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Hope you like it, FOLCs! I've been trying to write this story all week, but it wasn't working. Then this morning I trashed it all and started fresh, and now I think I've got it.
PJ
"You told me you weren't like other men," she said, shaking her head at him when the storm of laughter had passed.
He grinned at her - a goofy, Clark Kent kind of a grin. "I have a gift for understatement."
"You can say that again," she told him.
"I have a...."
"Oh, shut up."
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I loved it, Pam! Very sweet, very WAFFy, and just lovely.
Great to see another story from you, even if it's just a short one.
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That was cute !! :p
Got any more?
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Nice story, Pam. I started suspecting she might have another identity right around the time she said she had a theory, but the way you had her "admit" who she really is was good. Still don't know why she doesn't think he's an obsessed lunatic, though. 
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hi Pam!!
I love this story.
Sweet , great.
I love it
Is that all? Do you have more?
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Really cute, Pam! I liked it.  Artemis
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Nice, Pam! Like others, I saw it coming, but it was still great to see. Good explanation, WAFFy ending, everything wrapped up neatly. What's not to like? I love her suggestion that he could go incogneto. Gee, a secret identity. Why didn't he ever think of that? Fun story, Pam.  Thanks for sharing. Paul
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Just read this again, Pam, and liked it as much as I did the first time. If you remember, I told you early on that either this Lyn was a Mary Sue or she was Lois in disguise  - glad to see I was right the second time. Lovely dialogue, and even nicer observations and reactions from 'Lyn'. Very cleverly done - the first person, present tense is perfect for this one. You kept it light, WAFFy and even humorous, but there's deeper emotion just simmering beneath the surface for both of them - that comes across very clearly. Great vignette! Wendy
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Wow I really liked this Pam. It was a very different idea and one that worked very well. You had me going up until the end. So what kind of disguise was this Lois wearing and how come he couldn't see through it? Also I like the twist of Clark not recognising her for a change. Interesting. Laura
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That wistful tone at the end really gets to me. To cover it up, I grin and say, "Well, I guess that lets out the love slave theory, then." Superbly written. The first-person stance intensifies Lo... err Lyn's emotions in my imagination. I say, Lois got what it takes to make a comeback from the Congolese jungles, all on her own, without any super help. Lovely premise.
If she had to move heaven and Earth, perhaps come back to haunt Perry and explain the story after they'd killed her, she would do it.
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Great! ~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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Awwww, Sweet Story Pam! I loved the fact that "lyn" came to him. It was a great story. Hope to hear more from you. And I still demand a sequel!!
Rach
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Sara: LMAO it was chocolate!! smeared in chocolate!
Me: LMFAO chocolate smeared in chocolate!
Sara: LMAO the *chocolate* isn't smeared in chocolate!
Me: that's the way i read it. was trying to picture chocolate smeared in chocolate
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Being that I have a very suspicious mind, I wasn't surprised about Lyn, but it was a neat twist to the theme of Alt Clark. I think a sequel would be a very good idea.
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He ponders that. "It depends on the circumstances. If she needed help, I'd help her."
"What if she didn't want your help?" OOOH!!!!!  This *is* Lois!!!!!!  Yay!!! Now that I know it's Lois!!! "In my wildest dreams? She'd be even more wonderful than the imposter, and she'd like me enough to go out with me... maybe more, someday." AWWWWWW!!!! "Um, well... I really can't. It's, um, always such a hassle for me to eat out." Awwww! Poor Clark! (There isn't a limit on the graemlin per post... you know besides the total graemlin limit... right?  ) He grins. "In the meantime -- Lyn -- how about you and I go out to dinner?"
I grin back. "I'd like that -- Superman. I think we have a lot to talk about." Awwwwww!!!! Great job, Pam!!!! D'oh! Why didn't I think to ask for a sequel too?! Well... Pam... what happens on that date? 
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I just loved it, Pam, incredibly WAFFY and well written.
Thanks for this,
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Sweet, Pam! Like Wendy, I think the first person/present tense worked prefectly for this story (which surprised me, seeing as I usually don't like either one, especially when they're combined <g>). And I absolutely *love* how Lois decided to 'feel him out' before revealing herself. And the fact that she had a crush on him from afar certainly helped the start of their relationship. No trying to wear down the barriers of 'who do you think you are, trying to control...everything?' Great job! Bethy (who wouldn't mind a sequel, but also thinks this stands perfectly well on its own)
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Very nice, Pam. I guessed a few paragraphs before Clark did - which of course made me feel very clever and upped the enjoyment level even more  . Very sweet, and a lovely happy ending for altClark. But...how dare you be nice to my number one torture victim? Don't you know the rule - that altClark is destined to be eternally unhappy? <g> Yvonne
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LIke Yvonne, I guessed it a couple of paragraphs before and so feel good about my deductive powers.
This was really nice and sweet.
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SQUEE!!!!!! Aw, Waffyness! I have to admit, I was guessing althroughout, and by the time she revealed herself, I'd been almost convinced it *wasn't* her But hey, gimme a break, I haven't had breakfast yet! I love a good Alt Romance!  --Mary, who will now go eat breakfast
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