter G Joined: Dec 2008 Posts: 76 Marske-by-the-Sea, North East ...	Love it - can't wait for more...

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61476 03/08/09 10:50 AM
Joined: Apr 2008 Posts: 397 bellarase Beat Reporter
bellarase Beat Reporter Joined: Apr 2008 Posts: 397	LOVED it! I love the way clark is evolving into superman and I'm so glad that Lois is somewhat admitting her feelings! GREAT JOB!! LOIS:I don't like you. MAYSON: Really? Oh god, that is such a relief - I don't like you either. LOIS: That makes me feel so much better

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61477 03/09/09 05:10 AM
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amberlea Columnist A Joined: Jul 2008 Posts: 581 Sugar Land, TX	This is a very interesting alternate beginning. What is she going to do when she figures out Nunk was right after all even though he didn't know it? The scene with her tearing up the picture was really well-written. I'm not sure which is worse - being convinced he can't hack it in Metropolis or just being mean to him. At least Clark stood up for himself. I can't wait to see what happens when Clark is able to expose Luthor! (Which is what's going to happen, right?!) Amber

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61478 03/09/09 06:46 PM
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IolantheAlias Pulitzer Joined: Feb 2008 Posts: 2,823	Quote Soon after that, she would be alone, a torn and tearful ice-cream-eating globule of humiliation. I love this line. And the whole paragraph, about how Lois continually makes disastrous choices in love. So much of our success is dependent upon how we see ourselves. And until Lois perceives herself as worthy of the love of a good man, she will continue to be an ice-cream-eating globule of humiliation. That's Clark's secret - to love her, to teach her how to love herself. Excellent psychological insight.

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61479 03/10/09 10:33 AM
Joined: Jan 2004 Posts: 1,864 In a minivan smack dab in the ... E Elisabeth Merriwether
Elisabeth Merriwether E Joined: Jan 2004 Posts: 1,864 In a minivan smack dab in the ...	How nefarious to use a children's hospital for the transportation of who-knows-what. Elisabeth

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61480 03/11/09 03:32 PM
Joined: Dec 2008 Posts: 2,131 Likes: 1 SW Vic, Australia Female Hawk OP Kerth
OP Female Hawk Kerth Joined: Dec 2008 Posts: 2,131 Likes: 1 SW Vic, Australia	Thanks to all for your FDK. Framework4 - glad you're enjoying it. Carol - thanks. Part 4 will be up today or tomorrow. GamesAway - Thanks for FDK (and for the comment you put on Weekend in Smallville). Nice nic - is there a sports context? Bellarata - your FDK is always so encouraging. I'm glad you like the differences from canon. amberlea - Quote What is she going to do when she figures out Nunk was right after all even though he didn't know it? Someone's going to pay. Quote I'm not sure which is worse - being convinced he can't hack it in Metropolis or just being mean to him. She likes his softness and compassion - she just isn't sure it will survive in Metropolis. Thanks for your comments - it's great when readers think about where a story might be heading. Iolanthe - glad you liked the line. You can take some credit for it, because you're the one who pointed out the original line just didn't cut it! Elisabeth - nefarious - nice word. Describes Luthor perfectly.

Re: FDK: First Days in Metropolis (2/6) #61481 03/13/09 10:03 AM
Joined: Apr 2007 Posts: 8,965 Likes: 28 Darth Michael Boards Chief Administrator Nobel Peace Prize Winner
Darth Michael Boards Chief Administrator Nobel Peace Prize Winner Joined: Apr 2007 Posts: 8,965 Likes: 28	Wow, an entire network beneath the city. So, what's Lex up to, besides the usual. The costume bit was hilarious Michael Join us on the #loisclark Discord server! We talk about fanfic, our favorite show, life, and more! (It’s almost like the IRC days of old again!) I go by Michael on the Archives.

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