Sue, this was wonderful. I loved the cuteness of the ceremony.

Please tell us which idea was which. What was DJ's challenge? What was your neighbor's idea?

Oh boy, I really can see K Callans face in my head right now

Poor Mayson. Although of course Lois is the only woman in Clarks life, I nevertheless liked her. She was a nice young lady who fell in love with a nice young guy. Her only fault was it not to see that she never had a chance at all

oh, that's sweet

Finally *lol*

Love it! Everything about it was just perfect, Sue. Mickey, the lurid shirts, Martha's incredulous introduction, Reverend Bob's puffs of white hair, Clark's authentic kiss, Lois's rambling thoughts about her clothes, and best of all, the fact that they're married and we're still only on Part 1! Can't wait to see what happens next.

Yvonne

Oh, I love it! I think I did a jaw drop halfway through. The last thing in the world I expected was for Mickey to help them LOL.

And this ending just killed! Can't wait to find out what happens next.

JD

Yeah, what Yvonne said! This is off to a really great start. So get working on a really great ending to match, d'ya hear??

PJ

Oh, boy. What could they have possibly gotten themselves into that Superman couldn't get them out of?

Can't wait to see the next part. And light a fire under that muse of yours! We don't want this to be an orphan, especially with this terrific start, now, do we?

No, we don't.

ACK! What a beginning! You certainly do know how to hook someone's interest.

Too funny. Poor Lois! Lucky Clark. :p (Actually, Lucky Lois, too!)

A very sweet ceremony. And you always didn't know how to end a chapter on a bang:

Love it!

I had just written quite a lot of feedback, and I had come to this little passage:

I was going to add one of these: , when suddenly all my feedback just disappeared! Everything that was left was the goofy icon! Now I have to add this icon:

Sooo... Sue, this was a brilliant first chapter. Great, but incredibly scary opening. Loved Lois's impulsive insistence that they'd follow Mickey to Las Vegas. Loved Clark having a window seat close to the front of the plane (me, the claustrophobiac, have to have an aisle seat close to the front). Loved how Lois told Mickey that she and Clark had come to Las Vegas to elope, just because it was the first explanation she could think of. Love the minister, always happy to marry Mickey off for the second, third, or fourth time. (And I loved his white puffs of hair and bright pink skull, and this little piece of dialogue:)

Loved how you reminded us of the thugs accompanying Mickey and making sure Lois and Clark eloped as they said they would.

Loved how Lois got nervous as if she was getting married for real, and how Clark calmed her. Loved how she wished she had dressed better for her "wedding". (Oh, but it apparently turned out to be a real wedding after all... or at least Clark and Lois didn't get it annulled before they landed in hospital... suddenly that bit about "until death parts us" sounds really sinister!)

I absolutely loved the kiss that Clark gave Lois, and the way she reacted. And like everybody else, I loved that bit about how she had a crush on her husband.

Sorry I lost all your quotes, Sue. It was an adorable first chapter. Now, if you can just bring us to the end of the last chapter without letting anything unspeakably horrible happen to our favorite newlyweds...

Ann

A wonderful start, Sue. Although, as many others have mentioned, slightly worrying...

Why would Clark be in hospital too? I mean...he's Superman. Unless Mickey had Kryptonite somewhere...?

Anyway, fabulously done! I look forward to reading the next installment.

~Anna.

Hold it!!! Lois AND Clark are too ill to make medical descisions?!?!?!?! And Married!!!! It was truely priceless.

Can't wait for chapter 2.

Vonceil

oi... I wasn't supposed to be taking a break from working on Blizzard (which is how I was taking a break from working on something else, even *lol*) but I just *had* to when I saw this. Ooooooh! I am soooooo loving it! YAY!!

I'll be back with real actual FDK a little later (probably tomorrow on my lunch hour) - going back to that last part of the snow storm that's lasted through Spring and will spill into Summer if I don't get this done sooooon! *lol*

Just popped in for a look at the new fanfics and that last line had me grinning. Good times!

Hi Sue,

Great start. The wedding ceremony is so sweet, even though it wasn't exactly real. I'm hoping there won't be an annulment, or just a temporary one.

The trip to Vegas and the wedding were so cute that I almost forgot how this story started. I'm wondering what happens in the days in between.

Yours Jenni

Yes, you're over the hill and half-way there.

This was a great start Sue... and now I'm off to read the revision of part 3! I hope you were working on part 4 last night. <g>

-- DJ

Ahhhh, feedback. It takes so little time and yet it delights and thrills me for hours, days, weeks, months... That would be telling! We're almost to what DJ asked for and we're nowhere near what Brenda suggested. Once we pass those mileposts I'll clue you in. I've always had a fondness for Mayson. Lois? Not so much. She only tolerated Mayson. And even that was done grudgingly. Thanks, Yvonne! You managed to pick out all my favorite little details in just one sentence and it left me clapping my hands in glee. Was he being helpful? Or, as Clark is going to ponder in the next part, is he "just messing with them"? The ending *is* written. I start stories with a definite ending in mind and everything else is just getting to that point. The mind boggles, doesn't it? I'll give you a hint, it's not "Kryptonite". Lucky Lois, indeed! She's in Vegas, and she's just hit the jackpot (although she hasn't figured that out just yet). My theory is that he feels like he has to *watch* the ground below or the wings of the plane to feel comfortable. Heh. Heh. Heh. So many replies to that. But I don't want to get ahead of myself. I'm sorry you lost them too, but I'll soldier on somehow. <g> You did read the first bit, about them being in the hospital, right? I would say that something unspeakably horrible has happened to both of them... It's only a six part story and we've got a lot of ground to cover. Everything is going to go pretty fast. Blame it on my attention deficit disorder. Lara, this one's for you: Thanks! I'm glad y'all liked the last line. I was rather fond of it myself. All will be explained. And very soon. (See previous note about ADD) DJ, you know me well enough to know every dirty little reply that came to mind. Heh. Woody, if you're still reading, the next kiss is part of what DJ asked for. We've actually already accomplished one element she asked for, but it's a two-fer so...

Thanks again, you guys! I'll post a part each Monday (or sooner, if there's a demand <cough, cough> for them).

Each Monday???? Oh, please say you're teasing us, because you know that we "demand" to see part two a lot sooner than that! Like... today??

A new Sue's story!!!

Sue, when I see a new story of yours, I jump for joy. I do love anything you write.

Hehehe... Mickey isn't going to let them back out of this. He can be a villain, but right now I do like him.

WAFFy sigh.

I loved this line. Brilliant, Sue!

Andreia

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<strong> How about a new part each day?

Definition of ASAP

That's all I'm sayin'...
JD

Ah, Sue...you've gone and done it again! You've started another masterpiece!

So, this happens after the 'almost first date'? So, Clark isn't having to take insult after insult just to stay in Lois's good graces.

Now, why would Lois come up with an excuse like "We're in Vegas to get married" if she didn't have some subliminal desire that she won't openly fess up to. Oh, I cannot wait until the next part! And I can't wait to find out why the next of kin has been notified.

Hurry back girl! You know the drill...don't keep us waiting!

~Sheila

Another story of yours that will get me late to work. I only wanted to check the boards and found your story. Couldn't wait till tonight to read it.

Great start and I can't wait for the next part. Loved every word of it.

This was really a great line to start the story with!
And it's definitely a great story!



The perfect last line!!

I REALLY can't wait for next part, Monday??

See, now was that so hard? All I wanted was a little blinking icon. Oh, Andreia, I'm fairly certain you're going to revise that opinion before the story is over. No chance. But I will post part two shortly. Be assured, she's going to exorcise a lot of subliminal wishes. And so will Clark. Thanks! I thought it was a good attention-getter.

Thanks for reading along with me. I'll have part two up shortly.

Sorry for the late FDK. I was really hoping to get this to you before you posted the next part, but eh what can you do sometimes?

I’m convinced that you and DJ do things like this in your story just to get me riled up. You know by now that when you give me a nugget like this that it just going to drive me crazy until I figure it out. Then it will make me lament the whole time on their horrible and terrible situation, that YOU put them in. *cries* This is why you are evil. Lure me into a story and hit me with something like this right off. *sniff*

*whispers* You know I really love it when you do this. I know I’m a masochist.

He has to know by now that is exactly what she will do. He should learn not to ask questions like this or it’s just gonna give her ideas.

Haha, I would totally rub that in as well. Score one for Lois.

Don’t worry so do the rest of us. ^_^

I like the premise of this story so far. It seems like it will be a fun ride. *runs off to read the second part that was just posted*

*looks embarrassed* I said I'd come back, but I didn't...

I'm here now.

hehehehe! Oh, Clark, this is SO going to be worth the money. You just wait and see! *giggles madly*

I LOVE that the first thing that popped into her head is "we're eloping" - they could have been doing any number of things, really. hehe! Lois, Lois... don't you see your subconscious is doing all the talking here? Hope you listen to it!

erm... Lois? I just told you why. DUH.

insert small squee right here. YAY. I know, I know, I shouldn't get excited... I will anyway!

The whole ceremony was priceless! *dreamy sigh*

Brilliant!!

You know... she's going to have an insane fit of anger when she realizes she's married to Superman! :p

WOW! this is starting out very promisingly, and having already read the ending (giggle ) I'm glad to have been directed to this(I don't often hit the PG side )

Looking forward to the rest!

TEEEEEJ