Thanks for the feedback, MrsMosley and Laurach!
I would have responded sooner, but RL has been insane this week. I haven't had more than a half hour to myself since last Monday night.
Sadly, on Tuesday, I reread this and realized that I have no business posting stories when I'm up as I'm suffering from insomnia for the second night in a row (as I did with this last Monday). I have now corrected a ton of grammatical issues with this story as well as the POV problem. The second part of the story is still told from Clark's grandfather (I wrote a version with it from Clark's POV, but it didn't work very well), but now at least I don't change POV randomly through that scene, so hopefully it will be less confusing.
I'm glad you both liked this even it's sad, messy state!
