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Erin, this was adorable! Cute and funny, yet romantic at the same time. I had a feeling what Lois's ploy was going to be, and I love that it actually worked for her. <g>
As for CC's suggestion, I think both titles are cute, though I do like the one you used very much. If you decide to write the companion story, maybe you could just call it "All's Fair in Love and Arm Wrestling: Lois" and "All's Fair in Love and Arm Wrestling: Clark"?
But either set of titles would be very cute!
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Oh, Erin, this was just so cute (the strongest man in the world ban't beat Lois), yet romantic.
But you simply must continue the story and tell about their - was it a date or not?
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Ooh, fun, Erin!  I'm not sure that this needs a companion piece from Clark's point of view; you showed his reactions through Lois's eyes all the way and, because we know stuff she doesn't, we can interpret them from his POV. So we already know that he doesn't want to do it because he might inadvertently reveal his true level of strength and possibly hurt her. And it's easy enough to imagine his reaction to being kissed!  But a sequel from his POV showing the dinner-date and him wondering what Lois wants out of it... now, that I'd love to read.  Oh, and I love the title!  Wendy 
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Cute and fun - in fact, all the hallmarks of a classic Erin story! Loved it, Erin.  A companion piece might be fun and the date would be even more fun. And here I'd like to mention a little bugbear of mine. Two stories, a series don't make. That's a story and a sequel. You need at least three stories to make a series. Just sayin'. I like the title you have already. LabRat
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Yeah, what Wendy said! I don't think we need the scene re-told from Clark's POV. But a sequel showing his reaction and that date would not come amiss I loved this, Erin. Thanks for the giggles. PJ
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He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
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hi It was sweet and cute :rolleyes: You should write a sequel Karla
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This was cute, sweet, and very fun to read. Thanks for sharing it with us, Erin! As far as the title, I really like both ideas. Kathy's suggestion might be a good comprimise. I'd personally like to see both Clark's POV and what happens on the date. ~Anna
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 Very well done, I won't use "cute" because it's been used a lot already, but you got me in "silly grin" mode with that one. TEEEEEEEJ
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Woo hoo you go Lois! You just beat SUPERMAN! (right) nice going Clark<g> and I am sure he thought it was worth the loss. I am all for a sequel about the date. Laura
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Definitely worth the read, Erin, and of course I'd love to see more. Wendy does have a point that we saw a good amount of Clark's POV in this story (from his reactions and the knowledge that he's Superman) and we also know the outcome, but if you can find enough new material to make a new story (it's possible, and I have faith in you), then I'd love to see it! Oh, and, like Wendy said, his reaction to being asked out to dinner, too... This one was very sweet and fun. Lighthearted, WAFFy, and short. Just the way I like 'em. It's also original. I wouldn't be surprised to see it pop up on this year's WAFFy and/or Super Short noms list. As for the title, I like the one you have now. I think I'd like to see a different title for Clark's story, though. He already knows he's in love, and he's holding back, not cheating. The title does still hold true for him, but I wonder if there's a better one for his side. I'd have to see the story, though. Anyway, great story! Thanks for sharing. Paul
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Hey, Erin, I've thought of what you can use for a sequel title <g> "I win, you lose, we're both happy" 'Cause I think Clark was pretty happy even without winning the arm wrestling contest PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
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Originally posted by ChiefPam: Hey, Erin, I've thought of what you can use for a sequel title <g>
"I win, you lose, we're both happy"
'Cause I think Clark was pretty happy even without winning the arm wrestling contest
PJ That's hilarious, Pam! I love it! And how very, very true. And thank you all so much for your feedback! You have made my day with your kind words.  Also, thanks for giving me your thoughts and suggestions for the other things, as well--the possible companion story, a sequel, etc. It has been great to hear what you think! I appreciate all your thoughts and feedback so very much!
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Lol, Erin. I'm reminded of a quote from somewhere: "The stronger sex is really the weaker sex because of the weakness of the stronger sex for the weaker sex." Poor Clark! Nan
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I would love to see a sequel AND Clark's POV, cause I loved this fic! Its really nice, happy and sweet. Just the sorta fic I'm gonna come back and read again when I've had a bad day and need cheering up.
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I think this is just the beginning of a multichaptered story, myself ;-)
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I like L's multi-chapter story idea ... but even if you "just" write the date (which I'd love to see!), you can always start it off in Clark's POV, give us his version of the backstory, then launch into his reaction when Lois asks him out to dinner to spend the proceeds. See, problem solved! Kathy
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Okay so I haven't posted in EONS and haven't read fic in even longer, but I happened to be talking to BanAnna today and poked around the boards and ran across this.
Erin - fantastic as always!!! I too would love to see more!
Makes me want to break out my own muse who has been in mothballs way too long. And since I have S1 on DVD on layaway... it just may be time... [if I can find it between 3 small kids...]
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Great!!  A Clark POV would be interesting, if, as Paul says, you could find enough new material. As for the title... I'm not sure. I'm not good at titles anyway. But I don't understand the meaning of "In This Corner" (which doesn't necessarily mean it's not a nice or adequate title, btw). Keep writing! AnnaBtG.
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