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Yikes! That was unexpected. And highly intriguing!

Great emotion, too. No difficulty here knowing exactly how our characters are feeling about these latest developments.

Yvonne

Hi,

Great part.

Thanks, Yvonne and Maria.

Yes, Maria this was a very emotional part. I just re-read it and cried yet again.

Lois was hiding and using mirrors to make sure no medical personnel were present.

Lois didn't know when she would be coming before she came, but Clark did, because Lois told him after she came. (One of those time things, you know.)

Yes, Caitlyn saw Lois. Lois obviously decided not to tell Clark about that.
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What I was trying to say was that after Lois visited Clark and saw the interaction between him and Caitlyn, she realized that he would never have a relationship with another woman unless she (Lois) was dead. Therefore, Lois knew well before she died that she was going to die.
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I don't want to give too much away....
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I'm glad you liked the part between Hannah and Jon.

I'm glad you liked the part where Clark tells Brook he will probably marry Caitlyn, too.
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When I re-read this, I saw many mistakes, which I will be fixing. Sorry about that. Blame it on the migraine I had.

Nancy, I sem to have almost no time at all - as usual these days - but I so owe you soe feedback, don't I?

I really, really liked many things about this chapter, but I found it mystifying, too.

He knew what was coming, but it didn't make it any easier.... This is as intriguing as it is confusing!

I like this.... Steel, uh, Lightning is all tuckered out. What a sweet expression that is in English, all tuckered out. But Superman looks so sad, and the doctor is worried about him.

You missed a - what do you call them? A quote mark? One of these: ", as in "The next thing one of youis going to tell me....".

Anyway, I like seeing Clark surly and grouchy. I most certainly don't blame him for feeling bad and low. Seeing him react like that makes him human. Many bad things have happened to him, and he has been so weak lately.

Hmmm. The doctor is worried about Clark's mental health.

Ahh!! Zared and Jenni are getting married! How nice!

Hmmm. Clark knows that something bad is about to happen, and it makes him so sad.

Okay... I can guess who this is... and I'm glad to see her, believe me. But why is she here? Now? How did Clark know she would come? Is this some sort of anniversary of theirs? The anniversary of their wedding? The anniversary of her death?

I have no idea what she's talking about!

Lois knows his future? She knows it but can't tell him? And what is it that he can't tell her?

And Lois gets to see her son. How adorable! But does that mean that she hasn't seen him for a long time? He has changed a lot since she saw him last?

I loved this! Lois couldn't help spying on Clark, and she was two beds away, since there were no patients there. She is not allowed to really ask him anything, but of course it is part of her nature to be nosy. <hugs Lois> (((((Lois)))))

She is bringing him something?????

And he is naked under there. Oh, Clark, surely she can take a peek?

I love Lois!!! ((((((Lois))))))

Hyperspace! I love it! Did you get the idea from our round robin, Nancy?

I love that Lois is here, but her visit is completely mysterious to me!

Oh-oh!!! Caitlyn comes in and sees Lois!

And this... I want to cry, because I love Lois so much, and this Lois is just absolutely, totally adorable. And she is dead, and she has to leave, but first she gives Clark and Caitlyn her blessing.... <sniffle>

I love the idea that Lois is coming and going through a housekeeping closet. However, you should probably write, 'Lois entered a housekeeping closet' instead of, 'she entered a housekeeping closet'.

And Clark tells Jon that he wasn't supposed to know about this, and it would have been harder for Jon than for him to see Lois. Okay, colour me intrigued! What's going on here?

Jeepers!!! If Jon tells anyone about Lois he may jeopardize Zared's very existence here! You sure have things to explain to us!!!

Gaah! Poor Jon, being told that Bruce knows about everything that ever happened between him and Hannah!

This is adorable. What a lovely father-son talk.

And this.... Oh, Clark, what a wonderful father you are. Let me hug you. (((((Clark)))))

And I completely love this, too. Clark's first time was with Lois, but he knows that Zared's first time was with someone he barely knew in the Kents' farm. But he isn't mad at Zared.

Well, time flies, I just have time to quote a little more. Okay, Caitlyn and Clark talk about Lois's visit:

How extremely sad, and how beautiful at the same time.

I love this - Jon's sweet love for Hannah....

And this is absolutely adorable.

I have no time to quote more, but I loved Clark's talk with Brook, too.

Wonderful, intriguing, poignant, mystifying chapter, Nancy!

Ann

No anniversary. In my story, it would have been about 6 weeks since the anniversary of her death. (Remember Lara telling everyone that she just turned four? Lois died the day after Lara was born.) The anniversary of their wedding would be in October. (I've decided to stick with canon / fanon on that.)

Clark knew she would come because she told him. She just couldn't tell him exactly when or many of the specifics. The only way he knew she was coming is because he was at the hospital, the curtains were gray, Jon had a blue cape on, and he was covered by a blue blanket. He already knows why. That's another mystery.
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Ahhh... the mystery!!

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She knows that he got hurt bad enough to land him in the hospital. She knows about Caitlyn. He can't tell her that she is dead in his future, but she figured it out on her own. That's our Lois!

They can't mess too much with time.
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Jon is 17 in my story. He would have been 13 when Lois died. So, yeah, he's changed a lot.
BUT that doesn't mean that's how old he was when Lois last saw him from her point of view. Let's just say it's been more than four years.
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Yes! The 'thingy'! Stay tuned...
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Nah! I love the whole idea of putting his clothes in hyperspace. But yeah, that was a great thing about the round robin, eh?
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Don't you love a mystery?!
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Glad you liked this, Ann!!
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Well, not everything. Just the major stuff. And I'd sure call someone swimming in the pool naked something major.
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Who says he's not mad - or least was mad? He'd already been through so much with Zared (the whole prostitute thing plus stuff I've hinted at) that maybe he thought it was better to keep his mouth shut, and let good ole' Martha deal with it.
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Yes, Jon's love for Hannah is sweet, isn't it?
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More Brook in the next chapter.
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THANKS!!

And thanks for pointing out the errors. I can't believe I made so many in this chapter. (And you got to it after I fixed most of them.)

Nancy

Edit: Looked at this again:

This would make more sense, but I didn't want the name Lois mentioned until Clark said it out loud.

Well, what can I say?

I was very moved by this part. Clark and Lois, Clark and Caitlin... emotions by the ton!


I think that this says it all.

Please, MORE please!!!!

Regards,

SNL

Nancy, I've been thinking more about this chapter, and I'm feeling ever more moved by Lois's fate. When I first realized you were bringing her into this chapter, I thought she was a ghost. I thought she was visiting Clark from the other side, to see how he was doing now that she was gone. Well, normally I don't believe in any sort of ghosts or supernatural beings whatsoever, but when it comes to Lois and Clark, I'll believe in (almost) anything.

But now I realize that the Lois we saw here wasn't dead at all. She was alive and well, and she was from the past. Apparently she and Clark had agreed, in the past, that she would avail herself of some time-travelling gizmo to come visit him in the future and give him a thingy or other that he would be needing there. That is what we saw happening here. Well, what Lois learns during her visit to the future is that she, who is alive and healthy, will die soon, in the relatively near future.

Can you imagine what that would feel like? To find out, just like that, that you are going to die soon? Okay, okay, I know that this kind of thing happens to not so few people. They feel healthy, except there is a little thing bothering them, so they see a doctor and are told that they have an incurable and fatal disease.

For all of that, I keep thinking about Lois's situation. What is she going to think and feel when she comes back to her own time??? Perhaps her memory of what she learnt in the future will have been erased? I don't know how I feel about that.... Poor Lois has had enough mind-wiping done to her. In a way I'd like to admire her indomitable strength if she is able to go back to her own time and savour her life and her family even though she knows she will have to leave them soon. Also, you know, she can't tell them that she is going to die. I don't think she can. It is a burden she will have to carry on her own, without being able to share it with her nearest and dearest. For their sake, she will have to be strong, encouraging, happy and optimistic, even though she knows she will be dead and gone quite soon. How horrible that would be. What an awful, awful secret she would be carrying. But because of her love, she would keep this secret from her family.

However, I've been thinking.... Lara. Their youngest. Would it really be right and responsible to have another baby, when you have to suspect that you will not be able to be there for your baby when he or she is growing up? Wouldn't she know about her impending death before she became pregnant with Lara? Perhaps her memory had indeed been erased, so that she didn't know.

Anyway. The idea of Lois knowing about her own premature death gives her a kind of tragic, heroic stature in my eyes.

Ann

Thanks SNL.

And thanks, Ann. It must have been a pretty good chapter for you to comment again. I don't want to give too much away, but perhaps Lara was an accident?

Yes, I can certainly see that Lara might have been an accident. There are several ways that could have happened.

But, you know, returning to the subject that Lois knew she was going to die. Wouldn't her pregnancy have worried her a little? Surely she would have realized that her pregnancy could put her at some risk, at least, and in view of what she knew about her own future.... It just seems to me that Lois could have spoken to her obstetrician a little more candidly than usual. Couldn't she have said that she was just a bit uneasy about this pregnancy? Couldn't she have asked her obstetrician or gynaecologist to indulge her and monitor her a little extra carefully? And couldn't she have asked for a ceasarian?

You know what I'm doing, Nancy, don't you? I'm obsessing. I'm thinking of a way to get Lois back, which is useless since it won't happen.

But... I have to admit it... there is one thing I really, really, really would have liked to see. When Lois visited Clark, we certainly felt Clark's pain. But what about Lois's pain, when she realized that she was dead in the near future? And how would she feel when she saw that Clark was with another woman, and might have all but forgotten about her? Maybe he just considered her a nuisance now, an unwelcome reminder of his own past?

Lois was so wonderfully generous when she saw that Clark had moved on, and she blessed him and Caitlyn. I wouldn't have wanted her to do anything less. But how would she have felt about being forgotten and maybe even shunned by Clark? Couldn't he have told her that he would always love her, even though she was no longer with him in this future? Even though he now loved Caitlyn, too, surely that didn't mean he had stopped loving Lois? Surely he didn't regard her as some sort of nuisance who had better leave as soon as possible, so that he and Caitlyn could have their love to themselves?

You know what I hate so intensely about Lois deathfics, Nancy? It's the feeling that Lois doesn't matter. Lois's death doesn't matter in itself, because the only problem it causes is that Clark is going to be sad and miss her. Okay, her children are going to miss her, too. But what if Clark meets another woman, so that he isn't even feeling sad anymore? And what if this woman proves to be a good stepmother to his children, too? Doesn't that mean that Lois's life and death has lost any significance whatsoever? Well, let me tell you - to me that will never, ever be enough to make up for Lois's death. Honestly, Nancy, I don't care about Clark's grief half as much as I care about the loss of Lois's life.

You know I'm the world's greatest Lois fan, Nancy. You know I grieve like hell every time there is a story where Lois dies. Please, Nancy. Before you upload this story to the Archive, can't you edit it so that Clark tells Lois that he has always loved her and always will?

Ann

This is another story, Ann!! I'll get to it eventually. But ceasarian's are MORE dangerous than vaginal births.


We love it because you obsess, Ann! No, Lois isn't coming back, but I have been thinking about an 'alternate' story where Lois is still around. I've been thinking about that for some time, now.


This is probably not really going to be in A New Hero. There is just a little but not much. I might be able to work something in, but it would most likely have to be in another story. And, oh, no, Clark could never consider Lois a nuisance or an unwelcome reminder. If not for Lois' love, he could never have come to this point in his life.


Oh, Ann, surely you don't think she would really think this, do you? I don't.


They were in a public venue so not a lot could be said. I did that on purpose to make their pain worse. He also couldn't say anything about her not being with him in the future because he would have confirmed to her that she was going to die. She thought this was what was going to happen, but Clark couldn't tell her that, because he would have confirmed 100% that she was going to die and thus have removed any hope that she may have had.


Never!! He could never stop loving Lois, but that doesn't mean he can't go on with his life. The heart has the capacity for great love and has enough room to harbor both loves.


Ahh... Ann, can I ever convince you that my Clark loved and still loves Lois? I promise that he does.


Ann, I don't even know what to say to this. Does anyone's death ever matter? Really? Aren't they all senseless? Unfortunately we all die. Isn't a person's life that really matters? And how they affected those around them? And if people weren't sad and missed them then what would that say about that person's life?


Oh, Ann, would you really want someone to be stagnant in their life because someone died? Just because someone goes on with their life doesn't mean they still don't feel sadness over their previous loss. And the part I put in bold - Oh, Ann this is ludicrous! To say that because the still alive person's life goes on is to no longer honor their dead lover's life, well... I just don't even know what to say. I think that's a great dishonor to think that all life stops because a person dies. Do you really think Lois would be that selfish? I would hope not, because that's not how I view Lois at all.


I do have several edits planned before I archive it, but how can Clark tell Lois this in a public venue, when he is Superman and not Clark and he knows he can't break down. I don't think it's possible, Ann. I also don't think that even if I did it, it would be enough to suffice in your eyes. You just feel so much for Lois, that I'm not sure Clark can ever express his love sufficiently. I suppose I could change the scene, and I will consider that, but then if I did that, it would risk all of her kids finding her. I did at one time think of doing the scene in the home with Lois wondering around the unfamiliar house, but I decided that would be TOO painful for Lois.

Maybe I can let you see Clark's love for Lois in the upcoming chapters, and I'll give you a little hint. Clark goes time hopping, too.