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Sorry. Wait. Hold on. I just have to go knock the smoke detector from the wall. There. I've got it now. Darn. It always seems to go off when I read Sue S. stories. I wonder why that is. It's like the room heats up to uncomfortable levels for that poor piece of machinery or something.

I love the imagery with the coat. How romantic. How Clark. How much I want it to rain right now. Sigh. This is a very interesting combination with Lynn S.M.'s recent (Semi)Annual Safety Seminar piece. It does leave me wondering though, is Perry up in the office curious where the hottest team in town disappeared off to during the fire drill? And did one of those smokers drop a bud in the wrong place (like on under a car with a leak), and poor Lois and Clark will be interrupted by a real fire in the parking garage? That would be a shame, because I'm thinking they're just starting to warm up.

OK, now I'm distracted.

Short, sweet and smokin'.

Such a treat in the morning! HooHa, that was great. Keep throwing those little gems our way, anytime.

Artemis

I, for one, feel that the burden of un-betaed Sue stories is one that we may all suffer to bear.

Then again, I guess that all depends on your definition of suffer.

This is one of those short stories that is perfect in its length and scope. That is not an easy thing to accomplish!

The real trouble with your stories, Sue, is that the only thing better than a new story is more new stories! It's a vicious cycle.

As far as actual feedback goes...The imagery in this story was fantastic. You have an amazing knack for getting in the characters' heads. These "everyday life" scenes are some of my favorite stories.

Amber

Whew! Steamy! Love the vivid imagery. (I was going to use another exclamation mark, but I figured that would be overkill.)

I wonder whether anyone else noticed them. It doesn't sound like they were out of sight of the rest of the group. I'm not so sure that Perry is going to be wondering where they are. I think that he'd be more surprised to see them heading back into the newsroom.

I don't know that I've read anyone dealing with this aspect of PML before. Everything went the same, Clark resisted Lois, "nothing happened", but why would neither of them be thinking about it afterwards? I love it.

Great story! I have always wondered why the scenes from Pheromone, My Lovely never seemed to have any long-lasting impact on either Lois or Clark. I'm glad that this time they did.

I really like your version!

I always thought it was that they were just too embarrassed about the events, and they had a mutual unspoken pact not to bring it up.

As Sue has pointed out in several other fics besides this fine one, OF COURSE they would think about it. Both Lois and Clark would wonder what might have happened during the pheromone incident if they had done something different.

I'm glad that in this fic, they get the courage to ditch the unspoken mutual pact, and start speaking about it. And acting on it. Yay for Sue!

Some fire drill you organized for them Sue Can I have one, please?

Awww I love it. So sweet, romantic and oh so cute!

Have you ever had one of those weekends where you thought you had plenty of time to get everything done, and then, suddenly, it's Sunday night and you have no idea where the time went? I'm leaving town on Tuesday and I'm probably going to be up for the next 48 hours to get everything on my to-do list done. It's been killing me that I haven't been able to reply to all your wonderful comments.

Virginia - Hot flashes? LOL! I loved the imagery with the coat, too. I wanted something like that scene at the beginning of 'AKA Superman' when he gets possessive and bumps her up against the wall while they're waiting for the elevator. But I couldn't justify Clark getting *that* possessive (not in the first season, anyway), so I settled for him using the coat to pull her to him. That's a very happy mental image, at least for me.

Shallowford - I'm happy to have distracted you.

Artemis - I've always maintained you deserve a treat.

Amber - It is a vicious cycle for me, too. I write something. I get lovely FDK. That makes me want to write something else… So you can blame yourself the next time I write another one. :p

Mrs M - In my mind, no one else saw them. Lois went to the far end of the garage, so they were well away (and behind a long row of vehicles). As for Perry, he was behind them on the way out and, no doubt, saw Lois was carrying her purse. I think he'd be more surprised to see them return than by their absence, especially given the long wait to get back inside. Gosh, I hope there are other stories out there that acknowledge that there's no way they could just ignore everything that had happened! Sure, they might not act on it, but how could you not think about it?

Lucille - I wondered that, too. I'm glad you enjoyed this version.

Iolan - I can see your point about being too embarrassed -- Lois that it had ever happened, and Clark that he gave in to temptation. But, dang it, I wanted them to have to acknowledge it! It wasn't hard to have Clark tortured by his memories. I tried to layer the story with the idea that Lois *did* remember a little something and it was driving her nuts.

Kate - Can you have one? Sure, I'll pull the alarm and send them all outside again. Maybe this time they can sit in her car to keep warm…

Jackie - Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

My thanks to everyone who's replied. You guys are the best!

*finishes ficlet*

*turns on fan* Whew, it's hot in here.

She didn't get a glimpse of what was UNDER the collar, did she?

This was one of the best examples of turning up the heat slowly since Labrat's Burnout.

Oh Clarkie ...

It is funny that she didn't think about the time at the airport as well. But he is sooo attracted to her! Happy chuckles!

Why, why, why weren't you writing on the show? I love the distraction, the sudden kiss, and slow admission of attraction.
You know, I've never thought about it before, but Lois' wardrobe at the beginning of season 1 was fullof longer skirts. When exactly did she shift to mini skirts?
Clark is such a guy.
It's the little details that make us fall in love with your stories.

Thank you. More please.
B

OH! Waffykins!!

Obviously, I loved it. As a student, I'm subjected to frequent fire/bomb/lockdown drills, and I guarantee you, it is most certainly ALWAYS raining.

It's unfortunate that men like Clark don't go to my school...


Sooooo, then what happened?

Great job on this story. It's a good place holder while we wait for part 19...

Hi!

Kismatt - While Lois may not have seen what was under his collar, she has had a tantalizing look at it in the past (when he answered the door in nothing but a towel in the pilot episode). <sigh>

Morgana - If she'd thought about that time at the airport, this would have turned into a revelation fic, and I was trying to avoid that. I figured if she never made the connection after he threw on the bed in HiM, then she wasn't going to make it. Many thanks for the comparison to LabRat.

BJ - Hey you! I'd vote for anyone on these boards to have written for the show. We seem to have a more focused grasp on the characters than the writers did. Maybe it's a practice makes perfect kind of thing. As for her miniskirts, it seems like she did wear a few in the first season, but by the third season there were a lot of them. To me, there's just no way Clark could drop the innuendoes that he does and not have a semi-dirty mind. Thank you for the compliments.

Mrs Luthor - Last year, just before the prompts were posted for the fall ficathon, we had a fire drill on a rainy day. When I saw "cold rain" in the list of prompts, I knew what the story would be. Heh. It's like Clark reimagining the Dance of the Seven Veils night after night. You get to decide what happens next.

My undying to gratitude to everyone who's left comments. Thank you!

Yeah, I know I've been MIA from the boards for a while... but I was sneaking around the TOCs to see what I've missed and came across a Sue S. story, which I knew I had to read. I was not disappointed.

Thanks, mozart! It's good to have you back.

Hehe! Clark's in trooooouble!



<sigh> Me too.

Mmmmhmmmm!

Awwww!

<fans self>





<stands in front of the air conditioner to cool off>

Mmm...cold rain but soooo hot! Nicely done!

Thanks, DC! I apologize I didn't make it for the fall ficathon, but better late than never, right?