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Great part, Wendy! He showed her. <g>

This line made me think of Peter Pan - I could just see Clark in green tights and a wooden sword doing somersaults in the air. (/me tries to picture Lois as Tinkerbell)

Wow. I guess I saw it coming, because it was pretty obvious in the second part that she didn't try to fake her death - doing so by walking into a lake is usually not a good plan simply because then it wouldn't be fake. <g> I was leaning more towards thinking he scared her so much (maybe raped her?) that she tried to kill herself. Doesn't explaing the pills, though - she's not the type of person to kill herself and make it look like an accident. It was also pretty clear that the news report was false - Lois was threatened so many times already, that if she does die young it probably won't be like this. Um, I forget what my point was.

Oh, wait, yes - I guess I wasn't too surprised Lex tried to kill her because there was forshadowing, but I expected her to try and avoid telling Clark. Maybe to deal with this herself - she's so independent. Although she doesn't have too may resources now, but I'm sure she'd find a way to get along.

LOL.

LOL. Really? What about Hicksville? I'm not sure where it is, but I think it's also somewhere in Ireland. And if you think about it, Kitchener is funny, too. <g>

Aw... I feel so bad for her. Poor Lois.

Again, great part. I love this. Please sort it out soon!

Julie

This is great, Wendy!
This is one of the most unusual revelation I never read. Obviously this is the perfect situation for a carefree revelation: Lois is barely alive, nearly killed by her husband, all alone on a rock in the middle of a lake big as a sea, and the guy has just saved her life!
Probably if star reporter Lois Lane, with a notepad in an hand and a pen in the other in front of The Planet building, muttering about silly assignment, tells you "I'm doing a research: what is your favourite way for travel?", you don't go to say "Flying,but on my own steam", even if you are in love with her and think she likes you too.

YES! Finally the truth is out and all is right in the world! I like my characters on part (usually), and a Lex Luthor who's not trying to kill his wife sounds wrong, somehow.

Well, this is our Lois: invulnerable. On the surface.


So we're going to have a Lois- Smallville meeting? I'm looking forward to it!

Simona

Nice Wendy. This is a very different take on things but so far I like it. Laura

Hi,

Great part.

Yeah!!

He revealed himself to her; she's going to hide out so Lex thinks she's dead (maybe); Lois is going to meet MA and PA Kent; eventually they'll kiss!

Can't wait for the next part!!

AWWWWWW!!!!

Show off!!

Awwww!!

/me throws a quarter into the jar...

Ah... that's our naive little Clark. *clink* *clink*

Smallville!!

Sara

Wendy,
I apologize but I have to start with a nitpick:
I think the last ‘her’ and ‘him’ need to be exchanged.

This was a great part, although I’m not really sure why Clark is so reluctant to reveal his other powers to Lois as she seemed to accept the flying very enthusiastically. I got the thing about the heat-vision and starting fires so I’m guessing there’s a back story there as Clark is a writer and could figure out a less extreme way of phrasing that.

Yeah, I to figured Lex tried to kill Lois but I’m really curios to find out why he would do that when they’ve only been married for what, a couple of months? Plus, Lois is not a reporter at the moment and while we all know she doesn’t love Lex and realized she may be falling for another man I just can’t seem to figure Lex motivation here. Yeah, I know, he’s a monster. But he’s usually a very sophisticated and calculated monster. I just have to insert the definitive Lex quote here:
I guess what I’m trying to say is that I’m really looking forward to finding out all these details.

I wonder how Lois and Clark are going to resolve this as Lois will have to stay in Smallville and Clark has not yet secured the position or resources to conduct an investigation into Lex’s affairs. I guess Lois could help him out with the resources bit – supply him with contacts and snitches – but I’d assume Lois’ ‘death’ would really hamper those relationships.

I’m really looking forward to Smallville – can’t wait to see Martha and Jonathan’s reactions to Clark just dropping down with a visitor. I also have a feeling that once both are over the shock they’ll be a great help in brain-storming about the plan of attack.

Looking forward to the next part,
Avia

Expecting eagerly next part Wendy!!

I'm curious why Lex tried to kill Lois, although I can't deny I have a theory

Jose

Wendy

WOW! This is superbly written.

Tricia

Everything is right in the world - well, almost - Lex is a monster, Lois and Clark are together and in love each other and Lois knows Clark's secret. Where we are going from now on?

I'm looking forward for the next part. Smallville is the perfect place to Lois hide of Lex. And to a kiss, too.

Post soon, please! The sooner, the better.

~Andreia

Lex is starting to worry me. As a control freak, it seemed uncharacteristic of him not to make sure Lois was indeed dead. All that obvious planning went for nought.But why kill(or in this case, try to kill) her?Controlling personalities are by nature, domineering. With her dead, what is the pleasure?
If Lex delegated the job to rid himself of Lois to others, it's time he hired better help.

He told her! Hooray! Lois was really calm about it too.

Now she has to get back in the game and take down Luthor!

~Liz

OMG, Lex tried to KILL her?!?!

I knew Lex tried to kill her! Part of me *really* hopes it was because Lois told him she wanted a divorce--think what Clark would think when he heard that! I am surprised that Lex didn't succeed, though, or that he'd do something so... less than foolproof. Also that he'd actually do it himself. He always seems to cover his tracks so well. Hey, once Lex dies in a tragic pancake-cooking incident, can Lois and Clark marry and get to live on the island? Or at least keep it as a summer home?

Lois's coughing and choking seemed realistic--I remember getting frustrated in a Smallville episode when somebody who had been almost strangled started talking again normally a few minutes later. Although Clark's concern for Lois craning her neck seemed odd--don't we all look up into the sky often enough? Unless it's because she'd just been injured.

I'm so excited that Clark is taking her to Smallville! She can meet his parents while wearing dirty, stinking, wet clothes, which puts her on an excellent footing to start with. And, of course, they've figured out by this time that Clark is in love with her, so Martha's little hints in that direction should be fun. *grin* But, seriously, I love the Kents, and I look forward to Lois hiding out there. And unlike in versions of Lois and Clark where Lois and Clark are partners, since there's nothing to link Clark to Lois, there doesn't seem any reason Lex'd think to look there for her. Yay!

And Lois knowing about Clark's powers from the get-go should be... fun. Lots of fun. I look forward to the next part! Lois needs to spend some quality Clark-time recovering, then go prove that Lex tried to kill her!

That's what I was thinking, too-- she must have told Lex she wanted a divorce, and he decided that if she didn't want to be married to him, he could take care of that for her. I was right, then-- Lex is a villian and he tried to kill her.

Pretty scary-- he forced her to drink something that was drugged, huh? Can you even imagine how scary that would be? She knew she didn't love him, and wanted to ask for a divorce, but had no reason at all to think that he'd react in such a way. No inkling at all. At most, she may have thought he'd be upset about it, if he loved her and wanted to stay married. So then he probably smiled that ruthless smile he can do (which she probably never saw before) and then drags her into the kitchen, etc., etc. I guess he walked her down to the water, huh-- stumbling, unsteady footsteps would back up the "fuzzy from sleeping pills" scenario nicely, wouldn't it? And his footprints, as I said earlier, could be the down-to-the-lake-and-back trail of the husband trying to find his wife. I guess if she was really out of it, he just tossed her in, huh? Although he'd have to get her out far enough so she wouldn't just get carried back into shore.

As to the rest of this section-- Wendy, this is just utterly charming!! I really liked the whole conversation, interspersed with Lois' continuing recovery (after a fashion). What a neat way to set up a revelation! No angst on Lois' part because he didn't trust her enough to tell her, led her on for months, etc., etc. No angst on Clark's part-- no Superman to compete with and no worry that she might print it. It was just fun, and funny, and charming! And that's our girl, isn't she-- a little honest, old-fashioned awe, but more toward the neat view than toward the impossible-but-gee-it's-really-true flying man. Actually, that's how I always thought Lois should have been written-- genuine awe but not so much hero-worship (although that would've diluted the whole "triangle build for two" setup, right?).

More! More! (Soon? )

~Toc

All right, I'm just really quickly flying by here. I'm trying my best to catch up - which is quite hard on dial-up and a two-month absence - and I'm quite enjoying this story.

For one thing, it is quite original. The whole triangle between Lois, Lex and Clark is excellent. At first you showed us a Lex that seemed to be threating Lois well, and then suddenly he's trying to murder her? There are two options here, I think. Either Lois told him she wanted a divorce or Lex found out Lois had been seeing another man on the beach. Both is possible too, of course. And while I was pretty sure Lois wasn't dead and Clark would find her in time, right now I haven't a clue how you're going to solve this - besides the happy ending that sure is to come after a long while of evil suffering.

Thanks for getting me hooked, and thus making sure I'm getting back into things so far away from home!

But you can post the next part now. <g>

Sas

Wow! Thank you all again, very much indeed!! It's much more of a North American name. The weird thing about Inch is that its name means exactly the same in Irish - an inse = inch. Many strange-sounding Irish place-names make perfect sense once you realise their Irish-language origin and translate them, but not that one. Take Dublin, for example, which is an Anglicisation of Dubh linn, or 'black pool' - referring to the Liffey river as it was when the Vikings invaded over 1000 years ago.

Anyway... back to the point. Sarah, I'm glad you found Lois's still-recovering behaviour convincing. Phew! As my BRs know, it took me a few tries to make that one better.

SJH, why wouldn't Lex make sure Lois was dead? Well, if you think about it, she should have been. I mean, she was drugged and in the lake. She was close to death when Clark found her. Okay, she was clinging to a branch, which was probably all that stopped her from drowning - but if Clark hadn't found her she'd have died from hypothermia very soon after. Why would Lex imagine that anyone would save her? Okay, a helicopter was out searching for her, but - as you saw - there really wasn't much of a search-and-rescue mission going on. And I'd hazard that he didn't raise the alarm for her disappearance until some time after he'd pushed her into the lake. Until he was pretty sure that she was long dead.

Thank you all again very much, guys! Part 4 will be up soon.


Wendy