I believe this story has a lot of potential. Your ideas are lovely. For some reason, I especially like the beginning.
I suggest that you should look for a BR (I'm afraid I don't have the time to offer myself, much as I'd like to) and, call me insatiable if you want, maybe you could make it a little bit longer? It can never hurt.
Looking forward to seeing your next story,
AnnaBtG.
