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My mom laughed at me as nervous as I was to post the story. There may be more coming from me soon, it depends on how demanding my summer classes become.
But seriously, thanks for reading, guys. Comments? Constructive criticism?
"I don't like people to talk for no reason, but I really love dialogue between people who aren't listening to each other." --Raymond Carter
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but I realized I know the Clark you show to the world, and the Superman you show to the world. I want to know you, the Clark that your parents know.” That's very insightful: Clark is a role, too.
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Well done, Samik! Would I be correct when I assume this is only your 2nd story, and that your first story was only 55 words long? (No, I don't have the archive memorized; I checked.)
This is excellent, and very sweet.
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Hi, Beautiful.  MAF 
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Very cute -- and a very sweet message  . And you're right about Ace Ventura -- I loved it when I was like in eighth grade ... but not so much when I saw it the second time and now I hate it  . - Alicia  ps. My mom has no idea that I write . She used to know a long time ago, but made fun of me about it so much that I just told her i stopped.
Laura "The Yellow Dart" U. (Alicia U. on the archive)
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My mom laughed at me as nervous as I was to post the story. Oh, I remember the feeling... (although I hadn't told my mom anything ) There may be more coming from me soon, it depends on how demanding my summer classes become. Waiting for more soon!! Don't let your summer classes become very demanding (it's summer, for crying out loud!!). -- On with the fic. GREAT STORY!! I love your idea about how Lois finds out. Congratulations See you soon. AnnaBtG.
What we've got here is failure to communicate...
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Very nice, very believable scene. You captured a great deal of the emotions that I think would have been there. I think that I prefer the way that your Lois found out to the way that the show did it.
And I am glad that your mom supports your writing.. mine supports mine in her own way.. she asks for stories to order <g> and generally on topics that I don't care anything about.
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Cute story, samik. As others have said, you made some really good points! Write again!
thanks,
claire
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Hey Samik Good piece I hope you'll post more stories! Jen 
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Short and sweet! Hope you keep writting. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
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Great stuff! Keep up the good work! You done good! ~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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A cute and WAFFy revelation story, very nicely done too. Thank you for sharing.
And my mom laughed at me too before I posted the first part of After Midnight. I was probably as nervous as you were. <g>
Caroline
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Wonderful piece, samik!
I like the way you let them have a revelation without the additional conflict potential of having admitted their love / of being already in a relationship.
I think things would have gone completely differently in the show if 'the secret' had been revealed at a point where the two of them were 'only' best friends.
I loved your story and await hopefully other works of yours.
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Very cute and sweet, Samik  Every author I know has butterflies in the stomach, sweating palms, and a very bad feeling that they're about to do something very dumb when they hit that post button on a new story! Which isn't to say you shouldn't do it anyway. LabRat
Athos: If you'd told us what you were doing, we might have been able to plan this properly.
Aramis: Yes, sorry.
Athos: No, no, by all means, let's keep things suicidal.
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Very nice.
I also liked the line about getting to know Clark.
And Labby is right -- the butterflies don't go away because we all care so much and want others to care about what we do as well.
So just keep writing and keep posting and get used to the butterflies.
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A very enjoyable and satisfying revelation story, Samik. Having Lois overhear Clark's muttering about himself is a good way to let her hear what she needed to while she was having her one-way "conversation", and it gives her time to cool down and be ready to listen to Clark.
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Hey Samik This was a short but sweet story... Hope read more stories from you soon Meni
Is it a bird?" "Is it a plane?" "No, it's just a guy in tights and a cape!"
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Samik A lovely story! Tricia 
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Samik,
cute sweet story
keep writing
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Nice revelation story, Sami. Always great to see new(ish) writers posting! I hope we see more from you. Kathy
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