I was aiming for poignant, but I hope it wasn't too over the top.

All feedback appreciated.

Nope. It was just right.

Whew. Thanks, Morgana.

Very touching. I could feel the tears prick in my eyes. Well done, Lynn

Hello Barbara,

Thank you. I really appreciate your taking the time and energy to leave feedback, not just for this story but for all my stories. Thanks for "feeding the writer."

Be well,
Lynn

You're welcome. I know how much a writer relies on this kind of food.

Excellent work, Lynn. You showed us her tragedy without wallowing or being maudlin. I envisioned a girl of about fifteen in this story who will miss her parents and her brother for the rest of her life. We don't even know what happened, just that it was probably abrupt, and it's still too raw for her to say the words even to herself. I had pinpricks in my eyes at the end.

I wish I could have learned how to write like this when I was younger.

Hello Terry,

Thank you for coming back from semi-retirement from this site to read and comment on my story. I am honoured.

I envision the tragedy being a car accident involving her parents and her brother, but since I deliberately left the inciting incident out of the story, my thoughts on it aren't canon; imagine whatever you wish.

Your kind words have made my day.

Joy,
Lynn