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Okay, first let me say, I read Take 1 and Take 2 simutaneously. Or more precisely side by side. (Consider that one of my quirks.) That said...

I thought the raspberry / blueberry syrup switch was pretty cute...

Is it short hair... or long hair....

Then I as I read those stories further I was in tears... (I'm glad Mrs. Mosley could laugh.) SERIOUS WHAM warning please!! I really wasn't in the mood for tears tonight. Not at all. I don't mind reading stories like this. I just like to be prepared to 'steel' myself against the coming onslaught.


As I usually try to do, I type my thoughts before I actually post feedback. Before I reached the end of Take 1 and Take 2, I had written this:

Very well written, but you just topped my list for saddest stories ever. The one that used to be first drove me away from reading fanfic for a long time. I won't let that happen again, but I wish I hadn't read your stories.

But then you left the reader thinking that things were going to get better, and that improved the situation, so the other story once again tops my list of saddest stories. I've got to tell you, though, that I almost stopped reading the stories all together. And I would have hated not to have read the entire story(ies). You need to put a wham warning that part of this is a sad story - please - to prepare us poor folks that don't handle the tears very well. I'm a premenopausal female, for God's sake. I can only take so much... It would also be nice if tell us that things have the possibility to get better or at least tell us it's an altered timestream.


Who does Lois think she is digging around in someone's brain? He should have had permanent damage! And she opened his skull up? Go get Bernie to help you, woman! Digging around in someone's brain is what killed Abraham Lincoln. He probably would have lived if those so called docs had left the bullet alone. Of course the sliver of kryptonite had to be removed from Clark's brain - Lois just wasn't qualified.

I would say Take 2 is the better story. I won't say 'liked'.

All the sudden in Take 1 there's a clone? Oh, please... And she married it / him? And if he's a clone, why would the hot water of the shower scald him? Never mind - you explained that in Resolution.

KJ Clarkson? Please tell me you wrote this before Kelly Clarkson won American Idol?

Dan Scardino? Arrggghhhh.....


This is hard to read like this:

I'd suggest ... ready for," he pauses, grins, and nudges my elbow, "but I .....


Bernie and Lana? The Lana? What a hoot!


Maybe Doc Klein is Marty McFly's doc...


Determinist Universe - I like that phrase


And we're off to see the wizard.... Sorry, I just couldn't resist...