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#31516 08/10/06 07:00 AM
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Again, I don't have much time, but I just *have* to comment on some of this, Nancy.

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They were kissing hungrily when Zared finally said, "Uhhh... guys... Like Claire said... not in the hallway..."

Hannah waved him away. "Go on. We'll be there in a minute." She watched Zared walk back in Jenni's room then giggled. She picked Jon up in her arms and started walking with him.
I just love this! Jon and Hannah are kissing in the hallway and then Hannah *picks Jon up* and carries him into Jenni's room! Love it! Ah, to be able to throw your heart-throb hunk over your shoulder and carry him away!!! goofy

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"How can you...?" Jon looked at his dad incredulously.

<You haven't used yours senses enough to know what different smells are. It takes a while.>
Oooooohhhhh!!!!! Imagine having a father who is *that* perceptive, the things he would know about you. Makes me blush just to think about it.

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And how did you find out about your special abilities?"

"Oh, I think I figured it out when I fell asleep and woke up and was floating."
Yeah, that would kind of give it away....

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Actually Bruce had told him. He thought about how poor Bruce had gone to all the trouble of lining his mask with lead only to be told by 'Superman' that Batman was Bruce Wayne. Seeing his face wasn't the only way 'Superman' would know about Bruce.*
Hah!!! I remember that comic! I think Clark told Bruce that there were a hundred ways he could use to find out that Bruce is Batman!

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In fact, he knew who most of the super heroes were. He imagined most of them would be very surprised. He remembered how he had once made the mistake of telling Spiderman that he liked his photos and he should think about sending some to The Daily Planet.
But I've never been into Spiderman, and I know only a few things about him.

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He said, "Caitlyn, can you go check on dad? I think he's had rough day." She nodded. Then he said, "I'll chaperone."
I don't know if I'm interpreting this the way you want me to, but it seems to me that Jon is suggesting that Caitlyn can't really be trusted around Clark, lest her hormones get the better of her. Ha! I love it!!! goofy

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"Marilyn. I know about her heritage. I know Bruce hasn't told you about me but I will." He paused. "Are you on a secure phone? If not then go downstairs and call me back."

"Downstairs?" She stuttered.

"All - the - way down stairs."
I *love* the way Clark is talking to Batman's wife and trying to persuade her to go down to the Batcave!

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"I know about Bruce's... ummm, past time, and I have for at least 20 years. Just to make sure no one is listening, let me say this in a round about way. I rather like to wear red and blue myself. Bruce and I both like just a hint of yellow. I also share some of Bruce's interests, shall we say. So let me say again, I know about Hannah."

"Red, blue, and yellow? As in gray, black, and yellow?"

"Uh-huh. Exactly. Only I don't use a fancy car. I get around under my own power."
I *love* this, too! What a wonderful way to tell Marilyn about Clark Kent and Superman!

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"You know, you might want to try to talk Bruce into telling her about his nightly activities."

"No!! He might get some idea about putting her in red and green, if you get my drift. He is without those particular colors right now."
Awww! Marilyn hasn't told Bruce about Hannah because she fears he will try to turn her into Super-Robin!!!

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Clark called Jon. <Jon. I'm off the phone.> As Clark lay in the bed waiting for Jon and Caitlyn he thought he'd practice a little. He opened the door. He thought, 'I wasn't sure I could do that since I'm still recovering.' Then he thought that Bernie must be right about his telepathic and other related abilities weren't affected by the kryptonite or the long term effects of injury.
But I don't think I got this. Just *how* was Clark opening the door?

I'm not going to quote from the Clark, Caitlyn and Jon part, but I very much like how you use your own medical knowledge, Nancy.

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Marilyn looked at Bruce. "You are limping. Are you hurt?"

Bruce as usual was sullen. "No, I..." He put his hand on his back.

She sighed. "Still can't admit that your back hurts sometimes? It's been broken, after all."
Yes! I remember that some years ago, Batman's back was broken in the comics.

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"Oh, please, Bruce. One of the reasons we are married is so that I can tend to your injuries." 'That and to make sure you have heirs,' she thought.
Gaaah, what a cold and instrumental sort of marriage. But it squares with how I think of Bruce - I don't think he's capable of loving a woman, not since his mother was murdered when he was a kid.

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"You miss Alfred being around more, huh?"

He nodded. "He is like a father to me."

Alfred was retired now and was just too sickly to really be of much help to Bruce anymore. Much to Bruce's dislike, Alfred had moved to a retirement home a few years ago. He often visited but he told Bruce that he liked the retirement home because he got to read most of the day. He'd even found a lady friend.
I think it's sweet that Alfred has found himself a lady friend, but it's sad to think that he is old and sickly and living in a retirement home.

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"Nothing's wrong. It's just.. well. You know Hannah came about about because of a rape. That's how we met. You took me to the hospital." It had been Bruce Wayne who had taken her to the hospital - not Batman. "What you don't know is that I was raped by one of the New Kryptonians."
This is very interesting.

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She couldn't help but smile when he had almost sat up. Once and a while, he did show in some little way that he still cared about her. Maybe he never quit caring. Maybe he just couldn't get past Batman. She wasn't sure if he had ever really loved her. She wasn't sure if he even could. Oh, he had told her that he did. But he was smart - smart enough to know that sometimes you had to tell your wife that you loved her. But he had also made it very clear that one of the reasons they had gotten married was so that she could provide medical care to him - she was a nurse practicioner - and to provide him heirs. But oh, if he only knew of the ache in her heart.
I love this - it's so sad, and at the same time it is so mature, so "adult" in the very best (and totally non-pornographic) sense of the word.

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"I know how protective you are of her, and I knew you thought I'd make her a Robin, so I didn't say anything. I guess I now know why you have been so much more protective of her than Al or Thomas. I thought maybe it was because she's a girl."
So Bruce and Marilyn have three kids. Or rather, Bruce and Marilyn have two sons, and then Hanna is Bruce's stepdaughter.

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She smiled. "Are you going with me to Jon's graduation tomorrow?"

He gave her one of his extremely rare 'real' smiles. It was a nice smile. She wished he'd do it more often. When it came to business and public relations, he smiled, but it wasn't real. "Yes, I'll go. I'm pretty fond of Jon." He raised his eyebrows thinking how interesting that relationship had just become. "I'm pretty fond of Hannah, too, as well you know." He even winked at his wife. He thought a moment then said, "Who were talking to on the phone?"
Hey, Bruce is being really nice here.

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"Hmmpph... I take it Clark also suggested I tell Hannah about Batman."

"Well, he thinks it would be a good idea. So do I. I think all three of our children should know about their father. They are old enough to know. Bruce, will you at least think about it?"

"I'll think about it.
Don't try to run my household, eh, Clark?

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Can I share your bed tonight?" He just looked at her. She paused. "So I can keep an eye on your injury. I haven't suddenly become delusional, Bruce." He nodded, stood up, got dressed and walked out.
Again, poor Marilyn.

And the Metropolis Mutilator is back! Gaaah! The only thing ever that is good about the fact that Lois is dead in your story is that the Metropolis Mutilator can't mutilate *her*, at least!

Looking forward to more, Nancy, though I don't look forward a lot to having to meet the Mutilator again. (Or to having to watch Clark and Caitlyn's relationship getting hotter. I feel like saying like a little kid: Gaaah!!! Disgusting!!!)

Ann (ducking to avoid getting hit by bricks thrown at her by Caitlyn) peep

#31517 08/10/06 07:27 AM
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Hi,

Great part. thumbsup


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"Hmmpph... I take it Clark also suggested I tell Hannah about Batman."

"Well, he thinks it would be a good idea. So do I. I think all three of our children should know about their father. They are old enough to know. Bruce, will you at least think about
Looking forward to the revelation. thumbsup thumbsup


More ASAP, please.

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#31518 08/10/06 05:25 PM
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Thanks Ann... All those comments and no time.. Wow!


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You mean like Bill and Monica intercourse?
Yes, I couldn't be too blatant since this is PG. Remember this from part 15...
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She giggled. "Want some more?" She moved her hand to his zipper.

"Not that much." He started to sit up, but she pushed him back down.

"Oh, don't worry. We agreed to wait a while. I'm not sure either of us is ready for that, anyway. I'm just trying to relax you a little."

He protested again but he lost the battle - somewhat happily.

A few minutes later, after she'd done what she hadn't done before, she put her arms around him and whispered in his ear, "Happy Graduation, Jon."

He was shaking and still breathing somewhat rapidly. "That's why you did that? I thought you wanted to wait."

"Jon, honey, it was rather one sided. That was my intention. I had actually planned on that *after* you graduated, but you are just so tense."
That's darn near close to nfic... Maybe I'd better let DJ or Sue spiff that part up.... wink


Spiderman's real name is Peter Parker and he makes his living by taking pictures for various newspapers - mostly the one that is in his home city. I can't remember the name of the city or the newspaper, but most of his pics are of.. ahem, Spiderman. I just thought it fit since one them is a news journalist and one is a photo journalist....


I've often thought that when I've read the comics that some of the other superheroes really have no idea 'what' they are dealing with in Clark because he's such a nice guy. Same would be true for the public. Just think about a guy that could kill you with his eyes. Scary, huh?


This was pretty cute:
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I don't know if I'm interpreting this the way you want me to, but it seems to me that Jon is suggesting that Caitlyn can't really be trusted around Clark, lest her hormones get the better of her. Ha! I love it!!!
I was thinking more of Clark's hormones...


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But I don't think I got this. Just *how* was Clark opening the door?
He opened the door with telekinesis. I alluded to this earlier in the story when I suggested he might be able to make people forget things (with difficulty). The telekinesis is easier and more an extension of the telepathy. Do I need to be more blatant?


Thanks about the comment about me using my medical knowledge. Even before I was a nurse, it always bugged me when stories weren't more specific. As it is, I've still backed off a little. If I got extremely accurate, let's just say I'd have to put it in the nfic folder due to the graphic nature....

I am thinking of doing a story from Caitlyn's point of view while Clark is having surgery (not extreme graphics), but I don't know how well that would go over..


Yeah, it is sad to think of Alfred as old and sickly, but heck he was already up there when Bruce's parents were killed, so by now he must be very old. Originally I had made him dead, but I just thought that was too sad.


Hey, even Bruce Wayne can nice.


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Ann (ducking to avoid getting hit by bricks thrown at her by Caitlyn)
Caitlyn is haunting you, remember?


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Hope Claire dump that guy.
Oh, yeah, Claire's gonna dump the creep, Maria.


Thanks for this Maria:
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Well, he thinks it would be a good idea. So do I. I think all three of our children should know about their father. They are old enough to know. Bruce, will you at least think about
It... will be interesting.


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This is really scary!
Good! I'm glad that came through.


Thanks again:

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Love the way you go in all the small stories and not getting to far from the main story.
Thanks to everyone who has stuck with this story. I had originally intended it to more than one story (it still will be but lots of loose ends have to be wrapped up first), but I just decided to keep posting. As it was, I kind of started in the middle of things. Originally my intention was for this particular arc to have two side by side stories, but I don't think I'll do that now. Also, originally Jon and Hannah were a separate story, but that would probably almost make a third side by side story. I will probably have to rename this in the end. Also before I post it to the archive, I may try to break it up.

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I kind of figured that Clark was indeed using telekinesis to open the door. It just surprised me, because telekinesis has never been one of Clark's powers before, neither in the comics, in the movies or in any TV shows, as far as I know. I've also never seen it in any fanfic story before.

But I'm fine with you giving him this ability here. Just wanted to ask, you know?

Ann

#31520 08/12/06 10:37 AM
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Another very good installment. The interaction with Bruce and co is brilliant.

But, where is poor Meowoof?

Someone should report Caitlyn to the RSPCA or its American partner!

Looking forward to reading some more.

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(RSPCA in the UK is the Royal Society for the prevention of cruelty to animals.)

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ASPCA here. Meowoof isn't getting totally ignored - she isn't being starved or anything. She's in the next chapter which I'm getting ready to post. [Linked Image]


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