Okay--erm, so there's this folc---but this folc's not me, it's a friend of mine. Yeah, that's it--a friend of mine. And I--I mean, *my friend* wrote this fic and...

Okay, I confess: it's me. I got this idea for a premise, and after kicking it around in my head for a long time, I eventually decided to write a fic about it. I call this fic my melancholy baby: it has a shape like a melon and a face like a collie. It's a very rough draft, and I have no clue what to do for an ending. This might even be a job for *two* beta readers.

The fic is roughly PG for violenceishness, maybe a hint of a drop of sexuality, mild language, and a very sick...but that would be telling.

This is NOT a comedy. It might be considered drama, but I'm not sure.

Like I said, it's very rough and it needs an ending. It may also need a plot...

So are there any brave souls who want to volunteer?

Okay, I know it's monday and this thread has only been up for about a day, but I can't shake the feeling that I'm being ignored. Did I scare everyone off with the description of my story?

I wouldn't say it's "atrocious"; in fact, I think the premise is really cool. I just need someone to look it over and

1. Help me use better words and phrasing wherever possible

2. Check for charictarization(sp?)

3. Help me think of an ending. (I have a very vague idea of the ending; I just need help. I'm mean, it's obvious that he's going to--- and then, naturally, they'd--- but the question is how do they---? And what do they do about---?)

There's only one instance of language; it's very mild, and I'm thinking of ommiting it. There's nothing graphic in it, either. It's only PG.
It isn't all that long, either! Readable in one sitting. (of course, it does lack an ending)

So could someone please give me a hand?

If no one responds to this thread by the end of a week (i.e. end of next monday) I'm going to post it anyway. Trust me, that is a threat.

I think everyone is just pretty busy, but since I have some spare time right now between semesters, I'd love to beta-read for you.

Julie

THANKYOUthankyouTHANKYOUthankyouTHANKYOU!!! Muchas Gracias, Mer ci! I'll send it to you right away!

Hi Queen of the Capes,

I've sent you an e-mail to your addy on monday morning and was just wondering if you ever got it, since you mention that you didn't get any feedback.

Just in case I'll post it here again:

So if you still need someone, I would be glad to help you.

Ines

Eh heh heh, oops.
Note to self: check email more often.

Thanks for your offer, Ines; and a thankyou to Melisa too. I think I'll stick with Julie for the time being, though. But if she gets frustrated and quits, I'll email you. okay?

Okay, no problem.
Good luck with the story.

Ines