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I hope you liked Chapter Four ! Here's the feedback thread.

So either Zara and "David" are not what they seem, or Jor'el and Lara aren't? Oh, and if the New KRyptonian ship had a cloaking device, why can't this ship have one too.

No time for a lot of feedback, Darcy, but I loved this:

This is a very interesting story!

It's an interesting time to have Jor-El and Lara show up, a time where I'm sure Clark could use some extra support from his parents.

I'm excited to see more.

Hey! I go to Wal*Mart for a couple hours, and there's feedback! Yippee!

They're all exactly who they seem, Woody. Much will be explained in Chapter Five--but don't expect that anytime soon, since it took me months to even start typing Chapter Four.

And Lara & Jor-El's ship is OLDER than the New Kryptonian ships. Basically, they're from Krypton and Krypton's technology stopped getting better when the planet blew up.

But New Krypton's technology advanced, since the colonists there had to find ways to eke out an existence on their new rock.

Just glad you had time to read it, Nancy.

Sometimes, when I'm thinking up chapters, there are certain words that I feel just HAVE to be used in the story. "Cavorting" was one of those words for this chapter. The other was "prevaricated."

Thanks, Jessi!

More of this story will be a while yet (I'll be at least THINKING about it, I promise!), but for now you're welcome to see the vignettes I wrote when I was trying to decide which plot line to go with for this story--I made five, including the one that was Chapter One in this story.

Good chapter, Darcy! The narrative flow is smooth, the reactions of all the characters are consistent, and you're getting very good with the cliffhanger thing.

Now if we could just convince you to either think faster or type faster ....

Thanks, Terry! And a BIG thanks for the beta.

I type plenty fast. (60-85wpm on a BAD day) It's just cracking down and STARTING to type a story I have trouble with.

That, and I don't usually like to start typing something until I have the better part of at least a few scenes worked out in my head.

That's what happened with this chapter. At first, I only had the picture of "enthusiastic cavorting" in my head, but I didn't have any way to get to that part. Then, I thought of the scene with the corporal and the colonel.

As soon as I started typing, everything else came out pretty easily--although I did have to sleep on the scenes after the reunion for a few days, 'cause I'd typed those first few scenes really late at night and couldn't think, must less type.