FDK: Longings of the Heart 2/3 - Lois & Clark Fanfic Message Boards

Oh, I just want to bash Lois over the head right now. Gah! She's just so wound up in her pain she can't see past her own experiences. Not that it isn't believable, just...

gah!

Of course it doesn't help that she believes that Clark doesn't love her...and who's fault is that!?!? Lunkhead!

Beautiful writing!

Awww. Another heart-breaker of a post. Poor Lois.

I demand that all toys be fixed and put back in the box when this is over.

(Kidding. If you leave us all heart-broken tomorrow, that's ok, too.)

JD

Poor Lois is so drowned in her pain that she's unable to see past that.

Stubborn Clark and lunkhead Lois need to talk and be honest about their feelings.

Andreia

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She shook her head, grabbing those feelings of longing by the collar and hurtling them into the closet in the back of her mind before slamming the door and locking it.

Definitely my favorite quote from this part. Ahh, what an image!

Otherwise, Lois is wavering between terrible cynicism and depresseion, because she is convinced that she isn't worthy of being loved. And Clark is so well-meaningly stubborn, thinking he mustn't declare his love for her and frighten her away (or something). Oh, what a miserable duet they are singing right now, Erin. But of course, there is a chapter left for you to fix it.

Ann

Nice chapter!

I very much enjoyed reading this. I'm looking forward to the conclusion.

Oh Erin - you had me wanting to cry right along with Lois. And I felt so sorry for Clark too because he just doesn't know what to do.

Lois loves him but thinks he only wants to be friends - and Clark loves her but thinks she can't be more than friends with him... at least for now.

If they would stop "thinking" and do a little more talking/listening... maybe they would figure these things out!

Aaargh!

ahem...

Anyway...I loved this part and I can't wait to see the conclusion tomorrow.

-- DJ

Oh, Erin, that was just beautiful! Hurry with part 3!

Very nice, Erin.

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Lois's throat tightened and tears blurred her vision. For once, she wished she could realize what that felt like--to have somebody love her so deeply, and love them just as much in return.

You lunkhead. He’s right under your nose.

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She was not what he'd call a morning person.

I understand that one.

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The familiar gentleness and compassion is Clark's voice wrapped around her like a warm blanket. He was there. Just like always.

Awww….

How absolutely poignant! I'm really loving this, Erin, and sooo happy you're writing again!!! Can't wait to read pt 3!!!

Jo

Yeah, what they said!

/me starts counting hours until "this afternoon"...

PJ

Poor Lois! But you know, I detest meddlers who do things to you "for your own good". More people's lives have been made miserable by meddlers than will ever be known, so I'm glad Lois wised up before she ruined Lucy's life and made an enemy of her sister.

So Lois finally realized that maybe true love really exists. Now let's see if she realizes her true love has been right under her nose all along, if only she'd open her eyes and look ...

Looking forward for the next part!

Nan

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He obviously cherished her and would treat her like a princess.

For the first time in her life, she felt jealous of Lucy. Happily-ever-after didn't seem to be something that existed in real life, but at least Lucy had a man willing to try for it.

Great second part, but this was my favourite bit. I've always liked how you take normal moments out of regular lives and make them a story that connects with the reader