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Wow, Jenn. *sniffle*
I don't even know what to say except you definitely need to write in first person more often. This was just incredible. The subject matter of this story is extremely loaded and you're so good at capturing and conveying emotions.
I also think that writing it in first person made it that much more powerful.
You did a wonderful job, and you should be extremely proud of this piece. *mwah*
Thanks to Cat for my rockin' avatar!
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(About Lois & Clark)
Perry: Son, you just hit the bulls eye. It's like we're supporting characters in some TV show and it's only about them.
Jimmy: Yeah! It's like all we do is advance their plots.
Perry: To tell you the truth, I'm sick of it.
Jimmy: Man, me too!
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This story was good. I liked reading it.
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Very emotionally filled. The words to describe how I felt reading this are.... hard to come by.. in a good way... feeling what lois does through words.. it is a very strong story Jenn.
Thank you for sharing a story of something many women go through, but not many mention.
*hugs*
"He's my best friend, best of all best friends
Do you have a best friend too
It tickles in my tummy
He's so Yummy Yummy
Hey you should get a best friend too" - Toy Box
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this is  so good must have an addtional part please
I will and always be a big fan of Lois and Clark forever and forever.
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I've never had real problems conceiving like Lois and Clark, but I remember taking those tests. I remember having a very early miscarriage and another threatened [which turned out to be our 2yo, but we're still convinced we lost a twin]. You made me feel all those things again - in a good way and I almost had to explain to DH why I was crying while watching American Idol.
Thank you for sharing with us. Somehow I think, even if they're not successful, they'll be okay.
Carol
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Jenn,
This is me. Currently. Present tense.
Thank you for writing so beautifully and realistically about it.
lisa in the sky with diamonds
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That was SO SAD. I loved it!  You could totally earn an angst crown. AND first-person Lois, which is my all-time favorite POV. You need a POV crown, too. JD
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Very nice. It was stark, but that was what it was supposed to be.
Good work!
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Good job Jenn,you really captured the feelings quite well. I hope there is a part 2 where Lois gets pregnant. Hey no one has ever done an adoption fic for them either. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
Caroline's "Stardust"
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Beautiful, Jenn. And so sad.
Ann
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Hi Jenn,
I was happy to wake up and see you'd posted this story.
On the second read, it is still very moving ... probably more so. I love the extra little touches.
I think this story is more immediate and compelling because you chose first-person, and you understand Lois so well.
A beautifully poignant story and great writing.
Yours Jenni
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This was great. I love the image of rain you kept using throughout. I've done that myself and it works very well as a metaphor and for setting the mood. Thanks for posting  .
Fanfic | MVs Clark: "Lois? She's bossy. She's stuck up, she's rude... I can't stand her."Lana: "The best ones always start that way.""And you already know. Yeah, you already know how this will end." - DeVotchKa
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Aww! Jenn, I'm so proud of you for posting  This is so beautiful and moving - and you made it so real by using a first person voice to write it. A wonderful story. Just wonderful.
Superman: Why is it that good villains never die?
Batman: Clark, what the hell are good villains?
=> Superman/Batman: Public Enemies
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Jenn, it was a really moving story. As I've said before, I like your style. It's very sober but so convincing. The idea of the first person narration is good because it brings a lot of emotion. When you read "I" you just have to imagine it's you. Terrific story. I'm glad you posted it. I checked the weather for 2008 and I can see a rainbow. Clemmypie 
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Oh my god....this story is so touching...
I really really liked it. Look forward to your next story.
Keep writing!
I am Top Banana - that's the way I like it... (Pilot - Lois Lane)
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Awww, you guys! Way to make an author all choked up! When I started writing this story, I didn't plan to post it. It was going to be for me. I have never written a first-person story, and I don't usually write dark stories. But then, as I worked on my little project, it evolved, and after consulting two betas and a big sis, I decided to take a risk and post it.
Like I said in my author's note, I couldn't have done this without Lara and Jenni. They are amazing, insightful and very, very patient.
And I am so touched that you guys have responded so favorably to "Rain."
Maybe they'll just get that rainbow. You never know.
Clark: "You don't even know the meaning of the word 'humility,' do you?"
Lois: "Never had a need to find out its meaning."
"Curiosity... The Continuing Saga"
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Great story telling, here, Jenn!
A very toucihng story.
Deb
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WOW Jenn! I'm totally speechless! The idea of a first-person narrating the story was very good. Like Lady C said it's like, "I'm this person" and that brings someone more deeper into a story. Thanks for sharing this story with us! You really did great! I hope you'll write a sequel! I would love to see the rainbow! *hugs* 
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Wow, how beautiful, EditorJax. I liked the sad tension you created and the way Clark dealt with the problem. While reading that last part I wondered if maybe the pregnancy test wouldn't work with only half human babies. Just a thought 
It's never too dark to be cool. 
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