FDK: I Can't Believe It's Not Real Life pt 2 - 04/30/03 11:14 PM
Re: FDK: I Can't Believe It's Not Real Life pt 2 - 05/02/03 07:13 AM
Nick is hilarious!!! Can you bottle him and sell him? *grin* I really enjoy his character, especially. Wasn't as huge on the singing scene, until we got into Nick's comments on it. Oh, loved the directions about the actor playing Nick, being the perfect mime, will have no trouble banging into the wall... couldn't help laughing. 
And as for Amy meeting Snow every day, Dave coming in every day... the implication that Nick is seeing "through" the play, which must be performed frequently, is really neat. I like the part where he comments on members of the audience. It's interesting, at least. I liked the thing about the "slice of life" and pizzeria, and then about it being cheesy. I'd make it a *little* more subtle, though, if possible?
Anyway, definitely enjoying this. Post more soon!
And as for Amy meeting Snow every day, Dave coming in every day... the implication that Nick is seeing "through" the play, which must be performed frequently, is really neat. I like the part where he comments on members of the audience. It's interesting, at least. I liked the thing about the "slice of life" and pizzeria, and then about it being cheesy. I'd make it a *little* more subtle, though, if possible?
Anyway, definitely enjoying this. Post more soon!
Re: FDK: I Can't Believe It's Not Real Life pt 2 - 05/02/03 01:35 PM
Enjoying this too. Yep, I like Nick...
metwin1
metwin1
Re: FDK: I Can't Believe It's Not Real Life pt 2 - 05/05/03 11:22 PM
thanks for the FDK, sarah. glad you like nick, too. he's my favorite. 
definitely glad you enjoyed my playing with the fourth wall and the reality of the play. that's the heart of what's going on.
what do you mean about being "more subtle," though? i just sort of wrote those lines in because they felt natural. so... subtle, how?
twin1, thanks for the comments. glad to hear you're enjoying it.
part 3 coming right up.
Paul
definitely glad you enjoyed my playing with the fourth wall and the reality of the play. that's the heart of what's going on.what do you mean about being "more subtle," though? i just sort of wrote those lines in because they felt natural. so... subtle, how?
twin1, thanks for the comments. glad to hear you're enjoying it.
part 3 coming right up.
Paul
Re: FDK: I Can't Believe It's Not Real Life pt 2 - 05/06/03 10:49 PM
ROFL!
I was NOT expecting this! It's great!
LOL! Very brave to have a character say something like that!
And I like the fact that we have verification -- sort of -- of Nick's world-view.
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NICK
There really is no wall there. I'll prove it to you. <Gets up, if he hasn't already done so, and walks towards the audience. The actor, being a brilliant mime, should have no trouble having Nick “slam into” the “fourth wall.”> Ow!
There really is no wall there. I'll prove it to you. <Gets up, if he hasn't already done so, and walks towards the audience. The actor, being a brilliant mime, should have no trouble having Nick “slam into” the “fourth wall.”> Ow!
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AMY
But if this is a play, it doesn't seem to have much of a plot.
But if this is a play, it doesn't seem to have much of a plot.
And I like the fact that we have verification -- sort of -- of Nick's world-view.
Re: FDK: I Can't Believe It's Not Real Life pt 2 - 05/08/03 11:11 PM
rivka, thanks for your comments on part 1. glad you liked it, and that you felt the setting was realistic. otoh, i have a feeling geothermal pizza is rather unique, if only for the name and the oven... 
glad you liked nick's fourth wall interaction in this part. as i said to sarah, playing with the reality of the play is really what it's all about. does make it easier to have critical lines, though. after all, they're not criticizing my play, they're criticizing the one they're in.
as to verification of nick's world-view, see part 4.
Paul
otoh, i have a feeling geothermal pizza is rather unique, if only for the name and the oven... glad you liked nick's fourth wall interaction in this part. as i said to sarah, playing with the reality of the play is really what it's all about. does make it easier to have critical lines, though.
after all, they're not criticizing my play, they're criticizing the one they're in. as to verification of nick's world-view, see part 4.
Paul