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Haha. Can't believe you haven't gotten FDK on this yet.

Pretty well written. Charactization was spot on. I'm just wondering who the familiar crewmember was.

And, a time-traveling asteroid? Only in in the ST universe...

James.

[Just adding in the part no. to the post header - LabRat]

I haven't read your story yet and have to go back to studying but I at least wanted to tell you that I think it's a great idea - I really liked Voyager (Torres, Paris, the Doctor and Seven especially).

I will read this soon and then come back with feedback

Also congratulations for being the first to post something for the fic-a-thon!

Eva, who's afraid that she won't make the deadline

Is Tempus going to turn out to be Q or something? Neat idea anyway.

Welcome back, Nancy! Great to see you here again.

And you paired LnC with Star Trek: Voyager! Great idea. I liked the crew of that series a lot, better even than the first one with Kirk and Spock (because the other characters, apart from Kirk and Spock, weren't so interesting). But so many characters in ST: Voyager were really good. I like Seven. (Did you notice that her first name, before she was absorbed by the Borg, was Annika? That sounds very Swedish to me. )



And Captain Janeway was great too, and Chakotay was handsome, like you said, and Tuvok was so likable and long-suffering and dependable, and that hologram doctor was a great idea!

Aha!!! I like that observation. No, there aren't any asteroids out in deep space, far away from planetary systems!

Wowzers!!!! Hey, I'm thinking of of "2001: A Space Odyssey", somehow. That almost-living monolith in it reminds me of the asteroid with a purpose!



(And because I fear that that image is too good to be hotlinked, here is another one. The caption read: Holy crap, it's the monolith!)



Shocking, indeed, because there aren't any of those! I like the explanation that this asteroid literally appeared out of nowhere! (Or out of the ST: Voyager universe!)

And do you know what this reminds me of? That crazy cult that thought that comet Hale-Bopp (which was designed the Great Comet of 1997(!), see Wikipedia ) hid a spacecraft in its tail! The cultists thought that a super-advanced alien race used the comet to get a lift through space and visit the Earth! And in order to get to those aliens and be picked up by their spacecraft, all the members of the cult committed suicide!!! (One of them was a relative of Nichelle Nichols from the original Kirk and Spock Star Trek show. )



Is there a spacecraft in the tail? I think not.

Good! Captain Janeway knows about science.

Wowzers!!! Maybe the laws of physics are different in the LnC universe.

She's pregnant! And she doesn't know that he knows!

No, she doesn't know that he knows!

I don't understand. Who was that man, if he was not the Doctor? And if he was the Doctor, how could he not be a hologram?

I love that!!! Star Trek doesn't exist in the LnC universe, so Clark thinks that the word "Vulcan" can only refer to the Roman god of fire!!!



(Speaking about that, if you asked a typcial teenager or twenty-something of today if they know two meanings of the word Vulcan, do you think they could come up with anything else than pointy-eared aliens known from TV and movies?)



(Actually... in the 19th century, astronomers speculated that there might be innermost planet between Mercury and the Sun, a hypothetical planet which they named Vulcan. I was going to post a link to the Wikipedia article about it, but there is a parenthesis in the address, so this site won't link it. Check it out yourself!)

Wow. That's impressive.

Who the heck would that crew member be????

Come back soon with more, Nancy!

Ann

Oooh! Voyager cross-over! *dances*

*giggles* YES! It should have been him and her -- not him and Seven!! Janeway/Chakotay is the OTP!! (sorry, it's hard to get the Trekkie out of me sometimes)

ROFL! (how we <3 thee, Ralph Spagoda. <snort>)

Heeee! That is SO cool! And, omg, yes, Tom does love to be the hero.

Pfffft! Of course, Superman is *real*. Duh. I have pictures of him in my office! Really, I do!

*giggles* I love that! Most excellent!

Oi... poor thing - probably thinks the machine works like the one the NK villains had...

mmm... eerily? *ponder* Chakotay might have been familiar, because of Fly Hard, but... who else?

Couldn't find him, so I went looking on IMDB. LOL! Do you know we could make a list of at least 20 people from L&C with a connection to Star Trek? Jonathan Frakes, Denise Crosby, J.G. Hertzler, David Warner, etc. -- heck, even Sharon Thomas, in Star Trek III: The Search for Spock . *giggles* Anyhoo... so I found the guy, after over half an hour of looking. HAHA! Very clever of you to spot him, btw. (and here... just to prove I really know who is it, without spoiling it for anyone else, he's in ONE ep of Voyager and one of his lines is "Harry, just relax!" ROFL.)

Nice start Nancy - I can't wait to read the rest!

Hey, still don't have a lot of time but wanted to leave feedback before I forgot.

It's a great idea to use the nightfall asteroid as an explanation for the Voyager's visit.

Also, I love Tom Paris and his 20th century obsession - and it looks like he might have a few more things to contribute in this story so that's great

Made me curious: is this just an obscure reference (*waves in Lara's direction ) or will this play a bigger role in your story development?

Same thought as Marcus: is this really Seven or is this one of Q's mind games?

All in all: really nice, I am intrigued and hope you will be back with more soon.

Best,

Eva

I so feel the same way, Seven and Chakotay never felt right or even natural to me.
If she really had to find a mate, I would actually have found the Doctor not to be such a bad match for her after all - or even Harry Kim.
But Chakotay: come on, he needs a woman his own age, preferably one with investigative skills she developed as Mrs. Columbo
Having said that, I loved Seven as a character; she was a great addition to the crew.

You have to drop out for a lot longer than that before you lose your readership. Heck, our ancient friend Tank has been retired now for going on sixty years and we still read his work everytime he gets a bit dotty and forgets he's retired.

That would certainly get MY attention.

What a wimp!

What an excellent explanation.

Curious ending.

Elisabeth

I took it to mean that he was correcting his thought. At first he thought it was a man and then he realized it to be a hologram.

I'd better scoot, since I made a promise I would actually go to bed at a decent hour tonight.


Elisabeth

Well I haven't figured out who it is. BTW did you know Mindy Church was Tom & Kes's daughter?

Expand it;

"The man, no [not a man a] hologram, leaning over ...

Clark is correcting himself

Thanks for all the lovely feedback guys. Just had a horrible night at work and I'll make more comments later...

You don't have even a clue... Really you don't... Giggles.


Yes, as others have mentioned, Clark was correcting his thoughts. With his special abilities I figured he'd be able to recognize a hologram when others couldn't.


And thanks, Lara, for pointing out my glaring errors. I'll fix them ASAP.

You're kidding? You mean, I'm wrong? It's not... someone who could be.... a.... you know.... an alien.... from.... Krypton.... agh!

It's not??

I haven't watched any ST for a long time, but I do remember enough of these characters to follow along. What an interesting plot line - I'm very intrigued to find out why the asteroid moved and what happens to our poor suffocating Clark. Oh, and I love stories with pregnant Lois. I hope we get to see more of her in part two.

Wouldn't it be funny if it's Mr. Mxyzptlk?
BJ

I don't know much about Voyager, but I'm familiar with Star trek in general, and I think the hook you used to cross these universes is brilliant. Although I'm interested in learning more about the fact that the asteriod apparently has an internal guidance system.

I. Love. This. So much time has passed that most people think he's a myth. (Kind of like Jesus Christ, now that I think about it.) I'm guessing that the "present" of Janeway and her crew is from long after Tempus's time, since he clearly did realize from the start that Superman was a real person.

What a nasty return of that particular nightmare! Clark, of course, has no way of knowing that this is for his own good.

Might that be a member of the Lane-Kent family?

A la Dorothy! All he needs are some red ruby slippers.

I'm looking forward to part two, Nancy!

Thank you, everyone who posted feedback!! You know I love feedback!


What an interesting idea, Marcus, but no Q = Tempus here.


I seriously doubt it, Ann. No Roman god and no possible planet. And no vulcanized rubber either. I think most would only know the beings from Star Trek.



Oh, yes. I absolutely agree. I was so totally bummed when Chakotay ended up with Seven.


It won’t play a huge role in the story, but it will be, shall we say... ah... very interesting.


I’m just re-reading the feedback, and here I thought no one had noticed my big blooper. That’s what I get for posting in the middle of the night (and without a beta). No Q here. That was a mistake (a BIG mistake) - should have been Collective. Oopsies... I fixed it a day or two after posting (and thought no one had caught it...) I remember driving home from work and thinking about what I'd done and I just kept saying, "Idiot! You idiot!" Especially since I so know better.


ROFLOL! I wonder what Tank would think of that comment, Elisabeth. I thought it was hilarious.


No! I didn’t know that, Patrick. She sure looked different.


Yes, it would be, BJ. But it’s not our favorite game show host...


Aww... Thanks, Elisabeth.


Well, I checked on the timelines. According to what I found on the internet, ST: Voyager was set in the 24th century from the years 2371 to 2377. In Tempus Fugitive, HG Wells says that Utopia exists in the 22nd century. It seems like there was another ep that said Utopia still existed many years later, but I couldn’t find the reference. The only reference I could find was that Tempus had stolen technology from the 25th century.


Thanks again guys for all the feedback. I embellished part 2 so much that the story has turned into a 3 parter. LaraMoon has graciously beta’ed the 2nd part to help keep me from feeling foolish - thanks, Lara. But right now I just really need to go to bed so I’ll get it posted on Saturday!

Took me a while to get things and find picts...

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James, who hopes you like it.

Awww.... Gee thanks, James. You have made my day!