Hi,
That was a nice ending, but I also thought that you wrapped it up too fast.
I'd liked to have seen Clark talking his problems out with Lois more. Perhaps telling her a little more of what happened on New Kryton.
I felt that Clark sorted out his problem alone, with just the help of Dr Friskin, but we just learned about that from the narrative. I think at least one scene with Clark and Dr Friskin would have been good.
I also wished that we could have seen a little more input from Lois... or perhaps Martha in helping him come to terms with his problems.
But on the whole, I enjoyed your story. Hope to see a sequel.
Yours Jenni
