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Thank you! Metal shavings!!!!!!!!!!!!! Arugh Clark I just want to box your ears. Gee. I'm not too impressed with the lab people that would have gone through the toy makers lab.

Gee, it was all there. That is too bad it wasn't caught sooner:
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Symptoms of Toxicity
The general symptoms of lead poisoning are universal although more informaton is available on poisoning in humans. The first symptoms of lead toxicity are very general and nonspecific. These include nausea, sluggishness, vomiting, painful gastrointestinal irritation, diarrhea, loss of appetite, colic, weakness and dehydration. These symptoms are common to many disorders and can often lead to inaccurate diagnosis.
Some symptoms more specific to human poisoning include discoloration of the lips and skin attributed mild secondary anemia, a lead line on the gums, developmental disorders, sterility and abortion. There have also been some prelimiunary reports indicating that chronic lead poisoning can also lead to chronic nephritis and premature development of arteriosclerosis.
More severe cases of poisoning can produce symptoms including convulsions,"wrist drop" or external limb paralysis, coma and ultimately death.
Sigh, I can hardly wait and see if they can make Lois better. Hmmm. Probably b/c if it was bad I think there would be a few more chapters to focus in on Clark's sadness.

See I'm trying to think positive here.

Too bad they don't have this . Hmmm, I wonder if it would help Lois.

That was beautifuly written. When Clark was waiting outside of the hospital room - there was something about what was going through his mind that brought tears to my eyes.

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Sutton broke off abruptly as Lois began to thrash around.

Voices turned into a blur of sound in the background. Clark screened all of them out. He moved onto the edge of the bed beside Lois and took her into his arms, trying to calm her.

“Lois... sweetheart, I’m here, I won’t leave you... talk to me, tell me you can hear me...”

She wasn’t responding. Couldn’t hear him. Wasn’t seeing him. Wasn’t aware of anything. Doctors prodding her, poking instruments near her, talking about her as if she wasn’t even there.

“God, Lois!” Desperation seized him. He covered her lips with his, tasted salt and realised that he was crying.

Not now. Not yet. Please, not yet...
Ah, man! So sad. thumbsup

Hehe - more.


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Is there light at the end of an dark tunnel?
Please let it be whinging


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Great title for the post, Julie smile

And I turned on my PC JUST to read this. I'm going shopping in a second, but had to know what happened.

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Sutton wants to see you
Since you've got two parts left, I'm guessing this is good news...

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As if she were as replaceable as a... a pair of socks!

And yet, something about the way she’d said it... He glanced down at her. She was fighting back tears again. She actually thought that he would work with someone else. And she wanted him to know that she was okay with it. Wanted him to know that he deserved the best.

He’d had the best. There could never be anyone else.
Damn, Wendy. Now I feel all cryish inside. Amazing writing here.

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he kissed the spot where his ring rested. All the love he felt for her was reflected back to him in her eyes.
Beautifully done, Wendy.

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Even though Lois would probably prefer to remain Lois Lane. Names, though, hardly mattered now. If letting her be called Mrs Kent would reinforce his position, his right to be by her side, then that was all that counted.
Even *I* am willing to buy it at this point!

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Stupid to feel as if his connection to her, his right to be with her, was dependent on a tiny piece of gold jewellery. Yet it felt like such an important symbol.
Now I'm reminded that mine is...not there *sigh*

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Lois, don’t leave me, please don’t leave me, please come back to me, please don’t go...
I don't know how you do it, but this is just incredible.

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Lead! It was lead
I SO did not anticipate this one...

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He had to be right. It had to be lead. Had to be. Because being wrong was going to cost him everything in the world that mattered to him.
/me claps. You are such a brilliant writer! My heart was in my throat the whole time.


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That's how you left it?!?!?! Come back!! I really can't wait to see what happens. I hope we get to see how she recovers. She will recover, right? Anyway, this has been a great story so far and I can't wait to read the end.

So post it soon, would ya? wildguy wildguy


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Breathtakingly good, Wendy!

Once they started talking about mercury poisoning, I wondered if it might be lead... good choice from the poisoner's point of view, too, since it wouldn't be something too many people would think of. They would have tested for arsenic early on, but might not think of lead. Not real common in adults.

I don't think there'd be memory loss to the point of total amnesia of recent events - it'd be more like an inability to recall details or a learning disability sort of thing. So hopefully she'll remember the wedding, etc. smile If she lives. We're assuming she will. If it is lead, it's pretty treatable, although the antidotes aren't exactly a walk in the park.

There may be organ damage, though. And impairment of things like fine motor coordination. Pretty rough if you are trying to hold a pencil or type. And let's not forget the affects on one's ability to have children...

Loved, loved, loved the part where she was in the hospital and started to deteriorate, Clark's reactions, her need for him... Beautifully emotional.

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Sorry I'm so late getting back to this. We had visitors unexpectedly this evening and, while it was fun, it's put me behind schedule. But I see a couple more of you sneaked in with comments while I was gone - thank you! smile

Again, you've all taken my breath away with your wonderful compliments, all the kind things you've said. This was always going to be an emotional instalment - okay, yes, most of them have been goofy - but with Lois nearing the end of her time and the poison getting a stronger grip, things were going to get intense.

Pam said:

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That's a really terrible place to end the section... but it's a fabulous cliffhanger
LOL - thank you! But, actually, I thought it was being kind to you. I could have ended it half a page sooner, before Clark started remembering those shavings in the workshop, now couldn't I? goofy

Speaking of those shavings, kudos to those of you who picked out that very brief passing mention a few instalments ago. goofy There has to be some conflict, something to keep the interest up. wink Or, at least, for me. Anyway. let me know what you think when you've read the final part. Always assuming, of course, that it does end in WAFFy stuff... evil

And now... the poison. Janet said:

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Once they started talking about mercury poisoning, I wondered if it might be lead... good choice from the poisoner's point of view, too, since it wouldn't be something too many people would think of. They would have tested for arsenic early on, but might not think of lead. Not real common in adults.
Yes, precisely. I'll say a lot more about my choice of poisons when I reply to the final section - it wouldn't be appropriate to go into it now. But what you say about lead not being something too many people would think of is exactly why I chose it. I did, of course, have expert advice here, and I could not possibly have written this story without Jill's help. Jill gave me a few alternatives, and what made me go for lead was two-fold: first, people don't always think to test for it; second, it's not generally taken intravenously.

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Well, it was lead poisoning that I was hoping I was wrong about. Won't Lois have some permanent brain and/or nerve and muscle damage from such a high exposure?
and others also commented on possible side-effects from lead. Yes, assuming that it is lead, wink side-effects are not only possible but very probable. Again, I'll say a lot more about that, including my reasoning in terms of what you'll see in Part 21, when I respond to the final instalment.

I think that's about all I want to respond to here, other than to say that all the wonderful, amazing compliments in here have once more left me awed, speechless, blushing and so very, very grateful to you all. There just aren't words to thank you the way I want to.

I suspect, though, anyway that you'd rather I didn't try to get verbose about my thanks and just posted Part 21 instead... so here goes.

Thank you all!!


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