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Hmmm, getting interesting, FinLi. I like these stories where Clark meet Lois before they... well, you know, before!
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Aww, FinLi, this part was just so touching: “Relax.” His voice was soothing as his hand caressed her cheek briefly. “Everything is going to be all right,” he reassured her, and she could hear the warm smile in his voice. Mmmm, and this part; Leaning back, she felt his hard chest behind her. Feeling strangely safe, she let her head roll back onto his shoulder. Her body started to shake from shock and his arms came around her, providing warmth and security. And this part: “I’m going to go meet the rescue trucks. You stay still, ok?” He squeezed her shoulder affectionately, when he felt her reach for him. “You’re going to be just fine,” he reassured her. And then she asks for his name and he starts to tell her but doesn't. Why? Hmm, interesting. Why wouldn't he want to give his name? I'll be waiting for part 4 - oh and thanks for making this part just a little longer. 
Smile and the world smiles with you ... frown and you're just giving yourself wrinkles.
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Yay! Help arrived! More soon!
Jackie
Superman: I hear you've been looking for me.
Lois: All my life.
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As I've told you before, this is so Clarkish - helping in secret and running away before somebody could recognize him.  It's sweet as he helps Lois out of the wreck and still comforts her, staying with her until to be sure she is safe.  Andreia 
"My wife's love is what unites Krypton and Earth in my heart. Without it, without her, I truly would be in hell."
~ Superman: Man of Tomorrow #15
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Hi, Great part. 
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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I just read all the parts available. I was really scared for Lois. I am curious to see where this will lead.
I've converted to lurk-ism... hopefully only temporary.
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Good start. I do like aternate beginnings and this one looks like it will be a long and twisted road to get our couple together.  You have a nice tone, Lois sounded like Lois and Clark is so Clarkish.
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Hi FinLi, Are you going to post every day?
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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FinLi, I am liking this story. I just read all three parts. I don't quite understand why Clark didn't give Lois his name. She couldn't know what he could do so she would have just thought he was someone passing by and stopped to help. Or is she in some peculiar geographic location that defies gravity? But, already, Clark is getting attached. “Relax.” His voice was soothing as his hand caressed her cheek briefly. “Everything is going to be all right,” he reassured her, and she could hear the warm smile in his voice. And When he was satisfied that she wasn’t in any immediate danger, he sat down beside her and pulled her into his arms, cradling her as he pressed his handkerchief to the oozing gash on her forehead. Pushing some hair behind her ear, he spoke softly, trying to wake her up. Please post more soon, and make the parts longer...pleeeease. 
I'm a firm believer in the fact that God doesn't put any more on us than we can bear. He does however make us come to Jesus every so often.
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