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Feedback would be appreciated.

Sara, I'm enjoying catching up on all the reading I let get away from me in the last 6 weeks, yours included. This is a really good story. I can't wait to see what comes next.

I'm wondering like the comments in part 4 if there is any significance to her having a cold.

You keep mentioning that the chocolates arrive fresh every few days, and I wonder where from? is this significant? Who's making them? Are they truly swiss? Are they what's making her sick?

Keep up the good work!


Desiree

Oh, okay. So Lex had a sister.

But does that mean that Larry's fatherless? I'm assuming so since he has the Luthor name, and since Lex took care of them. Admittedly, you might've said something about this before. I have a bad memory about that kind of thing.

Sweet update, Sara. I still have absolutely no idea whether Kiley is acting the way she does because of some mushy feelings or some intrigue...

Michael

Wow, Sara, you certainly keep the suspense going. I still can't decide if I should trust Larry or not.

I want to, but he's a Luthor. And I worry a little that his saying that he respects women is a bit of "protesting too much". I can completely see Lex saying this to Lois, too, and he wouldn't mean it at all.

I'm keeping my fingers crossed, though, that Larry is the real deal.

I liked the way you pointed out the contrasts in Larry. Clark has many contrasts, as well. He is strong, but gentle. Stern, but shy.


Elisabeth

Thank you all for the feedback. I'm sorry I haven't responded yet, but I wasn't sure if I would be able to post today. I didn't want to tell you I would be posting on Wed. ( the way I usually do) and then not post. But I also didn't want to disappoint you by telling you I wouldn't be able to post today, incase I was able to do so. Well, I will be posting in a few minutes, so that's all set.

Desiree - Hi there! I'm glad you have some time to read now. Hope the teaching job is going well. I'm glad you like this story, as well.
Chocolates making her sick...hmmm? You'll find out more about whose making them in future chapters. I guess you'll have to wait and see, huh?

Beth - Larry's father is never mentioned in this story. Althoug he technically had one, of course, I see him as one of those guys who take off and never come back when they find out their girlfriend is pregnuat. So Lex, the oh-so-nice-guy-that-he-is decided to be a father figure for Larry. (This way he could have a son to mold into his image without feeling guilty about it, because Larry's not HIS illegitimate son. Sound like Lex Luthor?)

Michael - keep reading!

Nancy - keep reading!

Elisabeth - Hi there. I'm glad you noticed how I wrote the contrasts in Larry. That's important.

Chapter six coming up.