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Hi,

Great part.

This is fantastic. Romance, mystery, comedy, snappy dialogue, all wrapped up in one extremely well written story. Loved this:

Heh heh. I like the sexual innuendo--we didn't get too much of that on the show and you do it in a way so that it's still in character, at least in my opinion.

Very good! (No pun intended )

Uh-oh. Man, Clark. You're screwed. And not in a good way.

More please!

Talk about the perfect place to end to guarantee the readers will be waiting with baited breath until the next instalment.

This is progressing nicely. It's really a fun story and well constucted. I'm looking forward to the next part... with baited breath.

Tank (who has no idea what baited breath is)

It's not "baited breath," Tank, it's "bated breath." It's a Victorian expression referring to holding one's breath in anticipation of something momentous.

But you're absolutely right about this story. Couldn't be a better place to stop! Couldn't be a better way to make us trip on our tongues waiting for chapter 11. Wonderful story!

Do post soon, please, so that Tank doesn't turn blue and pass out.

Well my breath is bated too<g> Great job! I can't wait I am turning blue so hurry. Laura

It sure doesn't look too good for our hero now. Our heroine is going to... hmmm, not sure what. But it won't be pleasant.

I'm commenting on the entire story so far, since I just read it all yesterday. I particularly loved the fact that Lucas was from KY. Brilliant on his part!

Nice mix of three separate - or no, is that four? - plots here. Someone's a bit too interested in Lois. There's more to Lucas than met the eye way back when he was alive. Clark left the revelation unsaid at the... critical moment. And there's suspicious things happening that appear to be aimed at... whoever happens along, as Clark and Lois have both noted.

I'm with Tank, waiting bated-ly.

~Toc