Welcome to the boards! And congrats on your first story! You really had me going there for awhile. I had no idea how they were going to get out of this predicament. And then you threw the dream curveball.
You are a very talented writer. I was with them all the way with the anguish and fear. Very well done!
But I must say, this screams epilogue, or another part, or a sequel, or something. He may have had his worst nightmare realized, well...in a nightmare, but he still didn't tell her. What's he going to do now that he had this terrible dream? Although, it could stay as it is. Not every story has a revelation. Maybe I was just thrown off by the wrapping up of the story sooner than I expected.
You had me confused when you ended the part with "The End". I thought this was going to be the second part of 5. But after I took a second look, I'm guessing this was the last four parts. I assume this could have just been part 2/2, but I don't know how you organized it so that's all up to you.
I really liked this. You really had me believing that it was all real. I was sitting here wondering how you were going to get them out of it. I hope to see more from you in the future.
~Kristen
