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Luthor knows! Please, please, don't let them die! (who's with her heart in her throat yet)

David, David, David...angst-ridden thou art! I can't decide if Luthor losing his cool in front of Lois like this is something I'm buying into...but since he's drunk...the jury's still out. On the other hand, he did miss out on killing Superman...that's reason enough to make any villian angry...

I think I might have to give you the Cliffhanger Award.



Jen

Ack too much angst. I'm out until it is over. Laura

Thou art incarnate!

James

David

I've just read parts one to three back-to-back. They're really rather wonderful. You know that, don't you?

You've managed to keep the tension up consistently and thrown in a few twists that I haven't seen anywhere else.

What I'm particularly impressed by is how you can say so very much in such a short amount of words. I'm astonished that this isn't a two-hundred page epic, given the amount of angst you've managed to lever in here.

Anyway... Wonderful stuff. And I want part four. Now.

Chris

Really wonderful, David! Please keep it coming.

Kaethel

Hi,

Great part. Get back here!

MAF

ACK!!

OMG!!!!

NO NO NO!!!!! You CAN'T have done this!!

Wow. I also just finished reading the first three parts, and wow. I can't wait to see how you end this!

Oh. My. God.


Wendy

You're evil!!! Get the next part out ASAP!

Thanks to everyone who posted FDK

Because... well, because I'm a wimp, Part Four is now up.

I'll be back later to reply properly.

I already left my opinion on the last two sections in the 4/4 folder, but I just wanted to say:

Completely evocative. Brilliant.

Ok, time for some comments - Wow

So many people thought I'd kill off Lois and Clark... I'm oddly proud of that fact

I was worried about Luthor coming off as OOC, but I hope I cleared that up a little and explained his behaviour in part 4.
All things considered I'd say the man was allowed to snap a little - or a lot. And the alcohol always helps

If I could frame it I'd put it on my wall

Thanks

You know... I'm starting to think that's a byproduct of studying science. "I want you to summarise this 35 page paper into a 2 page hand out - include a diagram!"

It seems to pass muster for most people, so I'm not complaining

Of course

Thank you

Thank you *so* much, Ingonito, for coming back and posting your thoughts here too

I'm very glad you enjoyed the story and I *hope* it was a decent introductory to reading fic on the boards

To everyone who left fdk... thank you

Andreia, Jen, Laura (who'll I have to write a nicer story for ), James, Pi... Chris, Kae, Maria, TJ, Karen, Wendy, Sheila and Incognito - thanks

Much more than decent, I'd say. You've encouraged me to return more often in the hopes of finding jems like this one. And perhaps another one from you, too?

OH WOW!!!! I can't believe it!! Luthor coming in like that... and Lois! What must be going through her mind as she starts to see everything, the *truth*, so clearly! Superman not being invulnerable AND being Clark, and Luthor being evil and Superman's mortal enemy. I mean, she must be on shock-overload, which you show perfectly, with her only saying a few things. And all we know is how she sounds to Clark saying them. The quick sentences are really powerful in this story. It gives the story a real sense of urgency, which is perfect, since it's being told from Clark's perspective, with him in a dire situation.

Off to find part 4

~Nicole