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Posted By: Dandello FDK - After The Storm 7 - 03/26/07 07:28 AM
Please review... Pretty please? whinging
Posted By: ultragirl Re: FDK - After The Storm 7 - 03/26/07 03:32 PM
Hi Dandello!

I'm glad to see you've not forgotten about this story! I, for one, am still following it and still interested. I don't really have much of a critique in mind, but I will point out what I most liked. Somewhat ironically, what I like most is how you're handling Richard's character. It's a very human portrayal of him--that is, the reader can definitely sympathize with him and his emotions seem very real.

Mostly I just wanted to say--PLEASE post more soon! Don't leave us hanging for such long periods of time (if at all possible). Keep up the good work! hyper
Posted By: mervoparkite Re: FDK - After The Storm 7 - 03/26/07 04:10 PM
smile An update on After the storm!!! smile

Now that Lois had decided in favor of Clark/Superman I love how she treats him--loves him but still telling him what to do and how to take care of himself
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“Off with the jacket and the shirt,” she ordered. He’s just like Jason. A grown man as shy as a little boy when it comes to taking off his clothes. It’s a wonder we were able to make love.
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I’m not feeling so good, actually,” Clark said. He shivered when she put her hand between his shoulder blades. He wasn’t sweating, but he was very warm – too warm, even for him. She took his wrist, searching for a pulse with the first two fingers of her hand.

“Like I didn’t know where Jason got it from,” she muttered to herself as she gave up on his wrist and sought out a pulse at his throat. All the color had gone out of his face. “What’s your normal resting heart rate?”

“Forty-five or so… why?”

“Because Richard’s right. You look like hell and I think you’re running a fever.”

“But that’s…” Clark started.

Lois looked at him with eyebrows raised, waiting for him to finish – Impossible?

“Um, that’s not good, is it?” he said instead.
UhOh--echos of OUR Clark's illness. . .hope there is Someone around who can help him if he really has picked up some bug (or a sliver of Kryptonite still in his system.

Nice Job--Looking forward to another chapter of this ( and the other )soon. wave
Posted By: mariadferdez. Re: FDK - After The Storm 7 - 05/14/07 05:14 PM
Hi,

Great part! thumbsup


More ASAP, please.

MAF hyper
Posted By: Dandello Re: FDK - After The Storm 7 - 05/14/07 06:10 PM
Maria, you're back! I hope everything's okay for you. clap

I will get back to After the Storm, I promise. I have some research to do once I figure out what was going on in the story - it helps when the villain declares himself. eek
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