Rachel-Watching: Comments - Lois & Clark Fanfic Message Boards

Kaylle

Thanks for reposting!

A great start! I love the premise.

Rachel and Cal definitely remind me of two other people.

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She shuddered. No more nights on the roof. Decisively, she smiled at Alan. "I'd love to."

Yikes! I have a feeling that I'm not going to like Alan. :rolleyes:

I'm looking forward to reading the next part.

Tricia

Wow, Kaylle, great start. Although I don't like the sound of things that you aren't going to give us a definite ending... especially because I'm seeing a bit of Lois and Clark in Caleb and Rachel. I really like the title and how you're fitting the "watching" part into the fic. I mean, of course we know in real life that people who watch the objects of their love/lust all the time are really scary stalkers, in fiction they're always handsome (or beautiful) and wonderful people. If only we had some assurance that you were going to make it all right at the end. As for Alan... maybe he'll be the impetus to get Caleb off his butt.

Next part soon!

Glad you guys are enjoying this

My apologies again for the delay in putting it back up.

And of course, watchers are scary in real life (this was something my classmates brought up... they wanted Caleb to be reading Rachel's email and spying on her <g>), but I figure this guy's pretty harmless

Part Two should be up in a few minutes

Thanks, guys!
Kaylle

Oh dear... Caleb really blew it!

Please post part 3 soon, Kaylle, the suspense is killing me!

Kaylle

WOW! This is great.

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What he didn't understand was how difficult it would be to escape that role of the safe, platonic friend. He'd been Rachel-watching so long that watching was all he could do. Marty had been wrong. Sooner or later, Rachel needed to be pushed.

And it looks like Alan is willing to do the pushing.

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"Or easy," he confirmed, shrugging as casually as he could manage. "Otherwise he'd never have gotten you just by flashing those baby blue eyes and feeding you bad Italian food. God, if I'd known it was so simple, maybe I'd have tried it."

Yikes!

I think Caleb may just have lost any chance he had with Rachel.

I can't wait to read the last part.
Please post it soon.

Tricia

Kaylle, this was a beautiful story. I just read the last part. Thanks for sharing.

The 'open' ending doesn't bother me at all. In fact, I think it's perfect! You've described that scene so wonderfully.