I'd like to echo everyone else's sentiments. It's easy to see from your story that they truly could not be happy until they were together. Also, that's a very interesting ending with them choosing which world to live in next. I never would have thought of the soul mates idea like that.
I only have one suggestion. For the reader's sake, I'd suggest dividing the sections between Lois' story and Clark's. It was a little confusing reading it without section breaks.
~Kristen
Joey: If he doesn't like you, then this is all just a moo point. Rachel: A moo point? Joey: Yeah, it's like a cow's opinion, you know, it just doesn't matter. It's "moo." Rachel: Have I been living with him for too long, or did that all just make sense?
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