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Thanks, Caroline, for a nice start to what I plan to be a relaxing evening of self-indulgence.  before you can even say--"
"Lois…" Clark said, trying to interrupt her tirade.
"That's right, before you can say Lois!" she agreed emphatically,  As if in slow motion, the faceless man brought the knife to Lucy's neck. With one clean movement, he ran it across the skin, slitting her throat. Her shrill scream pierced Lois ears and echoed on and on. Eeek! Great segment, Caroline - tense, funny, lovely characterisation and some beautiful introspection. Business as usual, in other words.  More - just as soon as RL lets up! LabRat
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
Athos: No, no, by all means, let's keep things suicidal.
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Great part. Loved the almost kiss. More soon. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
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"Think about it this way; at lease we're together, Lois. I mean, you're not sharing a cell with a woman named Large Marge who hasn't bathed in a month." Clark walked up to Lois and took her hand in his comfortingly.
"Maybe I'd rather be with Large Marge."  I'm not sure if an angsty ending is any better than an evil cliffhanger. Jen
"Meg...who let you back in the house?" -Family Guy
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Him Great part!  "Found your sister yet?" the inmate queried. Lois stopped dead in her tracks. Nobody knew about Lucy's disappearance except for the police, Clark, Jimmy since he was probably questioned about it, and probably Perry -- since Perry knew everything. How did this man know?
"No? Oh, that's too bad. Wait… No, it's not. She deserves every bit of it, the nasty whore." the man taunted.  Why they didn't ask the police, Who was that man? Lois woke with a start, bathed in her own cold sweat. Lucy's scream still resonated in her head, and her heart pounded like the beat of a hummingbird's wings.
Sitting up in bed, she let the tears fall freely. You are 
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Part 7 is gonna be good! But I agree...this still ends with a cliffhanger. ~L.L Wanna Be
"Live with intention.
Walk to the edge.
Listen Hard.
Practice wellness.
Play with abandon.
Laugh.
Choose with no regret.
Continue to learn.
Appreciate your friends.
Do what you love.
Live as if this is all there is."
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Well, I guess this (and the last part) means that Lois is over her anger at Clark.
Of course, Clark, being the stupid one, still has his doubts over Lois' affections. He doesn't deserve her. Maybe there's someone else out there who wants Lois (perhaps someone who likes sisters?).
Anyway, a nice angsty ending. Not really a ciiffhanger since it was a dream.
Tank (who wonders how long Lucy can remain alive, if she even is, as a lot of time is passing)
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Ok.. now Superman is gonna come & Lois & Clark are gonna cuddle, and maybe some smoochies will be thrown in there, then they live happily ever after right?! Oh no wait... there's still the little Lucy problem... Darn it! Lol... keep up the great work, I'm loving this story!
*Blayne*
Clark: You are really high maintenance, you know it?
Lois: But I'm worth it.
Clark: Not exactly what you had in mind, huh?
Lois: Let's see. So far I've been given a glimpse of ritual crop worship, been treated as your girlfriend, and insulted your parents. No, I couldn't have planned this.
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Caroline Another great part! Lois and Clark's introspection is excellent. Extremely well-written!  How does that prisoner know about Lucy?  I'm enjoying this immensely and can't wait to find out what happens next. Tricia 
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That was another 
I tawt I taw a puddy cat!
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nice part Caroline.
can't wait for more
soon please
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Ooh, Caroline, I'm so glad I had some spare time this evening! What can I say about Large Marge...except  place to stop...arrgh! I'm eagerly awaiting the next part!  Take care, and KEEP WRITING! Sara.
Death: Easy, Bill. You'll give yourself a heart attack and ruin my vacation.
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Caroline, I’m just now getting caught up from not having been on the boards in a month, so I just read all the parts to your wonderful story posted so far. You’ve got some lovely cliffhangers in there, don’t you? Very . There’s angst, humor, waffy moments, introspection, suspense – all in very nice balance. Well, of course I would be happier to see more smoochies, but I’m assuming that they’ll come with time as the story progresses. I can be patient. I’m definitely intrigued, and looking forward to future installments. Now that I’m all caught up, I guess I’ll be screaming with everyone else at all the cliffhangers too... :p KathyM
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I'm enjoying your story very much, Caroline; you did a particularly nice job with the pacing and tempo. I'm getting pretty worried about Lucy, though. Will we be seeing part 7 soon? snarla2
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Caroline, will you be posting again soon?
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Was this story ever finished past part 6? I can't find the ending??
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I'm afraid it wasn't. And it's a shame, too; such a great story...
Caroline has been away for a long time. I'm not sure if she's still reachable, but you could try emailing her.
See ya,
AnnaBtG.
What we've got here is failure to communicate...
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Awww that's too bad. Thanks for the info.
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