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This was great, I cant wait for the end either. I also read it after the not was added, so I knew the ending was not real but still very good. Great job you two.
Kate

Hello all. I can now respond properly. I was home sick from work today (running 100 degree fever - just checked it) but I had to run into work for a few minutes to take care of a few things that absolutely had to be done today. But now I'm back home... and thinking I really need some chocolate icecream...

Moving on...

I feel like a naughty little girl for scaring you all like that. <for shame> I really probably deserve 40 lashes with a wet noodle. You can all take turns... unless you want to take pity on me since I'm sick...

<hollers at Sue - are you sure Clark can't come spend the day with me?>

Oh, and that reminds me... any of you who are absolutely furious with me... don't blame this on my co-writer Sue. This "tank ending" thing was my idea from the get go. It didn't help that a couple of people egged me on (one actually dared me) and people in their fdk comments kept sending pointy stick guys at me, saying I'd better not end it like the movie. :p Having said that, though, I never could have done it without Sue. Sue - with you, this story is so so much more than it could have been. <<<HUGS>>> Thank you. (Proper thank yous will be distributed to Sue and the readers in the *real* final ending)

<bad, DJ, bad>

Anyway, poor Carol. <pat, pat> Although you really should know me better than that by now. <g> Do you really think I would invest all the time and energy <not to mention blood, sweat, and tears - snort> into this story to end it that abruptly???

I hope you still want to go back and read the story... but I will admit I was puzzled by your "deathfic" reaction. I thought when you said you were reading the last part first, that you were reading the whole part and not just that last line that said "Lois was gone. Everything was gone." That line didn't mean Lois was dead. She had forgotten Clark... she had forgotten everything -- so in that sense, to Clark, "Lois was gone. Everything was gone."

The abrupt ending was meant to be a "fooled you" ending... but definitely not a deathfic ending. Sorry you didn't understand that. But I do hope you still want to read the story. <hugs> I LOVE that you are a DJ fan. Makes me feel all waffy. <g> Thanks Carol!


Poor JWB. I see the angry face. And the "huh?". Yes, it was supposed to be confusing... that and the ellipses (.....) were supposed to clue everyone in that it wasn't really the end. We'll be back soon with the actual ending. Don't get me wrong... this part is a REAL part and will be in the final version of the story... but there is more to come. <g>


Ohhhh, Betty.

Ohhh, sniffle.... Such sweet fdk even though you were feeling miserable. Please don't be afraid to read anything by me/us again. I invest way too much in my stories to make them *really* this awful. I promise.


Hi BJ! Yes, it would have been better if we could have posted this part on April 1st. I tried, but the posting schedule just wouldn't work. And yes... I was only joking about that really being the end... There is one more part.


Hi Jackie! <snort> Yes, I am coming back to finish it for real. Yes, we do love angst... but "unresolved angst"? :p Not so much, no. Sorry to leave you hanging, but yes, there is one more part. <g>


Hi Ann! Can I tell you that your comments and your chocolates actually made me laugh? Just because after how long you've read my stories, and the private e-mails we share, I was pretty sure that you knew me by now... So I totally took your comments with sarcasm, and figured that you knew there was more to come. For one thing, you know me, I always have to put an author's note at the end of my long stories. The thank yous to the readers adn little notes and what nots. With the absolute abruptness at the end of this part, I was sure everyone would know I was joking... um... apparently not though <eeeek! DJ smacks herself again> Thanks for the comments, and I'll see you back for the real ending... the one I'm sure you'll enjoy (even if it is on the PG side <g>)


Hello again Carol. Yes, I added a "NOT" to the end... just to enforce that I was joking...


Hi Cristina! I'm glad you weren't too afraid not to go read. I look forward to your comments... <g>


Hi Lara! OHHH! Poor, poor Lara! You were already having a bad day and thought this would give you a needed uplift and then.... BLAM! Yikes! Just LOOK at all those pointy stick men! I promise the happily ever after part is coming soon. Promise, promise... just get those guys away from me. <g>


Hi Jojo! LOL!!! I didn't torture her, that was Knox! <snort> But your comment cracked me up. I love that you loved the whole "revival" scene. Thanks for the completely evil comment - I think. <g> I'll have you know that it was partially your fault that I made this part the tank ending... you kept threatening me... telling me I'd better not end it like the movie. My evil muse thought to herself... oh really - I consider that a dare. <g> You know, I was really hoping people knew me well enough by now that they would know I wasn't that horrifically cruel. And also, do you KNOW how many pages this story is? 230. Yes, 230. I couldn't believe it either. It's *almost* twice as long as anything I've ever written. I poured my heart and soul into this story... and Sue did too... there is no way I would end it like that - I swear!!! But yes, it wasn't meant to be a deathfic either... not sure how that one came about either. Just meant to "tank" - Lois forgets everything... but of course that's not really what happened... <g>


Hi Cristina! Yay! You came back! Yikes! It was worse than a TE? Ahhhh, because it was believable... oooh, thanks, I'll take that as a compliment, if you don't mind. Oh and thanks for saying the story has been "sooooo good". We'll be back soon with the final part. Sue has it and is playing with it as we speak.


Hi Kristen! Oh, I'm glad you realized it wasn't really the end. <g> Yes! Exactly! We wouldn't "end it so abruptly". Yes, more closure, definitely... there are too many loose ends. <g> Yes, lots and lots of more Lois & Clark time (and a little more Dan time - don't hit me!) Thank you so much for the wonderful commendation on our writing Dan. Yay! Thank you Kristen!


Hi there again Jackie. <g> Real part will be posted in a couple of days, tops. We're not so evil to make you wait a whole week for it. <g>


Hi BJ. Oh good. I'm glad so many people weren't really angry with me. Yes, definitely more closure in the end... and waff... Thanks for the "fantastic" - I really appreciate that. <g>


Hi again, Carol. <hug> I'm glad you aren't mad at me. And I'm so excited to hear you say how much you enjoy my stories. But at the end... Lois woke up, got out of bed all confused, was telling Clark to get back... smacked his hand away... and that's when Clark said "Lois was gone... everything was gone..." meaning that she had forgotten him, forgotten everything, and HIS Lois was gone. That's what I meant. Sorry if it wasn't clear. Thanks.


Hi Carolm! Hee hee... a whole other sequel!? <DJ faints> Whew... heavens... I don't think I'd survive it. <g> Thankfully, no, we don't have to write a sequel... all will be explained and concluded in the next part. <g>


Hi Lara! Hee hee... I didn't think you were angry, no. I did feel bad though that you needed a happily ever after and instead got this... and a delayed ending. I promise it's coming soon though.


Hi Kate! Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it and the final ending is coming soon.


Thank you all for indulging me and my evilness. I had wanted to try a tank ending for a long time... and yet, I didn't want it to be a "real" tank ending... just a sort of "fooled you" ending - I thought this might be my best chance to explore that unexplored territory. <g> Now that I've done it... I've scratched that itch.

Thank you so much for all the comments (I told Sue you all were going to kill me/us - checks herself - nope, still alive)... and not just the comments today but the comments all along. You all have been so wonderful to leave us fdk on this story. I really loved and appreciated every one. Thank you!

-- DJ

Good job, but if you try that again, we might have to bribe to chainsaw men to go after you.

*looks around nervously*
I'm also going to pretend that I didn't send you a pm a few days ago suggesting a fake tank ending either. ^_~

I'm not believing it till I see it. You ladies keep jerking my chain. LOL (And I'n loving every minute of it)

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Anyway, I'm very much looking forward to part 24/23 - will you please call it that, DJ? Pretty please? How about calling it that if I give you some more chocolate?

Anyway, I'm sure I'll love the WAFF I foresee, even if it is in the PG folder. (You know, maybe you could hint... sort of hint... that, well, after you have posted the REAL The End (without ellipses), Lois and Clark perhaps sneak off to have some fun in the privacy of one of their respective bedrooms, after you have pulled the blinds to keep the peeping toms out? )

You know we all love you, don't you, DJ?

Ann

OMG!! You are deliciously and deviously evil! I must say, you had me in panic mode for a second there!

I've really enjoyed the story, a very interesting and original idea (at least not one that I've read.) I saw the movie, and at first thought it would be a parody, but nope! You spun it so nicely into something all its own!

...I think I lurv you and your evil ways!

Can't wait for 24/23!

Ack! Hated this part! Blech pooeey! Deathfic? Maybe not but it was heart wrenching. Fix it!
(well written though<g>) Laura

Well, first off, this has been a very engaging and fun story to follow. Watching Lois stumble through her trials has been very enjoyable.

Now, as for this instalment. I read it through getting into the torture and the angst as I normally would, then we hit the ending. My first (and really only) thought was 'Oh no, we've gone through all this to just be set up for another long fic. Not that another long fic by MR would be bad (actually it would be a good thing) but it seemed like we were heading into another 'Forget Me Not' style story. Trust me, if Dr. Deiter would have shown up I would have been seriously ticked-off.

But, instead, I find that we just have to wait for a final part. Which probably means that Lois is just playing a little joke on Clark. I can just see Lois laughing and yelling out "Gotcha!".

No?

Tank (who says that he guesses they'll just have to change the name to MetroEndings from now on)

Nooooo she wouldn't.

She couldn't.

OHMYGOD SHE DID!

NO WAIT SHE DIDN'T!!

*thunder down stairs*

Poll my neighbors. I believe that is what they heard. I feel bad. I think I startled the lady and her dog as I charged out to my car, laptop in hand, on my quest for more internet since neighbor Mike's wasn't picking up anymore.

Omygod. That was such utter evil and AMAZING wrapped into one. It was so evil and amazing, I literally drove 20 minutes into town for the internet to tell you how evil and amazing this was.

Anything you want in life, it's yours.
JD

Ya know, Tank, I thought about that. As I was reading it I thought of the episode where Lois knocks her head on the cabinet and fakes losing her memory just to mess with Clark. I was half waiting for her to tell him she was kidding.

~Kristen

Bad DJ!!!



Come back here and post the *real* ending, right now, young lady! Look at all the trauma you've caused... don't you feel ashamed of yourself? You should.

PJ

Oh my goodness DJ!!! *Heart beats wildly* I was getting more and more frantic as I read, lol watching the scroll bar get smaller and smaller as I read down the page and there seemed to be so much more to be resolved! All these insane scenerios... I actually considered that "hey, maybe Lois is joking... like she did on the show..." and then I realized that that was probably ridiculous, But the The End...Not saved me. :p That was a pretty funny joke, lol I have to admit. Everyone's comments were so panicked. Can't wait for the FINAL and REAL ending.

Laura

Well, I came to the feedback thread to tell you that I just didn’t have time to read right now. But then I saw this:
Well, then I had no choice but to read, did I?


Why didn’t he just surreptitiously melt the wires with his heat vision?


Well, gadfries, forget the Nirvana - Lois is going to have memory loss from the contrived electro-shock therapy alone.

Scardino got to be the hero? Nooooo....


DJ and Sue... Don’t you dare. Is Babbles still in that morbid mood, DJ?


Well, okay. Instant defibrillation.


Oh, NO!!


That was an ending? NO. NO. NO. It kind of sounded a bit like the same premise as a challenge put up some time ago.


Oh, DJ (and Sue). It was still a terrible place to end a story.


Well, gosh. Some people might actually think they’ve read the end, then. Some people never leave feedback and so probably won’t see this note.


Well, that’s good, but I was thinking it might be months before we saw the ‘ending’ or the ‘next story’.


Yes, you need the wild guys after you, girl.


Hmm... Yes, torture. Torture is bad. Daggonit, I killed her off in my epic and for four years she knew pretty much the exact date she was going to die... and she didn’t suffer like this.


Oh, wow, not me. I thought it was at least the end till ‘part 2’ was written - probably in a few months.


You know, I’m not sure I’d consider the ‘ending’ to part 23 a Tank Ending. It seems there used to be an explanation of that somewhere on the board, but I can’t find it now. But my understanding is that it’s outrageous - not something that could easily happen (and this could).


Yes, that was my feelings. I was surprised that anyone thought this thread was ‘angry’.


Yes, that’s what I thought, too. I didn't think it was a deathfic at all - just that everything was over in that Lois didn't remember Clark.


Well.... one never knows what one of the evil ones might do.


Hmmm.... After the reaction with Quiet Regret, perhaps a note at the bottom saying it wasn’t really the end might have been a good thing... or even a note saying something like: A late April Fools.

Well, DJ (and Sue), I’ve gotta say that I do enjoy your stories (you know I do), but I’m going to put my foot in my mouth and tell you that I didn’t enjoy this story as much as your other stories. (Don’t hit me - please. Besides I have the keys to your room and I might not let you out. )


Hmmph... Are you becoming evil, too, JoJo... <giggles>


Glad to know I wasn’t the only one, Ann.


Loved what Pam said. Now do it. Now behave yourself and quit being evil.

omg, no!!!

DJ, come back and post another ending! You can't do this to us!

Babsi

Hello everyone!

Hi Woody! Eeep! Chainsaw men? Yikes. <DJ holds up two fingers... I do solemnly swear not to...>

<g> Thanks Woody!

Hi Jojo! Hah! Don't you dare try to pretend that didn't happen. <snort> I had already had this in the works, (since it was a real part to the story, I already had it written) and that PM solidified it for me. <g> Well, I'm glad you're enjoying me yanking your chain. Thanks Jojo!


Oooh, hi again Ann! In your honor, I will name the next part, part 24/23. <g> Even without any chocolate (because let's face it, you keep feeding me that and I'm gonna look awful in a bathing suit this summer.) :p Ooooh, thanks for the smoochies, Ann. <g>


Hi Catherine! I'm glad you've enjoyed the story. I actually didn't realize I had you for a reader! So, yay! Thanks for the lurv. <g>


Hi Laurach! LOL. <pat, pat> Thanks for the "well written though". <g>


Hi Tank! I'm so glad you've enjoyed the ride. That means a lot. And LOL at your reaction - oh no, I've read all this way to get hit with sequel? But, oh, how sweet of you to say that another long fic by me would be a good thing. Awwwww. No, I wouldn't have tortured everyone with Deter. As much as I can tolerate Dan... I HATE Deter. <g> Oooooh, I think Lois yelling out at this point "gotcha" would be really, really cruel. <g> Thanks for the fdk!


Hi Jen! LOL! Your neighbors will wonder for years to come about that *thunder*. <snort> WOW! I'm speechless! You drove 20 minutes to find internet so you could post? <blush> Thanks Jen. And "anything I want"? <Babbles breaks out a writing pad and begins making demands> LOL. Thanks Jen!


Hah, Kristen! Yes, I suppose when she first woke up and didn't recognize him... she could have said "gotcha"... although now I think that would just be too cruel. <g>


Hi Pam! I know <DJ hangs her head - bad, DJ, bad> Eeeeep! I can't post it "right now" - my co-writer is still taking her stab at it. But I promise it will be soon... within 1 to 2 days... oh, I do, I feel so ashamed. <smacks herself> Thanks for the fdk Pam. <g>


Hi Laura S! LOL... I could just see you in my mind getting more and more nervous as you went. <g> I will have the final ending posted soon. Thanks for the fdk Laura!


Hi Nancy! Oooooh, look at all this fdk. Okay, I've skimmed your response and I'm going to take some time here to address what you've said...

Why couldn't Clark have melted the wires with his heat vision? Knox was in the way. Once Clark realized what was going on, Knox had started backing away from him toward Lois and he was in the way. <shrug> Plus, Knox was watching him closely... if he had yanked his glasses down and stared at that battery and then all the sudden the thing quit working, when it had been working perfectly before....

But good point. Maybe I should go back and clarify that Knox moved to stand between Clark and Lois.

LOL. Poor Scardino.

Actually, no, Babbles is no longer in her morbid mood. This scene had pretty much been written since the beginning... only sketchy, mind you, and a few details got changed here or there... but...

Hmmmm.... guess I missed that challenge. I don't remember a challenge like that. <shrug>

Well, as I said, we didn't actually "end" the story there. There is more. Yes, I still would have ended the "part" there... but you should know by now that Sue and I are well known for cliffhangers. <g>

I hope that is not the case. However, I added the "NOT" to the the ending (The End.....NOT) fairly soon after I posted it. I would think the "NOT" would clue most people in on what was going on.

Oh heavens no! I'm not THAT mean! Make everyone wait 2 months for the ending? Yikes! The chainsaw men really would come after me then. And as for another story... it won't be necessary and I think Babbles might kill me if I even thought about it. <g>

I don't know. That sounds like torture to me, Nancy. If I knew what date I was going to die on for four long excruciating years... And I knew I was going to lose my wonderful husband (to another woman) and there was nothing I could do to stop it from happening. <me cries> Well in my mind that's pretty awful. Maybe you didn't write the strong emotions of what Lois was feeling about it... but I can imagine them. <g>

Tank Ending Defined: A sudden and bizarre fake ending to a fic, usually filled with WHAMs and/or black humour. Named after the originator, Tank Wilson.

I considered my ending Tank because it fit 2 of the criteria -- It was sudden... the story ended without all the loose ends being tied up or people really understanding what happened, and that also made it bizarre. It was definitely filled with WHAMs... just not black humour.

Now, where my "tank ending" differs, is that it is an actual part of the story. All I basically did was pretend to end the story one chapter too early. The next part will pick up where this one left off... but don't fret... there is an easy explanation. You'll see.

I'm glad you weren't angry... and I was actually surprised you were upset. I could have sworn back at the beginning of this story, when I was asking you questions and telling you some things that I told you I was probably going to try my hand at a Tank Ending. That I had never written one before and I wanted to try one. And I further seemed to remember that you told me I should try it. I thought you said you had tried a Tank Ending once and that I should try it. Now, of course, I could be wrong... I could have dreamed the whole thing. But I was totally expecting this not to surprise you at all - because I thought you knew it was coming.

But I did put a note! Shortly after posting it (and seeing the panicky fdk) I went back and added "NOT" to the end -- The End...NOT! <shrug>

Yes. It appears I have corrupted Jojo. <g> And it really was partially her fault all along. <g> In her fdk, she kept threatening me with pointy stick men that I couldn't end it like the movie. That Lois had to get her memories back.... <g>

<DJ salutes> Yes ma'am! The final ending will be posted soon... and I assure you that the next story I'm working on is pure b-plot and will not involve any physical torture of Lois... mental torture, now that's a whole other matter. <g> Thanks for the fdk, Nancy.


Hi Babsi! I'm coming back. I promise! Soon! Very, very soon!


Thanks again, everyone. I'm a little sad to see this story come to an end. Do you realize I've been posting it for over 4 months? 4 months! Wow! It's my longest story in more than one way - length and time span. Thanks so much for sticking with me for the ride and giving me such wonderful fdk! You guys are the greatest!

-- DJ

Well I don't think I will take pity on you, only because it was a planned thing............ you can't blame the ending on your illness if you planned it before you got sick.... (unless of course you were talking about some sort of delay in replying to fdk that I was unaware cause I've been busy and only read the story and fdk today...)


(without being an annoying know it all) I sort of remembered in some earlier chapters DJ posted them as
# out of 23 (? or 24)...
so when I saw:
THE END>>>>OR NOT?
I kind of had a clue as to what was going on... and waited till I read the threads before I got angry...

This does not mean I wasn't shocked by the possibility of being left with this and was about to BEG for her to finish it "properly"


I am really impressed with the way you replied to everyone's individual posts DJ, it gives us all hope that what we write here is taken onboard by the writers, and in a way encourages even more feedback... so even if you are sick it will be to your own benefit, and we love you all the more for it as you are struggling through your fever....

As I haven't seen the Adam Sandler movie, I can't comment... BUT
I have loved every minute/Page/paragraph of this story, and even if I may not have posted much feedback, I am chomping at the bit, waiting for chapter. no 24.............

as an aside:
I am fascinated by the way TANK has become a Genre in herself...
(note gender is based on some sort of gut feeling, from reading some feedback over time, if it is wrong I apologise... but cannot be bothered to check it out)

Living in a family OBSESSED with etymology of words and linguistics in general, it is always fun to see names become verbs and diseases etc. (e.g. to Hoover= to vacuum clean, and others)
My favourite is a type of arthritis: Gameboy thumb...
which is related to repetitive strain injury, "popular" in British kids in the 90's


I have never seen the Adam Sandler movie, but I did see the other one out at the same time (cannot remember title now but had Kate Blanchet and Jim Carey)...

a real TANK ending would be if Clark then went and took a hybrid Nirvana-kryptonite and electrocuted himself, erasing all of his memories of Lois as well, so that they then would begin the whole saga again (right from the pilot), and perhaps we could see if things would happen differently without Lex...

DJ, you made me swear, outloud (there were no witnesses, thank goodness), but you made me swear! !!!!

Send for the , send for the Spain Inquisition, send for the Stay Puffed Marshmellow Man!
You must now

You are worse than Tank, even!
I loath you!!!
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NOT!

Congratulations on joining the ranks of the reviled, you deserve it. Shows that your writing is well done and well thought out.

You still made me swear and for that you will have to post at least one more part to fix this mess.

I may even be sending you another part to Let's do it Again, if you are quick about it!

James.

You cruel, cruel ladies!! I was really looking forward to the last part! Now hurry back and post!! <g>

I've been really bad about posting fdk.. but I've really been enjoying this! Thanks for a great story... now just finish it correctly!!

Jo

Hi Beethoven! No pity for me? <me cries> But yes, it was planned <bad DJ> I planned it before I got sick, yes (although I'm feeling much better now, fever is all gone).

I'm glad you picked up on the clues. Yes, when I first posted the "number", I used "23?" Because I wasn't sure how long for sure. I started counting out parts and realized that my "abrupt" ending would fall on 23, so it would work perfect. So then I started posting it as "23". <g>

I try very hard to always reply personally to each fdk I get... because I really appreciate them. And yes, I do listen to what everyone has to say... I may not always agree <g> but I do hear you. <g>

I'm so glad to hear you are chomping at the bit. <g>

Ooooh, and hello again Beethoven. <g> Tank is a guy, btw. <g> And yes, he most definitely is a genre all his own

Thank again and part 24 will be here before you know it. <g>


JAMES! Hello there! I made you swear? LOL! Sorry, I really shouldn't be laughing <snort> but I just can't help it <giggles> it's just so funny. <g>

Ooooh! As if the pointy-stick men aren't bad enough... you called on the Stay Puffed Marshmellow Man! EEEEEP! Worse than Tank? Ack! I highly doubt it. <g>

Heh - loved the "NOT". <g> Your fdk totally made me blush. Thanks so much James. And yes, please do get that next part to me... I'm working as fast as I can to get 24 up. <g>


Hi Jo! I'm so glad to know that you've been reading and enjoying. Part 24 is coming soon.


No really, everyone, part 24 is coming very soon. Sue e-mailed me and told me she would have it back to me tonight... now depending on how many suggestions she made, and whether or not I have to send it back to her again... it could be posted between tonight and tomorrow night. <g> How's that for vague? <snort>

-- DJ <who runs off quickly before anyone can catch her and give her those lashings...>